规则— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be more concise and avoid repeating the same phrase (“for example”) twice. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one specific supporting detail. Use varied vocabulary (e.g., “assessment schedule” instead of repeating “rules about the time management”).

示例: Yes. My school has several rules, especially about assessments. For instance, the assessment schedule requires each student to sit three tests per semester, which helps teachers monitor progress.

建议: Give a clear topic sentence and support it with a specific reason and a linking word. Correct grammar (subject-verb agreement and plural forms) and avoid vague phrases like “space that student can develop themselves.”

示例: No. I think adding more rules would hinder students’ development because strict classroom rules can discourage askings of questions. For example, if a teacher imposes rigid procedures, students may feel embarrassed to speak up and thus miss learning opportunities.

建议: Provide a complete, grammatical supporting detail and avoid unfinished sentences. Use past tense consistently for past events and be specific about what the teacher did and the result for students.

示例: Yes. In high school my English teacher was very dedicated. She regularly assigned extensive writing exercises, marked them thoroughly with detailed comments, and often held extra sessions to discuss how we could improve our essays.

建议: Correct word choice and grammar (roles → rules; a friendly; ask question → ask questions). Give one clear reason and a specific example, using a linking word to connect ideas.

示例: I prefer fewer rules because a relaxed atmosphere encourages participation. For example, in a less strict class, students feel comfortable asking questions and sharing opinions, which improves discussion quality.

建议: Fix pronoun and gender consistency, and use precise vocabulary (e.g., “strict” not “stressed”). Finish your supporting detail with a concrete example and correct tense. Keep it concise and cohesive.

示例: Yes. My high school math teacher was very strict and usually kept a poker face in class, which made students nervous. However, he was also committed to our progress and often spent extra time after school tutoring those who struggled.

建议: Clarify unclear phrase (“Row 3 school”) and be more specific about the challenges. Use linking words (e.g., “because” and “so”) but avoid repetition. Provide one concrete reason and possible effect on teaching.

示例: No. I would not want to teach in a rule-free school because without clear expectations it would be difficult to manage behaviour and maintain focus. As a result, lessons could be disrupted and student learning would suffer.

× No, I think more rules will limit the space that student can develop themselves.

✓ No, I think more rules will limit the space that students can use to develop themselves.

The noun 'student' should be plural 'students' to agree with the plural determiner 'more rules' and general reference to all students. Also changed wording to 'use to develop themselves' for natural expression.

× For example, if one teacher have too many rules on the classroom, student cannot easily ask questions to teacher.

✓ For example, if one teacher has too many rules in the classroom, students cannot easily ask questions of the teacher.

Verb 'have' must be 'has' to match third person singular subject 'one teacher' (rule 2). Also 'on the classroom' should be 'in the classroom' (preposition) and 'student' should be plural 'students'; 'ask questions to teacher' is corrected to 'ask questions of the teacher' for natural phrasing.

× For example, she always asks us to do a lot of writing exercises, and she would write it very seriously and give.

✓ For example, she always asked us to do a lot of writing exercises, and she would correct them very carefully and give feedback.

The original mixes past description with present-tense 'asks'; because the context is past ('when I was a high school student'), verbs should be past tense: 'asked' (tense issue) and 'would correct' fits habitual past. 'Write it' is incorrect: teachers correct students' work and give feedback; changed to 'correct them' and 'give feedback' for clarity.

× I prefer fewer roles at school because I think this can provide an friendly atmosphere in the learning environment.

✓ I prefer fewer rules at school because I think this can provide a friendly atmosphere in the learning environment.

The word 'roles' is incorrect; context requires 'rules'. Also 'an friendly' is wrong article use before consonant sound; should be 'a friendly'. This fixes word choice and article error.

× Students are more willing to ask question there and give their own opinions in the classroom.

✓ Students are more willing to ask questions there and give their own opinions in the classroom.

The noun 'question' should be plural 'questions' to match 'Students are more willing to ask' and to be grammatically correct when speaking of asking multiple or any questions.

× Yes, my high school math teacher was very stressed that he always had a poker face on the class.

✓ Yes, my high school math teacher was very strict; he always had a poker face in class.

'Stressed' (feeling) is not the intended meaning; context implies 'strict' (adjective describing behavior). Also 'on the class' should be 'in class'. Replaced semantically and corrected prepositional phrase.

× However, she was dedicated to the student at other aspects.

✓ However, he was dedicated to the students in other aspects.

Pronoun gender must match earlier 'my high school math teacher was... he' (use 'he'). 'Student' should be plural 'students' and 'at other aspects' is unnatural; 'in other aspects' is correct prepositional choice.

× For example, he would like to spend a lot of time on.

✓ For example, he would spend a lot of time helping students with difficult problems.

The original sentence is incomplete and lacks an object ('on' needs an object). Rewrote to provide a clear object and complete structure: 'spend a lot of time helping students with difficult problems.'

× No, I don't want to work as a teacher in a Row 3 school because I think in that kind of environment it is hard to control and teach your students.

✓ No, I don't want to work as a teacher in a rule-free school because I think in that kind of environment it is hard to control and teach students.

'Row 3' appears incorrect; corrected to 'rule-free' matching the question. Removed second-person 'your students' to maintain neutral perspective 'students'. This fixes word choice and pronoun use.

× Yes, when I was a high school student, my English teacher was very dedicated and devoted to her students.

✓ Yes, when I was a high school student, my English teacher was very dedicated and devoted to her students.

This sentence is already correct; 'dedicated' and 'devoted' are past participle adjectives correctly used to describe the teacher. No grammatical change needed.