规则— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Speak more clearly and use a full, direct sentence as a topic sentence. Avoid filler words and grammar mistakes: say "There are several rules at my school," then give one or two specific examples with linking words. Keep it within 2–4 sentences.

示例: There are several rules at my school. For example, students must wear a uniform and behave respectfully in class. Also, we are expected to arrive on time and keep the campus clean.

建议: Be more precise in your reasoning and avoid vague words like "accurate" or too many hesitations. Start with a clear opinion, then give one concise reason and an example. Use linking words such as "because" or "so" correctly.

示例: Yes, I do, because more consistent rules can create a fair environment. For example, a uniform policy prevents students from comparing clothes, which reduces social pressure and bullying.

建议: Use fewer repetitions and correct verb forms. Start with a clear topic sentence and provide specific evidence of dedication (actions or results). Link sentences with words like "for example" or "because" but avoid repeating the same phrase.

示例: Yes, I have. My mother-tongue teacher is very dedicated because she gives extra lessons after school and provides individual feedback. For example, she helped many students improve their grades by reviewing their essays one-on-one.

建议: Answer the question directly (do you prefer more or fewer?), then give 2–3 clear reasons with linking words. Avoid confusing phrasing and grammar errors (e.g., "too many rules," "lose their motivation"). Make examples concise and relevant.

示例: I prefer fewer rules. Too many rules can create unnecessary pressure and reduce students' motivation. Reasonable rules like wearing uniforms and showing respect are enough to maintain order.

建议: Be concise and correct pronouns and tenses. Begin with a clear topic sentence and provide a specific example of strictness and its effect. Remove fillers and finish the sentence logically.

示例: Yes. My algebra teacher was very strict about punctuality; if we were even a minute late he would reprimand us and sometimes refuse entry. Although it was harsh, it taught us to be punctual.

建议: State your opinion clearly and support it with one or two concrete reasons and an example. Avoid redundant phrases and awkward grammar. Use linking words like "because" and "for example" to structure your answer.

示例: No, I would not. I think rules are necessary because they create order and mutual respect. For example, without any rules students might arrive late, disturb lessons, and reduce learning for everyone.

× Definitely there are some rules for students must have to do, for example wearing a uniform in a behave uh. Behave well in school.

✓ There are definitely some rules that students must follow, for example wearing a uniform and behaving well at school.

Original sentence has incorrect clause order and redundant/modal words ('must have to do') and fragmented phrasing ('in a behave'). Use a relative clause 'that students must follow' and parallel gerunds 'wearing' and 'behaving' to make the sentence grammatical and clear.

× Yes, of course, because students feel more, umm, more accurate and it makes like people equal so they don't uh, compare themselves to anyone at school.

✓ Yes, of course, because students feel more confident and it makes people equal so they don't compare themselves to anyone at school.

'More accurate' is incorrect here; 'confident' or 'secure' fits the intended meaning. Remove filler words like 'like' and unnecessary repetition. This fixes adjective choice and clarity.

× Yeah, of course, for example, my mother tongue teacher is very dedicated and always try to support every student each every student at class because she always try her best to help there, help them to achieve their goals.

✓ Yes, of course. For example, my mother-tongue teacher is very dedicated and always tries to support every student in class because she always tries her best to help them achieve their goals.

Subject-verb agreement and verb form: with singular subject 'teacher' use 'tries'. Remove redundancy ('each every student', 'help there') and use 'in class' and 'help them achieve' (infinitive without 'to' after 'help') to make the sentence concise and grammatical.

× So because of this reason, I I think yeah, she's the most determined, dedicated teacher in my school.

✓ For this reason, I think she is the most determined and dedicated teacher in my school.

Remove repetition and informal fillers. Use 'she is' instead of contraction stacked and include 'and' to connect adjectives. This improves subject-verb clarity and registers.

× No, I think nowadays we have rules. So rules, so it's not for students because too much rules also put pressure for our students and lose their motivation because of these rules.

✓ No, I think our school already has rules, but too many rules put pressure on students and reduce their motivation.

Original has repetition and incorrect plural agreement ('too much rules' should be 'too many rules') and awkward phrasing. Use concise clause structure and correct quantifier for countable noun 'rules'.

× So I think they were in uniform and behave well at school and respect each other.

✓ So I think they should wear uniforms, behave well at school, and respect each other.

'Were in uniform' is tense/mood incorrect; use modal 'should wear' for suggestion. Use parallel verb forms and plural 'uniforms' or 'wear uniforms'. This corrects preposition/mood and makes the recommendation clear.

× For example, students and teachers is the like enough, uh, rules for everyone.

✓ For example, rules about students and teachers are enough for everyone.

Subject 'rules' is plural and requires 'are' not 'is'. Rephrase to clarify meaning and remove filler words.

× Yes, of course, my algebra teacher is really, really, you know, strict because when we, for example, when we late for his class, even a minute, he always give us, you know, strict looked and always like told us not to, not to be late for her for his class because, uh, he's.

✓ Yes, of course. My algebra teacher is very strict because when we are late for his class, even by a minute, he always gives us a stern look and tells us not to be late for his class.

Fix present-tense forms: 'we are late' and singular 'he gives' and 'tells'. Remove contradictory pronouns ('her for his class') and filler words. Use 'stern look' for natural phrasing.

× No, I don't like it because you know, really the most important thing everywhere, because if it's there's there is no rule, then maybe no one can respect each other and they don't obey rules and it causes some of the disagreements between people such as maybe they can don't respect each other and behave badly.

✓ No, I wouldn't like that because rules are important everywhere; if there are no rules, people may not respect each other or obey guidelines, which can cause disagreements and bad behavior.

Original misuses 'there is'/'it's there's' and has many redundancies and incorrect verb forms ('they can don't'). Use 'if there are no rules' (plural agreement) and simplify sentence structure. Replace awkward constructions with clear modal 'may' and parallel verbs 'respect' and 'obey'.