规则— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Your answer is relevant but contains grammatical errors and some redundancy. Try to use correct grammar, avoid repetition, and be more concise. Also, use linking words to improve coherence.

示例: Yes, there are several rules at my school. For example, students must wear uniforms and show respect to everyone, whether they are older or younger. Additionally, there are other rules to maintain discipline.

建议: Your answer is quite long and repetitive. Focus on clear sentence structure and avoid repeating the same ideas. Use linking words to connect your points logically.

示例: I believe students would benefit from having more rules because following them helps develop discipline. For instance, respecting others and adhering to dress codes prepare students for societal expectations.

建议: There are several grammatical mistakes and confusion in pronouns. Also, avoid redundancy and improve sentence clarity. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

示例: Yes, I have a teacher who does his job very well. For example, Sunil Thakur Sir is respectful and always treats students kindly. Moreover, he teaches with a smile, which makes learning enjoyable.

× Definitely there are various kinds of role in our schools such as wearing uniform, respect each and everyone if they are elder or if they are younger.

✓ Definitely there are various kinds of roles in our schools such as wearing uniforms, respecting each and everyone if they are elder or if they are younger.

The word 'role' should be plural 'roles' because it refers to multiple types of rules. Also, 'wearing uniform' should be 'wearing uniforms' to match plural usage. 'Respect each and everyone' should be 'respecting each and everyone' to maintain parallel structure with 'wearing' and to use the gerund form correctly.

× Other than this, there are many more rules to be in a discipline.

✓ Other than this, there are many more rules to maintain discipline.

The phrase 'to be in a discipline' is incorrect. The correct expression is 'to maintain discipline' or 'to be disciplined'. 'Discipline' is an uncountable noun here and does not require an article or the preposition 'in'.

× From my perspective, definitely children would benefit more from more rules as if they implement that rules in their life, they will be more successful as there are various kinds of role in society and school which students can follow such as respecting each and everyone and follow the dress code and many more.

✓ From my perspective, definitely children would benefit more from more rules as if they implement those rules in their lives, they will be more successful as there are various kinds of roles in society and school which students can follow such as respecting each and everyone and following the dress code and many more.

The word 'that rules' should be 'those rules' to correctly refer to plural rules. 'Life' should be plural 'lives' because it refers to multiple children. 'Role' should be plural 'roles' to match the plural context. 'Follow' should be 'following' to maintain parallel gerund form with 'respecting'.

× Absolutely, all of the teacher in my school did her job very well.

✓ Absolutely, all of the teachers in my school do their job very well.

'Teacher' should be plural 'teachers' because 'all of' refers to multiple people. 'Did' should be 'do' to match present tense context. 'Her' should be 'their' to agree with plural subject 'teachers'.

× Well, I would like to talk about Sunil Thakur Sir. He was so obedient and he he is very respectful and he always respect children and students.

✓ Well, I would like to talk about Sunil Thakur Sir. He is very obedient and respectful and he always respects children and students.

'He was so obedient' should be 'He is very obedient' to maintain present tense. 'He he' is a repetition error and should be corrected to 'he'. 'Respect' should be 'respects' to agree with third person singular subject 'he'.

× Other than this, she always teaches with a happy mood, with a smile, which makes us learning very easy.

✓ Other than this, he always teaches with a happy mood, with a smile, which makes our learning very easy.

The pronoun 'she' is incorrect because the subject is 'Sunil Thakur Sir', a male, so it should be 'he'. 'Makes us learning' is incorrect; it should be 'makes our learning' to correctly use the possessive pronoun and noun form.