爱好— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be more concise and grammatically accurate. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid redundancy, correct verb forms and countable nouns, and use linking words for the examples. For instance, say you have several hobbies, name them clearly, and briefly explain why. Limit to 2–4 sentences.

示例: Yes, I have several hobbies. I often play basketball, watch films and go hiking because these activities help me relax and improve my energy for work. For example, hiking clears my mind and basketball keeps me fit.

建议: Use clear past tense and avoid filler words. Begin with a direct topic sentence about childhood hobbies, then give 1–2 specific examples using linking words. Fix singular/plural and phrasing (e.g., 'one of my hobbies was...').

示例: Yes, I had different hobbies as a child. For example, I used to go to the park with my friends to play games, and I often went to the cinema to watch cartoons.

建议: Use a concise statement with correct tense and clearer phrasing. Say how long you've played and give a brief reason or benefit. Avoid awkward expressions like 'stuck with me'.

示例: Yes, I have played football since I was a child and I still enjoy it. It has stayed with me because it helps me stay fit and teaches teamwork.

建议: Give a clear, direct answer and support it with a specific comparison. Avoid fillers and unclear phrasing. State one or two differences and use linking words like 'because' or 'while'.

示例: No, my family members and I have different hobbies. For example, I prefer playing sports like football, while my brother enjoys socialising and going to parties with friends because he is more outgoing.

× Yes, actually I have lots of hobby because I believe that and we should enjoy by doing some hobbies to improve our efficiency in the work.

✓ Yes, actually I have lots of hobbies because I believe that we should enjoy doing hobbies to improve our efficiency at work.

The noun 'hobby' should be plural ('hobbies') to match 'lots of'. 'Enjoy by doing some hobbies' is unidiomatic: use 'enjoy doing hobbies'. 'in the work' should be 'at work' for correct preposition use and natural English.

× For example, I play basketball or watching movies and sometimes go to hiking for my hobbies.

✓ For example, I play basketball, watch movies, and sometimes go hiking as hobbies.

Coordinate verbs in a list should use the same form: 'play' and 'watch' (base form) rather than mixing 'play' and 'watching'. 'Go to hiking' is incorrect; use 'go hiking'. Also 'for my hobbies' is awkward; 'as hobbies' or omit.

× Yes, I also had hobbies in my childhood too, but uh, they were different than my nowadays hobbies.

✓ Yes, I also had hobbies in my childhood, but they were different from my current hobbies.

Use past tense 'had' is fine; remove redundant 'too'. Use 'different from' not 'different than'. 'nowadays hobbies' is unnatural; use 'current hobbies'.

× For example, uh, one of my hobby was going to the park with my friend and playing with each other and uh going to cinema as well.

✓ For example, one of my hobbies was going to the park with my friends, playing together, and going to the cinema as well.

'One of my hobby' should be 'one of my hobbies' (plural). 'friend' should be plural if generalizing. 'playing with each other' is wordy; 'playing together' is natural. Add 'the' before 'cinema'.

× Yes, I used to play football since I was a child and so I and that is stuck with me in my growth too and I still play football and I really love this hobby.

✓ Yes, I have played football since I was a child, and it stuck with me as I grew up; I still play football and I really love this hobby.

Use present perfect 'have played... since' to connect past to present rather than 'used to' with 'since'. 'stuck with me in my growth' is awkward; use 'stuck with me as I grew up'. Also remove redundant words and improve sentence flow.

× Uh, no, uh, due to reason, uh, due to fact that, uh, we have, uh, different characteristics, Uh, so we have different hobbies.

✓ No, because we have different characteristics, we have different hobbies.

Remove filler words. Use 'because' or 'due to the fact that' — if using 'due to' include 'the fact'. Keep concise structure: 'we have different characteristics' is fine; no article errors otherwise.

× For example, I, my hobby is usually going to, uh, do some sports by my brothers, enjoy to having party and be with his friends.

✓ For example, my hobby is usually playing sports with my brothers, enjoying parties, and being with friends.

Pronouns and possessives are incorrect: 'my brothers' not 'by my brothers'; 'be with his friends' should be 'being with friends' or 'being with my friends'. Use parallel gerund forms: 'playing', 'enjoying', 'being'. 'enjoy to having party' is ungrammatical; use 'enjoy having parties' or 'enjoying parties'.