爱好— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Correct basic grammar, choose appropriate vocabulary, and give a clear topic sentence with one or two supporting details. Here, vocabulary is incorrect ("choking" is wrong), verb forms and articles are missing, and the response is unclear and unnaturally phrased. Improve by stating the hobby clearly, using the correct verb form, and adding a short reason or routine using a linking word.

示例: Yes. My main hobby is cooking; I usually cook simple meals every evening because it helps me relax after work.

建议: Use correct past tense and simpler, clearer sentences. Start with a topic sentence in past tense, then add a specific detail (why you enjoyed it or a memorable event). Use linking words (for example, "because", "so", "then") and avoid unclear phrasing such as "got to go to another stage."

示例: When I was a child, my hobby was running. I enjoyed it because it kept me healthy, and once I qualified for a local tournament, which allowed me to compete against children from other towns.

建议: Give a clear, relevant answer using correct tense and coherent reasoning. State the hobby succinctly, then provide one or two specific supporting details (when you did it, who with, and why it mattered). Avoid repetition and unclear future statements. Use linking words such as "and" or "so" to connect ideas.

示例: Yes. Since childhood I have enjoyed playing with my friends in the evenings. We would often meet after school to chat and play games, and those times helped me relax and build close friendships.

建议: This answer is reasonably clear but needs more natural phrasing, correct grammar and one supporting detail. Begin with a direct topic sentence, use correct verb forms and articles, and add a brief example of how your brother supports you (linking word such as "for example" or "because").

示例: Yes, I share hobbies with my brother — we both enjoy running. For example, he often trains with me and encourages me during long runs, which motivates me to keep improving.

× Yes of course everyone have hobby.

✓ Yes, of course everyone has a hobby.

Subject 'everyone' is singular and requires a singular verb 'has' not 'have'. Add articles 'a' before 'hobby' for correctness. Suggestion: remember indefinite pronouns like 'everyone' take singular verbs.

× My hobby is choking.

✓ My hobby is cooking.

The sentence likely uses the wrong word 'choking' which is a dangerous action; context shows 'cooking' fits as a hobby. Also no article needed before the noun when using 'My hobby is ...'. Suggestion: choose the correct noun and proofread for confusable words.

× I usually choking every evening.

✓ I usually cook every evening.

After 'usually' use the base verb with simple present (I usually cook) not the -ing form. Also 'choking' is incorrect word choice; 'cook' matches the hobby. Suggestion: use simple present with adverbs of frequency: 'usually + base verb'.

× When I was child, my hobby is running.

✓ When I was a child, my hobby was running.

Missing article 'a' before 'child'. Tense mismatch: speaking about the past requires past tense 'was' not present 'is'. Suggestion: use 'when I was a child' and keep past tense throughout the clause.

× I like running.

✓ I liked running.

If referring to a hobby in childhood (past time), use past tense 'liked' to match the time frame. Suggestion: ensure verb tense agrees with time expressions like 'when I was a child'.

× And then I'm when I'm trying the tournament, I got to go to another stage like across the country.

✓ And then, when I tried the tournament, I got to go to another stage, like across the country.

Mixed and incorrect tense and extraneous words: 'I'm when I'm trying' is ungrammatical. Use past tense 'when I tried' to show a completed past action; 'got to go' is acceptable for past experience. Suggestion: remove extra 'I'm' and match past tense for events that occurred in the past.

× Yes, of course I'm playing with my friends in evening, like, uh, spending time together together when I was tired.

✓ Yes, of course I used to play with my friends in the evenings, like spending time together when I was tired.

The original mixes present progressive 'I'm playing' with past 'when I was tired'. For a childhood habit use 'used to play' or past simple 'I played'. Also 'in evening' needs plural/article and duplicate 'together' removed. Suggestion: use 'used to' for past habitual actions and 'in the evenings' for time phrase.

× I feel like the time that I would like I will not to do it again.

✓ I felt like it was a time I would never experience again.

Sentence is confused in tense and structure: 'I feel like the time that I would like I will not to do it again' is ungrammatical. Use past tense 'felt' to match past context and rephrase to 'it was a time I would never experience again' for clarity. Suggestion: simplify sentences and keep consistent tense.

× When when we will be when we become an altar.

✓ When we grew up.

Original is incoherent and repeats words; 'become an altar' is incorrect word choice. For meaning 'when we became adults' use 'when we grew up' or 'when we became adults'. Suggestion: choose clear, common expressions like 'grow up' or 'become adults' and avoid repetition.

× Do you have the same hobbies as your family members?

✓ Do you have the same hobbies as your family members?

This sentence is already correct. It has correct article and structure; no change needed. Suggestion: none.

× Umm yes I do umm my hobbies. Same with my brother.

✓ Yes, I do. My hobbies are the same as my brother's.

Run-on and fragment: 'umm my hobbies. Same with my brother' should be combined into a full sentence and possessive used 'brother's'. Suggestion: form complete sentences and use possessive apostrophe for family relation ownership.

× Umm my brother love running too and he become my support system when I'm training.

✓ My brother loves running too and he becomes my support system when I'm training.

Subject-verb agreement: 'brother' requires 'loves' (third person singular). 'become' should be 'becomes' for present habitual action. 'I'm training' is acceptable as present continuous for the ongoing action. Suggestion: use third person singular verb forms with he/she: add -s in simple present.