爱好— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be slightly more concise and add one concrete detail or example to make your answer more vivid. Use a clear topic sentence, then one or two supporting details linked with a connector (for example/also). Reduce filler words like “Umm.”

示例: Yes. I enjoy boxing and language learning. For boxing, I train at a local gym three times a week and spar once a month to improve technique. Also, I’m studying Japanese independently using a mix of apps and a genki textbook to build grammar and vocabulary.

建议: Start with a direct topic sentence and avoid vague phrases. Be careful with unlikely claims (e.g., learning Mesopotamian as a child) — if true, give a brief context; if not, choose a more plausible example. Use one linking word to connect points.

示例: Yes. I was very active as a child and I did gymnastics for several years, which helped my balance and flexibility. I also enjoyed languages and tried basic Latin and historical scripts after finding a book about ancient cultures.

建议: Provide a clearer topic sentence naming a specific sport and add one concrete reason why it suits you now. Avoid vague phrases like “understand myself better”; replace with specific benefits or changes.

示例: Yes. I have always enjoyed sports, especially football, which I still play. Recently I chose boxing because it matches my fitness goals and helps me release stress, so I train regularly and feel more focused.

建议: Answer directly then give one or two specific examples of family activities and how they influence you. Correct grammar (e.g., 'do' instead of 'doing') and use a linking word for clarity.

示例: Yes. My family are all sporty — my father plays football every weekend and my sister goes to fitness classes twice a week. As a result, we often exercise together and encourage each other to stay active.

× I train in a local gym a few times a week.

✓ I train at a local gym a few times a week.

Use of the preposition with 'train' and locations: 'train at a gym' is the common collocation in English; this is an incorrect use of preposition (maps to Verb in the present participle form/11). Use 'at' for institutions or places where an activity is practiced.

× At the moment I'm into Japanese and I studied on my own using different apps and books.

✓ At the moment I'm into Japanese and I have studied on my own using different apps and books.

Tense consistency: 'At the moment' indicates present relevance, so the present perfect 'have studied' is appropriate to show the experience up to now rather than simple past 'studied'. This is a past participle/present perfect usage issue.

× Yes, I have always been an active child so I was into sports since I was really young, but I used to do gymnastics when I was a kid.

✓ Yes, I have always been an active child, so I have been into sports since I was really young, but I used to do gymnastics when I was a kid.

Time expression 'since I was really young' requires a perfect tense to show continuity from past to present: 'have been into' rather than simple past 'was into'. 'Used to do' is correct for past habitual action. This is a past tense/present perfect consistency issue.

× I also liked languages since I was a kid so I tried to learn ancient languages like Mesopotamian.

✓ I have also liked languages since I was a kid, so I have tried to learn ancient languages like Sumerian or Akkadian from Mesopotamia.

Combine tense and word choice: 'since I was a kid' requires present perfect 'have liked' for continuity. 'Mesopotamian' alone is vague; better to name languages (Sumerian, Akkadian) or say 'languages from Mesopotamia'. This fixes tense and preposition/word choice issues.

× Yes, I think sports is a hobby I have been enjoying since I was a kid, so I keep doing it.

✓ Yes, I think sports are a hobby I have been enjoying since I was a kid, so I keep doing them.

'Sports' is a plural noun and requires plural verb and pronoun agreement: use 'are' not 'is', and refer with 'them' rather than 'it'. This is a subject-verb agreement issue.

× But now I understand myself better so I finally found a sport that is really for me.

✓ But now I understand myself better, so I have finally found a sport that is really for me.

Tense consistency: 'now' and present understanding suggest present perfect 'have found' to indicate a recent change with present relevance. Also add a comma for clarity. This maps to pronoun/tense usage.

× All members of my family doing some kind of activity related to sports, be it fitness or football or any other game.

✓ All members of my family do some kind of activity related to sports, be it fitness, football, or another game.

Missing auxiliary verb 'do' for present simple: the original is a sentence without a main verb. Also add commas for items in a list. This fixes sentence structure and verb presence.

× Basically all my relatives are really active people who enjoy sports.

✓ Basically, all my relatives are really active people who enjoy sports.

Minor punctuation: add comma after 'Basically' for natural phrasing. No major grammar error, only punctuation for clarity.