规则— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Your answer needs to be clearer and more natural. Avoid redundancy and incorrect phrases like "foods that are in my school". Also, try to use linking words to connect your ideas logically. For example, start with a clear topic sentence, then add specific rules with linking words such as "for example" or "also".

示例: Yes, there are several rules for students at my school. For example, students must wear the school uniform every day. Also, they should bring all their books to class. Additionally, maintaining neat nails and appropriate hairstyles is required.

建议: Your answer is somewhat unclear and contains grammatical errors. Try to express your ideas more clearly and use linking words to connect your points. Also, avoid vague phrases like "things that if they will be like a student". Focus on specific benefits of rules with clear reasons.

示例: Yes, I believe students benefit from having rules at school. For instance, bringing all necessary books helps them follow lessons properly and learn effectively. Moreover, wearing the proper uniform creates a sense of discipline and makes students look presentable.

建议: Your answer is good but can be improved by using more natural expressions and linking words to make it coherent. For example, instead of "kind heart person", say "kind-hearted person". Also, combine sentences using linking words like "and" or "who" to avoid choppiness.

示例: Yes, I have an English teacher who does his job very well. He is a kind-hearted person who helps students in every situation and motivates them to become good individuals in their lives.

× There are a number of foods that are in my school for students.

✓ There are a number of rules that are in my school for students.

The word 'foods' is incorrect in this context because the sentence is about rules, not food items. The correct quantifier should be used with 'rules' to convey the intended meaning.

× Students must have to wear school uniform in daily routine, they should have their all books available, their nails cut properly and their hairstyle must be like students.

✓ Students must wear school uniform daily, they should have all their books available, keep their nails cut properly, and have hairstyles appropriate for students.

The phrase 'must have to' is redundant; 'must' alone is sufficient to express obligation. Also, 'in daily routine' is better expressed as 'daily'. The phrase 'their all books' should be 'all their books' for correct word order. The phrase 'their hairstyle must be like students' is unclear and corrected to 'have hairstyles appropriate for students' for clarity.

× If they bring their all books in school for less to take classes properly, they will learn something new.

✓ If they bring all their books to school to attend classes properly, they will learn something new.

The phrase 'their all books' is incorrect; the correct order is 'all their books'. 'In school for less to take classes' is unclear and corrected to 'to school to attend classes' for clarity and correctness.

× Things that if they will be like a student in proper uniform, they will look very attractive.

✓ If they wear proper school uniforms, they will look very attractive as students.

The original sentence is awkward and unclear. 'If they will be like a student' is incorrect; it should be 'if they wear proper school uniforms'. The sentence is restructured for clarity and grammatical correctness.

× Yes, my English teacher is very kind heart person.

✓ Yes, my English teacher is a very kind-hearted person.

The phrase 'kind heart person' is incorrect. The correct adjective form is 'kind-hearted' and the article 'a' is needed before the noun 'person'.