聊天— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be clearer and more natural. Start with a direct topic sentence, correct grammar, avoid irrelevant phrases, and give one or two specific reasons or examples. Use linking words (because, so) and keep it under 4–5 sentences.

示例: Yes, I do. I prefer talking to my friends because I feel more comfortable sharing personal stories with them than with my parents. For example, when I am stressed from school, I often text my best friend to vent and get advice, which helps me relax.

建议: Give a clear topic sentence and specific examples. Fix vocabulary and grammar (e.g., "study topics," "ask questions when I am confused"). Use one linking word to connect ideas and mention a concrete example of a topic you discuss.

示例: We usually talk about schoolwork, especially difficult subjects or upcoming tests. For instance, if I don't understand a math problem, I’ll ask my friend to explain their method so I can compare solutions.

建议: Answer directly then give a brief reason and a specific supporting detail. Correct word choices (e.g., "hang out" not "play with"; "best friend" not "best man"). Keep sentences concise and coherent.

示例: I usually hang out with a group of friends, but I have one best friend who has been with me since kindergarten. We often talk about memories and support each other even when we’re in larger groups.

建议: Make a clear comparison and use correct grammar. State preference, give reasons (e.g., nonverbal cues, fewer misunderstandings), and provide a short example. Avoid vague or incorrect phrases about networks.

示例: I prefer face-to-face communication because it allows me to read body language and avoid misunderstandings. For example, during important conversations about school projects, meeting in person helps us coordinate tasks more effectively.

建议: Clarify whether you argue and why. Use simple, correct vocabulary to describe frequency and reason (e.g., "occasionally," "disagreements about plans"). Offer a short example of a recent disagreement and how you resolved it.

示例: Yes, we argue occasionally, usually about small things like plans or misunderstandings. For example, we once disagreed about where to go for lunch, but we talked it through and compromised by choosing a place we all liked.

× Yes I do. You know I am a child who never want to share every background and stories with my parents.

✓ Yes I do. You know I am a child who never wants to share every background and story with my parents.

Subject-verb agreement and noun number: 'who never want' should be 'who never wants' because the relative clause refers to 'I' (third person singular in the clause). Also 'stories' is fine but paired with 'every' it is better to use the singular 'story' or remove 'every'; 'every story' is more natural as singular. Suggestion: use 'never wants' and 'every story' or 'all the stories' depending on intended meaning.

× So when I feel trained and exhausted, I want to text and tell whole story with my friends.

✓ So when I feel tired and exhausted, I want to text and tell the whole story to my friends.

Word choice and preposition use: 'trained' is incorrect here; the correct adjective is 'tired'. Also 'tell whole story with my friends' needs article 'the' and preposition 'to' for 'tell the story to my friends'. Suggestion: use 'tired' and include 'the' and 'to'.

× I regard them like my peers, my deskmate and my.

✓ I regard them as my peers, my deskmate, and my close friends.

Incorrect structure and missing noun: use 'regard...as' not 'regard...like'. The list ends with 'and my' which is incomplete; provide a noun such as 'close friends'. Suggestion: use 'regard them as' and complete the list with proper nouns.

× I always chat with my friends some lessons at school and sometimes when I am so confused about straddle I winds up my friends some questions like this where so I thought arrange this straight on or not.

✓ I always chat with my friends about some lessons at school, and sometimes when I am confused about a topic I ask my friends questions like 'should I arrange this properly or not?'.

Several problems: missing preposition 'about' before 'some lessons', incorrect word 'straddle' likely intended 'a topic' or 'a problem', wrong verb form 'winds up' and subject-verb agreement 'winds' should be 'ask' in this context. The sentence is run-on and unclear; break into parts and use correct prepositions and verbs. Suggestion: use 'chat about', replace unclear words with 'a topic', and use 'I ask my friends questions'.

× To be honest, I play with a group of people but I just uh, I just have only friend who is my best man.

✓ To be honest, I hang out with a group of people, but I only have one friend who is my best friend.

Verb choice and article/pronoun errors: 'play with' is odd for socializing; 'hang out with' is better. 'have only friend' needs 'only have one friend'. 'best man' is a wedding role; use 'best friend'. Suggestion: use 'only have one friend' and 'best friend'.

× Also a person who play with me when I was a child, from when we were studying in the kindergarten and until the present.

✓ He is also a person who played with me when I was a child, from kindergarten until the present.

Tense and agreement: 'play' should be past 'played' to match 'when I was a child'. 'the kindergarten' is unnatural; 'kindergarten' without article is better. 'and until the present' should be 'until the present' or 'to this day'. Suggestion: use past tense and simpler phrase 'from kindergarten to this day'.

× I like communicating face to face than via social media because you love when you communicate with some people or an appointment via social media.

✓ I prefer communicating face to face rather than via social media because you lose some personal connection when you communicate with people or make appointments via social media.

Comparative structure and word choice: use 'prefer...rather than' not 'like...than'. 'you love' is incorrect; intended 'you lose'. 'some people or an appointment' should be 'people or make appointments'. Suggestion: use 'prefer...rather than' and 'lose some personal connection'.

× Sometime the green be large connection from network or is also the main reason why interrupt information detail.

✓ Sometimes a poor or weak network connection is the main reason why information is interrupted or details are missed.

Word choice and grammar: 'Sometime' should be 'Sometimes'. 'the green be large connection from network' is nonsensical; likely 'poor or weak network connection'. 'is also the main reason why interrupt information detail' should be 'is the main reason why information is interrupted or details are lost'. Suggestion: use clear adjectives 'poor/weak' and passive form 'is interrupted'.

× Yes, I am a pet temple person so sometimes time I always have a better controller with my friends in some specific situations.

✓ Yes, I am a patient person, so sometimes I lose my temper with my friends in specific situations.

Word choice and pronoun errors: 'pet temple' unclear; likely 'patient'. 'sometimes time I always have a better controller' is confusing; intended meaning seems to be the opposite—losing control—so use 'lose my temper' or 'lose control'. Suggestion: clarify meaning and use idiomatic expression 'lose my temper' or 'lose control'.