图书馆— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Your answer is relevant but has grammatical errors and redundancy. Try to make your sentences clearer and more concise. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly. For example, start with a direct answer, then explain why, and give a specific detail.

示例: Yes, I often go to the library on weekends because it helps me improve my reading skills. Moreover, I can learn many interesting facts and useful quotes from the books available there.

建议: Your answer covers the topic but is a bit long and slightly unclear. Use linking words to organise your ideas and avoid repeating similar phrases. Also, try to be more specific about the types of books you read.

示例: In the library, I usually read books that can help me in the future, such as career guidance books. Additionally, I enjoy reading books about moral values and proper etiquette.

建议: Your answer has grammatical mistakes and awkward phrasing. Use past tense correctly and structure your answer with a clear topic sentence followed by supporting details. Avoid filler words like 'Uh'.

示例: I did not visit the library regularly when I was a kid. However, during my school days, I often went to the library with my friends.

建议: Your answer is unclear and contains grammatical errors. Try to express your opinion clearly and support it with reasons. Use linking words to connect your ideas logically.

示例: I think it depends on the individual, but many Chinese kids often visit libraries. This is because they value education and use advanced learning techniques to improve their knowledge.

× As the books in the library we we acquire many knowledgeable facts and daily life quotes from the library books.

✓ From the books in the library, we acquire many knowledgeable facts and daily life quotes.

The original sentence has redundancy and incorrect structure. 'As the books in the library' is incorrect; it should be 'From the books in the library' to indicate the source. Also, 'we we' is a repetition error. Correcting these improves clarity and grammatical correctness.

× I usually read the books which may help in my future such as the career suggestion books and the books that have moral values and etiquettes of living the life and various other books also.

✓ I usually read books that may help me in the future, such as career suggestion books, books that have moral values and etiquettes of living life, and various other books as well.

The phrase 'help in my future' is incorrect; it should be 'help me in the future' to correctly express assistance. Also, 'the books' is unnecessarily repeated and 'living the life' should be 'living life'. The sentence is restructured for clarity and grammatical accuracy.

× Uh, I don't visit regularly library when I was a kid, but sometimes in my school days I often visit library with my friends.

✓ Uh, I didn't visit the library regularly when I was a kid, but sometimes during my school days, I often visited the library with my friends.

The sentence mixes present tense 'don't visit' with past time 'when I was a kid'. It should be in past tense 'didn't visit' to match the time frame. Also, 'visit library' needs the article 'the' before 'library'. The verb 'visit' is corrected to past tense 'visited' for consistency.

× This depends upon person to person prospective as the Chinese kids have more knowledge and they are using the techniques in advanced ways.

✓ This depends on a person-to-person perspective, as Chinese kids have more knowledge and are using techniques in advanced ways.

The phrase 'depends upon person to person prospective' is incorrect. It should be 'depends on a person-to-person perspective'. 'Prospective' is a wrong word here; 'perspective' is correct. Also, 'the Chinese kids' is better as 'Chinese kids' without 'the' for generalization.

× So I think that they are going to libraries for more often than the other kids.

✓ So I think that they go to libraries more often than other kids.

The phrase 'are going to libraries for more often' is incorrect. The correct form is 'go to libraries more often'. The use of 'for' is unnecessary and incorrect here. Also, 'the other kids' should be 'other kids' for general comparison.