图书馆— Part 1 评分报告

建议: ຄວນໃຊ້ພາສາອັງກິດທີ່ຖືກຕ້ອງ ແລະ ສະຫຼຸບໃຫ້ສັ້ນແລະຊັດເຈນ. ຄຳວ່າ "burying the book" ບໍ່ຖືກຕ້ອງ, ຄວນໃຊ້ "read books" ຫຼື "study" ແທນ. ພະຍາຍາມບອກເຫດຜົນທີ່ເຮົາມາຫາຫ້ອງສະໝຸດ.

示例: Yes, I often go to the library because it is a quiet place where I can read books and concentrate on my studies.

建议: ຄວນເລີ່ມຕົ້ນດ້ວຍການຕອບຕົວຢ່າງທີ່ຊັດເຈນ ແລະ ພະຍາຍາມໃຊ້ຄຳສັບທີ່ຖືກຕ້ອງ. ບໍ່ຕ້ອງຂອບໃຈຜູ້ສອບຖາມ ແລະ ຄວນອະທິບາຍເພີ່ມເຕີມກ່ອນຈະສະແດງຄວາມຄິດເຫັນ.

示例: In the library, I usually borrow books and read them carefully to learn new information.

建议: ຄວນໃຊ້ພາສາທີ່ຖືກຕ້ອງ ແລະ ສະຫຼຸບໃຫ້ສັ້ນແລະຊັດເຈນ. ຄວນອະທິບາຍເຫດຜົນຢ່າງຊັດເຈນ ແລະ ບໍ່ຕ້ອງໃຊ້ຄຳຜິດພາສາ.

示例: No, I did not go to the library when I was a child because my school did not have one. But now that I am grown up, I enjoy visiting the library.

建议: ຄວນໃຊ້ພາສາທີ່ຖືກຕ້ອງ ແລະ ສະຫຼຸບໃຫ້ຊັດເຈນ. ຄວນອະທິບາຍເຫດຜົນຢ່າງຊັດເຈນ ແລະ ບໍ່ໃຊ້ຄຳຜິດພາສາ ເຊັ່ນ "louse kid" ທີ່ບໍ່ເໝາະສົມ.

示例: Although I am not from China, I think Chinese children often go to the library because education is very competitive there.

× Yes, I often go to the library because it's the place quiet and I can burying the book.

✓ Yes, I often go to the library because it's a quiet place and I can bury myself in the book.

The adjective 'quiet' should be placed before the noun 'place' to correctly describe it. Also, 'burying the book' is incorrect; the correct expression is 'bury myself in the book' meaning to immerse oneself in reading.

× Thank you for questions in the library.

✓ Thank you for the questions about the library.

The phrase 'Thank you for questions in the library' is unclear and grammatically incorrect. It should be 'Thank you for the questions about the library' to properly express gratitude for the questions asked.

× I like to borrowing a book and to read the information on that book.

✓ I like borrowing a book and reading the information in that book.

After 'like', the gerund form (verb + -ing) is used rather than the infinitive 'to borrow'. Also, 'to read' should be 'reading' to maintain parallel structure.

× I pay attention for five the.

✓ I pay attention for five minutes.

The phrase 'pay attention for five the' is incorrect. The correct preposition is 'for' followed by the duration 'five minutes'. The word 'the' is unnecessary here.

× No, because when I were a KISS, my school didn't have the library to go to research for information for, to protect.

✓ No, because when I was a kid, my school didn't have a library to go to for researching information or for protection.

The subject 'I' requires the past tense verb 'was' instead of 'were'. 'KISS' is likely a typo for 'kid'. Also, 'to go to research for information for, to protect' is awkward and unclear; it should be 'to go to for researching information or for protection'.

× And right now when I'm with, when I'm grow up, I like to go to the library.

✓ And right now, as I have grown up, I like to go to the library.

The phrase 'when I'm grow up' is incorrect; the correct form is 'as I have grown up' or 'now that I have grown up'. Also, 'when I'm with' is unclear and unnecessary.

× Actually I'm a louse kid, but I guess is yes, because in Chinese country they have a highly competitions for study and like leave.

✓ Actually, I'm a lazy kid, but I guess yes, because in China they have high competition for studying and exams.

'Louse kid' is incorrect; likely meant 'lazy kid'. 'Chinese country' should be 'China'. 'Highly competitions' is incorrect; 'high competition' is correct. 'Like leave' is unclear and likely a mishearing or typo; replaced with 'exams' to fit context.

× Yeah, I think they often go to the library.

✓ Yeah, I think they often go to the library.

This sentence is correct and requires no correction.