走路— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Correct grammar (use present simple: "when I go to work") and avoid redundancy. Make a clear topic sentence then add one concise supporting detail. Use linking words if needed.

示例: Yes, I walk a lot, especially when I go to work. It takes me about 20 minutes each way, so walking is a convenient way to get exercise and save money on transport.

建议: Use past tense consistently (e.g., "I often went out"). Combine short sentences to improve coherence and avoid filler words. Provide one clear reason with a linking phrase.

示例: Definitely. I often went for walks after school with my friends because it helped me relax after lessons and chat about our day.

建议: Answer should be more natural and specific. Give relevant reasons (scenery, fresh air, exercise) and avoid unclear phrases. Use linking words and correct grammar ("in parks", "it helps to").

示例: People like walking in parks because the green surroundings and fresh air are relaxing, and it’s an easy way to get exercise. Also, parks often have benches and cafes where people can rest or have a meal afterwards.

建议: Keep the response concise and grammatically correct. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give 1–2 specific reasons using linking words. Avoid run-on sentences and unclear phrases ("their health relief pressure").

示例: I would like to take a long walk in a quiet city park early in the morning because the peaceful atmosphere helps me relieve stress and improves my fitness. I’d also enjoy chatting with friends or watching people exercise, which makes the walk more social.

建议: Use past tense for a recent activity (e.g., "lately I went to the park"). Be specific about time and details, use linking words, and correct grammar ("helps me", "watching people exercise"). Keep it within 3–4 sentences.

示例: Lately I went for a walk in the small park near my home, usually early in the morning. The quiet environment helps me relieve stress and stay fit, and I enjoy watching people exercise because it feels friendly and social.

× Yes, I walk a lot, especially when I going to work.

✓ Yes, I walk a lot, especially when I go to work.

The sentence uses 'going' where the simple present 'go' is required after 'when' for habitual actions. Use the base verb 'go' for present tense third-person singular? (here first person) so 'I go to work.' Replace 'going' with 'go' to match habitual present tense.

× I usually walk from my home to my workplace.

✓ I usually walk from my home to my workplace.

This sentence is grammatically correct; no change needed. It correctly uses the present simple to describe a habitual action.

× Definitely yes. I often go out to have a walk when I was a child, especially after school.

✓ Definitely yes. I often went out for a walk when I was a child, especially after school.

The clause refers to habitual actions in the past, so the past simple 'went' should be used (not present 'go'). Also use 'for a walk' (common collocation) instead of 'to have a walk.'

× I usually walk from school to my home with my friends.

✓ I usually walked from school to my home with my friends.

Describing a habitual action in childhood requires past simple 'walked' instead of present 'walk.'

× And then it can help me to relieve pressure from school.

✓ And it helped me relieve the pressure from school.

The sentence refers to past time so use past 'helped.' 'Relieve pressure' is the correct collocation; include 'the' before 'pressure' when referring to specific stress from school. Remove unnecessary 'to' after 'help.'

× I believe people like to walk in park because they usually have lunch or dinner after walking.

✓ I believe people like to walk in parks because they usually have lunch or dinner after walking.

Use the plural 'parks' or 'a park' rather than 'park' without an article. 'Walk in parks' is more natural when speaking generally. No tense change required.

× It can help to easy to.

✓ It can help them to relax.

The original is ungrammatical: 'easy' is an adjective and 'to' is misplaced. Clarify meaning: walking helps people relax. Use infinitive 'to relax' or present simple 'helps them relax.' Ensure pronoun 'them' refers to people.

× I would like to take a long walk in a quiet City Park, especially in the early morning walking their health relief pressure and then keep me physically fit and I enjoy chatting with my friends or watching people exercise which make the experience more social.

✓ I would like to take a long walk in a quiet city park, especially in the early morning, because walking relieves stress and keeps me physically fit. I also enjoy chatting with my friends or watching people exercise, which makes the experience more social.

Multiple issues: 'City Park' should be lowercase 'city park.' The clause describing effects must use present simple for general truths: 'walking relieves stress and keeps me physically fit.' Use 'relieves stress' not 'relief pressure.' Add commas and split into sentences for clarity. 'Makes' must agree with singular 'which' referring to 'watching people exercise' or 'the experience' so use 'makes.'

× Where did you go for a walk lately? Student: I usually walk next to my living place which is the park.

✓ I usually walk near where I live, which is a park.

The question asks about recent activity ('lately') but the student responded habitually; keep present simple for habits: 'I usually walk near where I live.' Use 'near where I live' or 'next to my home.' 'Living place' is unnatural; use 'where I live.' Use 'a park' with article.

× Small park especially early morning walking help me to relieve pressure and keep me physically fit, and I enjoy watching people to do exercise which make the experience more social.

✓ The small park, especially in the early morning, helps me relieve stress and keep physically fit, and I enjoy watching people exercise, which makes the experience more social.

Problems fixed: add definite article 'the' or 'the small park.' Use present simple 'helps' for the singular 'park.' Remove unnecessary 'to' before 'do exercise' and use 'exercise' as a verb. Use 'relieve stress' and 'keep physically fit.' Ensure subject-verb agreement: 'which makes' agrees with 'watching people exercise' or 'the experience.'