爱好— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be more concise and natural: state your favourite hobby clearly, give one or two specific reasons or examples, avoid filler words (uh) and grammar mistakes (subject-verb agreement). Use linking words (for example, because) to connect ideas.

示例: I have several hobbies, but my favourite is cooking and gardening. For example, I enjoy trying new recipes on weekends because it helps me relax and be creative, and gardening lets me grow vegetables that I use in my meals.

建议: Start with a clear topic sentence, correct tense and article use, and add a specific detail or memory. Use linking words (also, which) properly and avoid vague phrases.

示例: Yes, as a child I used to play cricket with friends in the playground near my home. Playing regularly improved my confidence and teamwork skills, and we often met after school to practise together.

建议: Give a direct answer about whether you still have the hobby, use correct tense and phrasing, and avoid repetition. Offer a concise explanation about why you can't continue and what you do instead, with one specific example.

示例: I used to play football regularly as a child, but now I rarely play because my job is very busy. Occasionally I go for a short run or play a casual match with friends on weekends to stay active.

建议: Answer directly and correct grammar (plural/singular, word choice). Give one clear similarity and one difference with specific examples, using linking words like however or for instance.

示例: Not exactly — everyone in my family has different hobbies. For instance, my parents enjoy watching television in the evenings, while I prefer cooking; however, sometimes we play board games like Scrabble together at weekends.

× I have a lot interest in these hobbies and I pursue these hobbies in my free time and it make my mood better.

✓ I have a lot of interest in these hobbies, and I pursue them in my free time, and it makes my mood better.

Missing 'of' after 'a lot' (quantifier use). Also replace repeated noun phrase with pronoun 'them' for conciseness, and ensure verb agrees with subject ('it makes' -> 'it makes' referring to 'it' meaning 'pursuing them'). Suggestion: use 'a lot of interest' or 'great interest' and ensure subject-verb agreement: 'it makes my mood better'.

× During my childhood time, I used to play cricket match in the playground which is located near my hometown.

✓ During my childhood, I used to play cricket matches in the playground located near my hometown.

Count noun 'match' needs plural 'matches' when speaking of habitual play (quantifier/number). Also 'childhood time' is unnatural; use 'childhood'. 'Which is' can be reduced to 'located' for clarity and concision. Suggestion: use plural for repeated events and simplify relative clause.

× I also played with my friends which helps to enhance my confidence and we also get together.

✓ I also played with my friends, which helped to enhance my confidence, and we would often get together.

Relative pronoun 'which' is acceptable for things, but here it refers to the action of playing; better to use 'which helped' (past tense) to match 'played'. 'We also get together' mixes present with past context; change to past habitual 'we would often get together' or 'we often got together'. Suggestion: keep tenses consistent and choose appropriate past forms.

× Since my childhood I used to play football with my friends in a open playground, but currently I am busy in my hectic work and I have no time to pursue my hobbies.

✓ Since my childhood I used to play football with my friends in an open playground, but currently I am busy with hectic work and I have no time to pursue my hobbies.

Preposition 'in' with 'busy' is incorrect; use 'busy with'. Also use the article 'an' before 'open playground'. Suggestion: 'busy with hectic work' is more natural; ensure articles are used correctly.

× So sometime I spend go out, spend time, go outside.

✓ So sometimes I go out to relax, but not very often.

Original is ungrammatical and repetitive. 'Sometime' should be 'sometimes' (adverb). Phrases 'I spend go out' are incorrect word order. Suggestion: use a concise, grammatical phrasing like 'sometimes I go out to relax'.

× Well, every person has his own choice, but my family members have a different choices regarding hobbies and sometimes we have a similar hobbies such as watching television or playing carrot board games.

✓ Well, every person has their own choice, but my family members have different choices regarding hobbies, and sometimes we have similar hobbies such as watching television or playing board games.

Use of 'his' is gender-specific; use 'their' for general statements. 'A different choices' is wrong number and article; use 'different choices'. 'A similar hobbies' also has article/number errors; use 'similar hobbies'. 'Carrot board games' seems incorrect—likely 'card or board games' or just 'board games'; corrected to 'board games'. Suggestion: ensure pronouns match antecedents, and match singular/plural and articles correctly.