图书馆— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Your answer is somewhat repetitive and includes filler words like 'umm' and 'uh' which affect the natural flow. Try to be more concise and avoid repeating phrases such as 'far away'. Also, structure your answer with a clear topic sentence followed by supporting details using linking words for coherence.

示例: I don't often go to the library because the nearest one is quite far from where I live. Therefore, I usually buy second-hand books to read at home, which is more convenient for me.

建议: Your answer is relevant but contains repetition ('generally generally') and filler words ('uh'). Try to avoid repeating words and use linking words like 'for example' or 'in addition' to connect ideas smoothly. Also, be more specific about what kind of research you did to enrich your answer.

示例: People usually go to the library to read books. For example, when I was in school, I used the library to find answers for my textbooks and to research topics, which helped me improve my exam results.

建议: Your answer is heartfelt but includes filler words and some redundancy ('I'm a part of, I'm a part of that room'). Try to express your feelings more clearly and avoid repeating phrases. Use linking words like 'because' to explain why the library was your favourite place.

示例: When I was a kid, we had a special library class, which was my favourite time of the day because I loved being surrounded by books. The library felt like my second home, and I always enjoyed spending time there.

建议: Your answer lacks confidence and contains many filler words ('uh', 'umm'). Try to avoid these and give a more direct response. Use linking words like 'however' or 'but' to contrast ideas and provide clearer opinions. Also, avoid vague phrases like 'just like other normal kids' and be more specific.

示例: I'm not certain about how often Chinese kids go to the library. However, I believe that, like children elsewhere, many Chinese parents encourage their kids to visit libraries because they value education highly.

× I don't really go to library because, umm, in, in the place where I live, uh, libraries are kind of far away, far away.

✓ I don't really go to the library because, umm, in the place where I live, uh, libraries are kind of far away, far away.

The noun 'library' is countable and singular here, so it requires the definite article 'the' to specify the particular library being referred to. Omitting 'the' before 'library' is incorrect in this context.

× So it's very hard to commute to go to the library every single day. Uh, instead of that, I try to read books on my own, which I, uh, buy it in the second hand store or sometimes when the novels are done, I try.

✓ So it's very hard to commute to go to the library every single day. Uh, instead of that, I try to read books on my own, which I, uh, buy in the second hand store or sometimes when the novels are done, I try.

The pronoun 'it' is unnecessary and incorrect after 'buy' because 'which' already refers to 'books'. Using 'buy it' is redundant and grammatically incorrect; the correct form is 'buy' without 'it'.

× People generally generally go to read the books.

✓ People generally go to read books.

The plural noun 'books' here is used in a general sense, so the definite article 'the' is not needed. Also, the word 'generally' is repeated unnecessarily. Removing 'the' and the duplicate 'generally' corrects the sentence.

× I used to go to the library to uh find out the answers of my textbooks.

✓ I used to go to the library to uh find out the answers in my textbooks.

The correct preposition to use with 'answers' in this context is 'in' rather than 'of'. 'Answers of my textbooks' is incorrect; it should be 'answers in my textbooks'.

× Sometimes I even used to do research about certain notes or certain topics which helped me to ace better in my exams.

✓ Sometimes I even used to do research on certain notes or certain topics which helped me to ace better in my exams.

The verb 'do research' is typically followed by the preposition 'on' rather than 'about'. Using 'research about' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'do research on'.

× So every time there used to be a library period, I used to be very happy.

✓ So every time there used to be a library period, I used to be very happy.

This sentence is correct as it is; no correction needed.

× That was my most favorite time of the day.

✓ That was my favourite time of the day.

The phrase 'most favorite' is redundant because 'favorite' already implies the superlative. The correct form is simply 'favourite'.

× Umm, every time when I entered the library, it used to make me feel like, you know, I'm a part of, I'm a part of that room.

✓ Umm, every time when I entered the library, it used to make me feel like, you know, I'm a part of that room.

The phrase 'I'm a part of' is repeated unnecessarily. Removing the repetition improves clarity and correctness.

× Let's say it's like my second home.

✓ Let's say it's like my second home.

This sentence is correct as it is; no correction needed.

× I'm not pretty sure if Chinese people go to the library a lot, uh, since I don't have much information about it.

✓ I'm not quite sure if Chinese people go to the library a lot, uh, since I don't have much information about it.

The phrase 'not pretty sure' is incorrect; the correct expression is 'not quite sure' to express uncertainty.

× But as far as I know, uh, Chinese people are just like, uh, just like other, any other normal kids.

✓ But as far as I know, uh, Chinese people are just like, uh, any other normal kids.

The phrase 'just like other, any other' is redundant and awkward. Removing 'just like other' makes the sentence clearer and grammatically correct.

× So I think their parents also, they send the kids to the library, umm, as I know that they are very enthusiastic about the studies.

✓ So I think their parents also send the kids to the library, umm, as I know that they are very enthusiastic about their studies.

The pronoun 'they' is unnecessary after 'parents also'. Also, 'the studies' should be 'their studies' to indicate possession. Removing 'they' and changing 'the' to 'their' corrects the sentence.