阅读— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be more concise and directly answer the question first. Correct small grammar and word-choice errors, avoid unnecessary details (e.g., obscure book titles) and use linking words to show contrast. Aim for a clear topic sentence, one or two supporting details, and keep it under five sentences.

示例: Yes, I do. I used to read a lot of paperbacks and school textbooks in high school, but nowadays I only read short stories occasionally when I have free time. However, I still enjoy reading because it helps me relax and learn new ideas.

建议: Good structure and clear reasons. Improve fluency by fixing small grammar and word-choice issues and use linking phrases to make transitions smoother. Combine some clauses to avoid repetition and keep answers within five sentences.

示例: I like both formats. I still buy paper books because the feel of real pages helps me focus, but I use a tablet for ebooks when I travel or have limited space. So at home I prefer paper, while on the go my tablet is more convenient.

建议: Answer is relevant and clear but contains some grammatical errors and redundant phrasing. Make sentences more natural by correcting word order and removing repetition. Use linking words (for example, "however", "whereas") to emphasize contrast and provide a brief specific example of an important document to add concreteness.

示例: I need to read carefully when reviewing important documents, for example reports or contracts, because I must proofread them thoroughly before submitting them to my manager. Conversely, when I browse social media or casual articles, I usually skim for interesting points rather than read in detail.

建议: Good idea to refer back to previous answer, but improve grammar and clarity. Start with a clear topic sentence stating your preference depends on purpose, then give one specific example for each mode and use linking words like "whereas" or "for example". Avoid repeating words unnecessarily and keep it under five sentences.

示例: It depends on the purpose: I do detailed reading for important documents, such as reports that I must proofread carefully. Whereas for social media or light online articles I usually scan the text quickly to find interesting points.

× I remember when I was in high school I often read paperbacks and my school textbooks such as the El Pele Boosterismo and No Limit Tamere.

✓ I remember that when I was in high school I often read paperbacks and my school textbooks such as El Pele Boosterismo and No Limit Tamere.

Missing conjunction 'that' to introduce the reported memory causes slight awkwardness; also remove the article 'the' before proper titles. Suggestion: include 'that' after 'remember' for clarity and treat book titles as proper nouns without 'the'.

× But now I still like road reading short stories from time to time when I have free time, but not that often anymore.

✓ But now I still like reading short stories from time to time when I have free time, although not that often anymore.

Typo 'road reading' should be 'reading'. Use 'although' or restructure to avoid repeating 'but'. Suggestion: remove redundant 'but' and correct typo to 'reading'.

× I like both formats, still buy paper books because I enjoy the feel or real pages and find them easier to focus on.

✓ I like both formats; I still buy paper books because I enjoy the feel of real pages and find them easier to focus on.

Missing subject 'I' in the second clause makes sentence fragment; 'or' is wrong preposition, should be 'of'. Use a semicolon or conjunction to join two independent clauses. Suggestion: add 'I' and replace 'or' with 'of'.

× But I also use a tablet to download ebooks when I'm traveling or short on space.

✓ But I also use a tablet to download ebooks when I'm traveling or when I'm short on space.

Parallel structure is improved by repeating 'when' or by making both clauses parallel; current sentence is understandable but clearer with parallel 'when' phrases. Suggestion: include 'when' before 'short on space'.

× If I have time at home I'll read on paper, but on the go my tablet is much more convenient.

✓ If I have time at home, I'll read on paper, but on the go my tablet is much more convenient.

Missing comma after introductory conditional clause. Add comma for correct punctuation and clarity. Suggestion: insert comma after 'home'.

× I need to read carefully when I am reviewing important documents because I must proofread them to thoroughly before I submit them to my superior.

✓ I need to read carefully when I am reviewing important documents because I must proofread them thoroughly before I submit them to my superior.

Incorrect word order: 'to thoroughly' separates verb 'proofread' from adverb 'thoroughly' and is ungrammatical. Move 'thoroughly' after 'proofread' or place it correctly. Suggestion: use 'proofread them thoroughly'.

× In contrast, I don't read carefully when I'm casually browsing online articles or social media.

✓ In contrast, I don't read carefully when I'm casually browsing online articles or social media.

Sentence is grammatically correct. No change needed.

× In those cases, I usually just skim the text for interesting points.

✓ In those cases, I usually just skim the text for interesting points.

Sentence is correct. No change needed.

× As I mentioned before, it will depend, so for detailed reading it should be an important documents I need to do and proofread.

✓ As I mentioned before, it depends, so for detailed reading it should be an important document that I need to read and proofread.

Tense and number errors: 'it will depend' is awkward for general statement—use present 'it depends'. 'an important documents' mixes singular article with plural noun—use 'an important document' or 'important documents'. Also add verb 'read' for clarity and include 'that' or restructure to show purpose. Suggestion: 'it depends' and 'an important document that I need to read and proofread'.

× But for just browsing online articles in social media it's just a simple scanning.

✓ But when just browsing online articles or social media, it's just simple scanning.

Awkward article use: 'a simple scanning' is unnatural—'scanning' here is an uncountable activity, so use 'simple scanning' without 'a'. Also add comma after introductory phrase and use 'or' to link articles and social media. Suggestion: remove 'a' and rephrase as shown.