爱好— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be concise and grammatically correct. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid repetition and unclear phrases (e.g., “throw it with my hand,” “copy it with my brain”).

示例: I enjoy drawing. For example, I like sketching things I see around me, such as trees or people, and then adding color to make them realistic. This hobby relaxes me and helps me observe details more closely.

建议: Answer directly and use past tense where appropriate. Provide a clear statement about childhood hobbies and one specific supporting detail with a linking word (e.g., “because,” “for example”). Correct grammar (e.g., “coloring” → “coloring it,” “gives” not “give”).

示例: When I was a child, I enjoyed drawing and coloring. For example, I loved filling my sketches with bright colors because coloring helped me think creatively and made my pictures more lively.

建议: Make a clear, direct response and use correct tense and vocabulary. Replace unclear phrases (e.g., “play everything”) with specific activities and add a brief reason using a linking word like “because.” Keep it to two or three sentences max.

示例: No, I haven't had a single hobby since childhood because I enjoyed trying many different activities. For example, I would paint, ride my bike, and play games, so I never stuck with just one hobby.

建议: Give a concise direct answer, then provide a specific contrast with a family member using linking words like “however” or “but.” Avoid redundancy and correct grammar (e.g., “only I can draw better” → “I'm the only one who draws well”).

示例: No, my family and I have different hobbies. For example, I'm the only one who draws well; my parents prefer gardening and my sister likes reading, so we each enjoy different activities.

× I have a hobbies, my hobby is drawing.

✓ I have a hobby; my hobby is drawing.

The noun 'hobbies' is plural while the determiner 'a' requires a singular noun. Use 'a hobby' for one, or remove 'a' and use 'hobbies' for plural. Also use a semicolon or conjunction to join the two independent clauses.

× I like to Draw Something that I see with my own eyes and I will copy it with my brain and throw it with my hand and I'm kinda bit impressed about it.

✓ I like to draw things that I see with my own eyes; I copy them with my mind and create them with my hands, and I'm kind of impressed by them.

Capitalization is incorrect for 'Draw'. Use 'draw' in lowercase. 'Something' is better as the plural 'things' to match general preference. 'Copy it with my brain' is unnatural: 'copy them with my mind' or 'remember and reproduce them' is clearer. 'Throw it with my hand' is incorrect for making drawings; use 'create them with my hands'. 'Kinda bit' is informal and ungrammatical; use 'kind of'. Preposition 'about' is wrong with 'impressed'; use 'impressed by'.

× Oh, I don't think so, but there's a hobby that I like the most, especially if. I'm gonna Draw Something.

✓ Oh, I don't think so, but there is one hobby I like the most, especially drawing. I'm going to draw something.

'There's' is contraction of 'there is' which is acceptable, but 'a hobby that I like the most' is wordy; 'one hobby I like the most' is clearer. 'Especially if' is incomplete and unclear; use 'especially drawing'. 'Gonna' is informal; use 'going to'. Capitalization of 'Draw' should be lowercase.

× I like the part of coloring because it give you the colors your work and give you a way of thinking.

✓ I like the coloring part because it gives your work color and gives you a way of thinking.

The verb must agree with the singular subject: use 'gives' not 'give'. 'Give you the colors your work' is ungrammatical; rephrase to 'gives your work color'. Also keep parallel structure: 'gives... and gives...'.

× I don't have a hobby that I have since childhood because I tend to play everything that come to my mind.

✓ I don't have a hobby that I have had since childhood because I tend to play with everything that comes to my mind.

When referring to a hobby continuing from childhood, use present perfect 'have had since childhood'. 'Play everything' needs the preposition 'with' and plural subject-verb agreement: 'comes' not 'come'.

× So I'm gonna play everything without thinking about hope I'm a free child.

✓ So I play with everything without thinking; I am a free child.

'Gonna' is informal; use 'I play' or 'I am going to play' depending on intended meaning. The phrase 'without thinking about hope I'm a free child' is ungrammatical and unclear. Separate into two clear clauses: 'without thinking' and 'I am a free child'.

× In my family only I can draw better and they don't like drawing at all.

✓ In my family, only I can draw well, and they don't like drawing at all.

Use adverb 'well' instead of adjective 'better' without a comparison object. Add a comma after the introductory phrase. 'Better' requires a comparison; since none is provided, 'well' is correct.

× So it's only me who like drawing, coloring and play everything that's come in my mind.

✓ So it's only me who likes drawing and coloring, and plays with everything that comes into my mind.

Relative clause must agree with singular 'me' so use 'likes' and 'plays'. Maintain parallel verb forms: 'likes drawing and coloring' and 'plays with everything'. Use correct preposition 'into' for 'comes into my mind' and 'comes' for subject-verb agreement.