图书馆— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Your answer is generally clear and relevant, but it contains some informal language and filler words such as "'cause" and could be more concise. Try to avoid contractions and informal phrases in IELTS speaking to sound more natural and formal. Also, use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

示例: I used to visit the library frequently when I was a student. However, now that I am working, I rarely have the chance to go because I need to concentrate on my job.

建议: Your answer includes many filler words such as "umm" and "you know," which affect fluency and naturalness. Also, the sentence structure is somewhat fragmented. Try to organise your answer with clear topic and supporting sentences, use linking words, and avoid fillers to improve coherence and fluency.

示例: When I was a student, I usually used the library to access various academic journals for my writing. Additionally, since I majored in broadcast journalism, I often retrieved archives of old footage, which was essential for my studies.

建议: Your answer is relevant but contains informal language and filler words like "'cause," "uh," and "you know." Also, the last sentence is unclear and does not directly relate to the question. Try to provide a clear, direct response with specific details and avoid informal expressions.

示例: I did not often go to the library as a child because I was born and raised in mainland China, where there were limited resources in the 1990s. Therefore, I had fewer opportunities to visit libraries during my childhood.

建议: Your answer is somewhat unclear and contains many filler words and informal phrases such as "you know," "umm," and "I guess." The structure is also confusing. Try to give a clear, well-structured answer with appropriate linking words and specific examples, avoiding fillers and informal language.

示例: It depends on the circumstances. Children from underprivileged or grassroots families often visit libraries because they have limited access to books at home. In contrast, children from more privileged backgrounds may not need to go to libraries as frequently since they have other resources available.

× I needed the access, umm, to, you know, different journals, umm, for my academic writing and also I need to retrieve the umm, archives of old footage 'cause I was majored, umm, in broadcast journalism and that requires a lot of watching.

✓ I needed access, umm, to, you know, different journals, umm, for my academic writing and also I needed to retrieve the umm, archives of old footage 'cause I majored, umm, in broadcast journalism and that requires a lot of watching.

The phrase 'I was majored' is incorrect because 'major' is not used in the passive form here. The correct form is 'I majored' to indicate the past action of choosing a major. Also, 'I need to retrieve' should be 'I needed to retrieve' to maintain past tense consistency with the rest of the sentence.

× For those who don't have access to, you know, resources, umm, books, you know, those from the underprivileged and grassroot families, I guess the yeah, they often go to a library.

✓ For those who don't have access to, you know, resources, umm, books, you know, those from underprivileged and grassroots families, I guess, yeah, they often go to a library.

The word 'grassroot' should be plural 'grassroots' when referring to families belonging to the grassroots level. Also, 'the underprivileged' is correct without 'the' before 'grassroot families' to maintain parallel structure.

× But for those, you know, privileged kid, they don't need to go to.

✓ But for those, you know, privileged kids, they don't need to go.

The word 'kid' should be plural 'kids' because it refers to 'those', which is plural. Also, the phrase 'go to' is incomplete and should be 'go' to make the sentence grammatically correct.