爱好— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be more concise and grammatical: start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific details using linking words. Correct verb tenses and count nouns (a lot of hobbies). Avoid repetition and long unclear phrases.

示例: Yes, I have several hobbies, and my favorite is crafting. When I craft, I feel relaxed and it helps me forget stress; for example, I enjoy making decorative cards and small models that friends often praise for their appearance.

建议: Use past tense consistently and give one clear specific example. Begin with a direct topic sentence, then add a supporting detail with a linking word. Fix articles and phrasing (e.g., "I didn't have many hobbies" not "do not").

示例: When I was a child, I didn’t have many hobbies, but I loved drawing. For instance, I often filled my school notebooks with sketches of animals and houses, and my mother remembers me drawing almost every day.

建议: Answer directly and clearly. Use correct tense and smoother linking (e.g., "However" or "Although"). State whether the hobby continued, then give a specific reason or example for changes in interest. Keep sentences short and grammatical.

示例: Not exactly — I didn’t continue every childhood hobby into my teens. Although I enjoyed drawing as a child, my interest gradually declined; however, I developed a new related hobby: designing craft projects and keeping them in a sketchbook.

建议: Be more natural and concise: start with a clear sentence ("No, none of my family members craft"). Use plural/singular correctly and avoid repetitive statements. Then give a brief reason or an example of how your hobby differs from theirs.

示例: No, my family don’t share this hobby. For example, while I enjoy making handmade decorations, my parents prefer gardening and my sister likes reading, so crafting is unique to me.

× So yes I do have a lots of hobbies to do in my spare time.

✓ So yes, I do have a lot of hobbies to do in my spare time.

'a lots' is incorrect; 'lots' is plural and cannot be used directly after 'a'. Use 'a lot of' or 'lots of'. Use commas after introductory 'So'.

× The most and favorite one was the doing crafting because whenever I do craft I think I have lost all my stress and frustration and make a thing that is very good and looking attractive.

✓ My favorite hobby is crafting because whenever I craft I feel that I have lost all my stress and frustration, and I make things that look attractive.

Several errors: 'The most and favorite one' awkward and unnecessary; use 'My favorite hobby'. 'was the doing crafting' incorrect verb forms; use 'is crafting' (present habit). 'do craft' should be 'craft'. 'I think I have lost' better as 'I feel that I have lost' for personal experience. 'make a thing that is very good and looking attractive' is ungrammatical; use 'I make things that look attractive'. Also adjust tense to present simple for habitual action.

× And whenever I show the things to other they always say it was very beautiful.

✓ And whenever I show my creations to others, they always say they are very beautiful.

Use plural 'others' instead of 'other'. 'show the things' is vague; use 'show my creations'. 'it was' mismatches plural 'things' and tense; use 'they are' for general comment. Include comma after introductory 'And whenever'.

× So when I was a child, I do not have that much hobbies, but the hobby which I have is the doing art because my as much as I remember, my mom told me that I I always prefer to do a lot a little bit of drawing on my drawing copies.

✓ When I was a child, I did not have many hobbies, but the hobby I had was art, because as far as I remember, my mom told me that I always liked to do a little drawing in my notebooks.

Tense mismatch: 'was a child' (past) requires past tense 'did not have' not present 'do not have'. 'that much hobbies' incorrect quantifier and plural; use 'many hobbies'. 'the hobby which I have is the doing art' should be past: 'the hobby I had was art'. 'my as much as I remember' wrong phrase; use 'as far as I remember'. 'I I always prefer' redundant and wrong verb choice; 'liked' fits past. 'a lot a little bit of drawing' contradictory; simplify to 'a little drawing'. 'drawing copies' unclear; use 'notebooks'.

× And so that was my hobby that I consider when I was a child.

✓ So that was the hobby I enjoyed when I was a child.

Awkward phrasing: 'my hobby that I consider' is incorrect. Use 'the hobby I enjoyed' for clarity. Maintain past tense 'was' consistent with 'when I was a child'.

× So there is a no hobby that I contains from my childhood to the teenager.

✓ So there was no hobby that I had from my childhood to my teenage years.

'There is a no hobby' is ungrammatical; use 'There was no hobby'. 'I contains' wrong verb and form; use 'I had'. 'the teenager' incorrect; use 'my teenage years'. Use past tense to match timeframe.

× But as much as I remember did I have a little bit of hobby that is of art.

✓ But as far as I remember, I had a small hobby in art.

Word order 'did I have' is wrong in statement; use 'I had'. Use past tense 'had' to match 'as far as I remember'. Simplify 'a little bit of hobby that is of art' to 'a small hobby in art'.

× But now it was becoming rapidly in decrease because I do not have that much interest in art, but I have a interest in crafting things in sketchbooks, which was useful for me.

✓ But now it has rapidly decreased because I do not have much interest in art; instead, I am interested in crafting things in sketchbooks, which is useful for me.

Tense errors: 'now it was becoming' mixes past with 'now'; use present perfect 'has decreased' or present 'has rapidly decreased'. 'in decrease' incorrect preposition; use 'decreased'. 'that much interest' awkward; use 'much interest'. 'I have a interest' article error; use 'an interest' or 'I am interested'. 'which was useful' tense mismatch; use 'which is useful'.

× As my hobby, there is no family member who have the same hobby like me.

✓ Regarding my hobby, there is no family member who has the same hobby as me.

Use 'has' for singular 'family member' (subject-verb agreement). 'who have' should be 'who has'. 'same hobby like me' incorrect comparison; use 'the same hobby as me'.

× I'm a very different person from my family members and I have a hobby of crafting that is totally different from a family member.

✓ I'm very different from my family members, and my hobby of crafting is completely different from theirs.

Repeating 'a family member' is awkward; use possessive pronoun 'theirs'. 'a hobby of crafting' better as 'my hobby of crafting'. Use 'completely' instead of 'totally' for formality and 'very different from my family members' streamlined.

× My family member have no interest in crafting, so I'm the individual who have interest in crafting in my family or in my bloodline.

✓ My family members have no interest in crafting, so I'm the only person in my family who has an interest in crafting.

Subject-verb agreement and pluralization: use 'family members' (plural) with 'have'. 'who have interest' should be 'who has an interest'. 'individual' awkward; 'only person' clearer. 'in my bloodline' unnecessary and informal, omit it.