爱好— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be direct and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence naming your hobbies, then give one short supporting detail for each. Use correct verb forms and avoid unnecessary words. Use linking words (and, also, besides) to connect items. Keep to 2–3 sentences and check grammar (e.g., 'I like singing', 'I want to go hiking').

示例: I have several hobbies. I enjoy singing and cycling, and I would also like to go hiking someday because I love exploring nature.

建议: Answer directly with a past-tense topic sentence and avoid asking questions back. Give one specific supporting detail about how you engaged in the hobby as a child. Use past tense consistently and link sentences (for example, 'when I was a child' + reason or example).

示例: Yes, I did. When I was a child I loved cycling and I often rode around the neighborhood with my friends after school.

建议: Use a clear topic sentence and correct grammar: 'Yes, I have been cycling since childhood.' Then give one or two specific reasons with accurate vocabulary and linking words. Avoid unclear phrases and pronounce or write words correctly (e.g., 'healthier' → 'healthy', 'scenery' not 'see their scenery').

示例: Yes, I have been cycling since childhood because it keeps me healthy and it is exciting to ride through mountain scenery.

建议: Give a direct answer and a brief explanation. Use correct grammar and linking words (for example, 'No, we have different hobbies. I enjoy cycling, whereas my sister prefers swimming.'). Avoid filler words and repetition.

示例: No, we do not. I enjoy cycling, but my sister prefers swimming, so our hobbies are quite different.

× Please yes I really like to singing a song it is and also I want go hiking someday and cycling these are my hobbies.

✓ Yes, I really like singing songs, and I also want to go hiking someday and ride a bicycle; these are my hobbies.

The original sentence misuses the infinitive/gerund forms and has missing verbs and articles. 'Like to singing' mixes 'to' + gerund; correct options are 'like singing' (gerund) or 'like to sing' (infinitive). 'A song it is' is unclear and unnecessary; use 'singing songs'. 'I want go' is missing the infinitive marker 'to'—correct is 'I want to go'. 'Cycling' as a noun is fine, but in this context 'ride a bicycle' flows better. Also add punctuation and conjunctions to separate ideas. Suggestions: use 'like singing' or 'like to sing'; include 'to' after 'want'; separate clauses with commas or conjunctions.

× Yes, when I was a child. I really want to do like cycling. Is this my childhood hobby?

✓ Yes, when I was a child I really wanted to do cycling. Was that my childhood hobby?

The response refers to past time ('when I was a child') but uses present tense 'want'—tense should be past: 'wanted'. 'I really want to do like cycling' is ungrammatical and awkward; 'do cycling' or better 'go cycling' is appropriate. The question form 'Is this my childhood hobby?' should be past-focused: 'Was that my childhood hobby?' Suggestions: match verb tense to time markers; use 'go cycling' or 'do cycling'; form yes/no question in past with 'was'.

× Yes, it is a cycling because cycling is like very healthier to our bodies and so exciting 1 icyclist and see their scenery the of the mountain.

✓ Yes, it's cycling, because cycling is very healthy for our bodies and very exciting; cyclists can see the scenery of the mountains.

Problems include awkward article use ('a cycling' should be 'cycling' or 'a bicycle'), incorrect comparative/adverb ('very healthier' is incorrect—use 'healthier' with comparison or 'very healthy' for emphasis), wrong preposition 'to our bodies' should be 'for our bodies', and garbled phrase '1 icyclist and see their scenery the of the mountain' should be 'cyclists can see the scenery of the mountains'. Also adjust punctuation and word order. Suggestions: use 'cycling is healthy for our bodies' and 'cyclists can see the mountain scenery'.

× No, not saying because we are very different. I like to go cycling, but my sister for my sister is doing, uh, swimming.

✓ No, not really, because our interests are very different. I like to go cycling, but my sister does swimming.

The original contains fragments and redundant phrases: 'No, not saying' is ungrammatical—better 'No, not really'. 'Because we are very different' needs context—'our interests are very different'. The clause 'my sister for my sister is doing, uh, swimming' is awkward; use simple present for habitual actions: 'my sister swims' or 'my sister does swimming'. Suggestions: avoid repetition, use clear subject-verb structure, and use simple present to describe habitual hobbies (my sister swims).