走路— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be concise and correct grammar: give a clear topic sentence, one or two specific supporting details, and avoid repetition. Focus on correct verb forms and vocabulary (e.g. "free time", "physical fitness", "last time"). Use linking words like "because" or "for example" appropriately.

示例: Yes, I walk a lot. I usually go for walks in my local park because it helps my physical fitness and clears my mind. For example, last weekend I walked around the garden and enjoyed the scenery.

建议: Start with a direct answer, then give a specific detail and use past tense consistently. Reduce filler sounds (uh) and add a linking word such as "because" or "so". Use precise past-tense verbs like "walked" and clear nouns like "gardens".

示例: Yes, I often walked outside as a child. I walked in gardens near my home because it improved my fitness and helped me relax.

建议: Give a clear general statement, then support with specific reasons and correct vocabulary. Avoid incorrect or unclear words (e.g. "box", "cheese"). Use linking words like "because" and "also". Mention examples: fresh air, greenery, space to exercise, social atmosphere.

示例: People like to walk in parks because of the fresh air and pleasant scenery. Also, parks have flowers and trees that create a relaxing atmosphere, and many people enjoy walking there to exercise or meet friends.

建议: Answer directly with a conditional sentence, use correct verb forms and clearer vocabulary (e.g. "private garden" or "nature trail"). Explain why with one or two specific reasons, using linking words like "because" or "so". Avoid filler and unclear phrases.

示例: If I had the chance, I would take a long walk in a private botanical garden because the paths are well maintained and peaceful. It would be ideal for a long, tire-free walk and I could enjoy different plant collections.

建议: Use past tense for recent actions and give a clear, specific example. Remove filler words and correct grammar (e.g. "I walked", "it's free for everyone"). Use a linking phrase like "For example" properly and state the benefit concisely.

示例: I usually walk in local public areas because they are free and open at any time. For example, last week I walked along my street every morning, which improved my health and energy levels.

× To be honest, actually yes, I prefer to walk a lot, especially when I when I have a a free time because it helped me to improve my hour physicals, body and for example last free time I go to walking around the garden, it was very beautiful.

✓ To be honest, yes, I prefer to walk a lot, especially when I have free time, because it helps me to improve my physical health; for example, last free time I went for a walk around the garden and it was very beautiful.

Multiple present tense errors: use present simple for habitual actions (I prefer, I have, it helps). Use past simple for a specific past event (I went). Also 'free time' is uncountable so no article, and 'physicals, body' is incorrect phrase; use 'physical health'. Suggestions: use present simple for routines and past simple for finished events; choose correct nouns for meaning.

× Honestly, yes, uh, I always when I was a child walking, especially in the gardens, uh, because uh, uh, it's helped me to improve my, uh, physical fitness and, uh, relaxed.

✓ Honestly, yes, when I was a child I always walked, especially in gardens, because it helped me to improve my physical fitness and relax.

Incorrect use of present participle 'walking' after time clause; past habit requires past simple 'walked'. 'It's helped' is wrong tense/form for past: use 'it helped'. 'Relaxed' is adjective; use base verb 'relax' after 'and' to show another action. Suggestion: for past habits, use past simple and parallel verb forms for compound verbs.

× I definitely agree, they think box have have a lot of natural such as cheese and flowers which open to see a good views during their walking.

✓ I definitely agree; parks have a lot of natural features such as trees and flowers, which allow people to see good views while walking.

Pronoun 'they' and noun 'box' are incorrect and confusing. 'Parks' is the intended subject. 'Natural' needs a noun ('natural features'), 'cheese' is wrong word, likely 'trees'. 'Open to see' is incorrect; use 'allow people to see'. 'Good views' does not need article. Suggestion: identify correct nouns and match pronouns to clear antecedents.

× Also they feel relaxed when they're working in the garden and seeing people walking with.

✓ Also, they feel relaxed when they are working in the garden and seeing other people walking.

Awkward adverb/phrase placement and incomplete phrase 'walking with'. Use 'other people' to clarify who is walking. Keep parallel structure with 'working' and 'seeing'. Suggestion: complete prepositional phrases and maintain parallel verb forms.

× I think if I, I have a great opportunity to working in the, uh, private garden because they are, uh, it's customized for walking, especially for long walking without tire.

✓ I think if I had a great opportunity, I would work in a private garden because it is customized for walking, especially for long walks without getting tired.

Conditional sentence requires past subjunctive 'had' and modal 'would' for result. 'To working' is incorrect; use base verb 'work' or conditional structure. 'They are, it's' mixes subjects; use 'it is' for 'garden'. 'Long walking' should be 'long walks' and 'without tire' should be 'without getting tired'. Suggestion: use correct conditional forms and gerund/noun forms for activities.

× And uh, there are couple of group you can working with the each of them.

✓ And there are a couple of groups you can work with, each of them.

Missing article 'a' before 'couple', plural 'groups' required, and 'you can working with' should be 'you can work with'. 'the each of them' is incorrect order; use 'each of them' or restructure. Suggestion: ensure noun number agreement and correct verb form after modal 'can'.

× Uh, local places, uh, my favorite choice because it's, uh, free for all people on you can't walk anyway at any time.

✓ Local places are my favorite choice because they are free for all people and you can walk there at any time.

Mix of verb forms: use present simple 'are' for habit/general truth. 'It's' ambiguous—use 'they are' for plural 'local places'. 'On you can't' is wrong; intended 'and you can'. Suggestion: match subject plurality and use clear coordinating conjunctions.

× Uh, that help me to been, uh, using your walking every time.

✓ That helps me to keep walking regularly.

Incorrect forms: 'help' should be 'helps' to agree with singular 'that' or rephrase. 'to been' is wrong (mix of 'to be' and past participle); 'using your walking' is awkward and incorrect. Suggestion: use 'helps me to' + base verb or 'helps me keep' + -ing for continuous habit.

× For example, last week I walk in the street. Uh, it helped me to improve my own health.

✓ For example, last week I walked in the street. It helped me to improve my health.

Reference to a completed past action requires past simple 'walked' not present 'walk'. Second sentence correctly uses past 'helped'; remove 'own' as unnecessary. Suggestion: use past simple for actions that happened at a specific time in the past and avoid redundant possessives.