唱歌— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Your answer is somewhat repetitive and contains grammatical errors. Try to make your response more natural and concise by avoiding redundancy and correcting sentence structures. Use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly.

示例: Yes, I enjoy singing because it helps me relax and lifts my mood. It allows me to express myself and forget about stress for a while.

建议: Your answer lacks clarity and has grammatical mistakes. Try to organize your response with a clear topic sentence and supporting details using linking words. Avoid repeating phrases and improve sentence structure for better coherence.

示例: I have never taken professional singing lessons, but I often sing with my friends in a group. We enjoy syncing our voices and learning from each other informally.

建议: Your answer shows passion but contains some unclear words and repetition. Use precise vocabulary and avoid repeating the same ideas. Structure your answer with a clear topic sentence and supporting details linked logically.

示例: I want to sing for my country and its people, especially those who have bravely stood up for freedom and sacrificed their lives. Singing for them would be an honor.

建议: Your answer is unclear and contains many grammatical errors. Try to express your ideas clearly and use linking words to connect your points. Avoid repetition and use appropriate vocabulary to explain how singing brings happiness.

示例: Yes, I believe singing brings happiness because it allows people to express their feelings, relax their minds, and boost their energy. It can also help reduce boredom and tiredness.

× Singing is a it's a mean to please yourself.

✓ Singing is a means to please yourself.

The word 'mean' should be 'means' because 'means' is a singular noun meaning a method or way. 'Mean' is a verb or adjective, so the correct form here is 'means'.

× It's mean to get relaxed.

✓ It means to get relaxed.

The subject 'It' requires the verb 'means' in third person singular form to agree with the subject. 'Mean' is incorrect here as it does not agree with the singular subject.

× It mean to relax your hormones and enjoy for a couple of seconds to to remove the boring sense of yourself.

✓ It means to relax your hormones and enjoy for a couple of seconds to remove the boring sense of yourself.

The verb 'mean' should be 'means' to agree with the singular subject 'It'. Also, the repeated 'to' is a typographical error and should be corrected.

× So yeah, I like singing it just to heal you.

✓ So yeah, I like singing; it just heals you.

The original sentence is a run-on and unclear. Separating into two clauses with a semicolon and changing 'heal' to 'heals' to agree with 'it' improves clarity and grammar.

× If I talk about professionally, so my answer would be no.

✓ If I talk about it professionally, my answer would be no.

The phrase 'If I talk about professionally' is incomplete; adding 'it' clarifies the object. Also, 'so' is unnecessary and can be removed for better sentence flow.

× Like I haven't learned about it in any class.

✓ I haven't learned it in any class.

The phrase 'learned about it' is less appropriate here; 'learned it' is more natural when referring to a skill. Also, starting with 'Like' is informal and can be omitted.

× But we as a friend we kind of sync together.

✓ But we, as friends, kind of sync together.

The phrase 'we as a friend' is incorrect because 'we' is plural and 'a friend' is singular. Changing to 'as friends' matches the plural subject.

× So sometimes we are singing together in a group.

✓ So sometimes we sing together in a group.

Using present continuous 'are singing' is less appropriate here; simple present 'sing' is better for habitual actions.

× So I learn one of my friend but never in a class.

✓ So I learn from one of my friends but never in a class.

The phrase 'learn one of my friend' is incorrect; it should be 'learn from one of my friends' to indicate the source of learning. Also, 'friend' should be plural 'friends'.

× So we whenever we sit together in a group so we just sync together.

✓ So whenever we sit together in a group, we just sync together.

The sentence has redundant 'so' and awkward structure. Removing the first 'so' and adding a comma improves clarity.

× I want to sing for the humidity.

✓ I want to sing for the humanity.

The word 'humidity' is incorrect in this context; the correct word is 'humanity' meaning all human beings.

× I want to sing for the people who raised their voices against the rebellion.

✓ I want to sing for the people who have raised their voices against the rebellion.

Using present perfect 'have raised' is better to indicate an action relevant to the present. Also, the sentence is acceptable but this tense improves clarity.

× I want to sing for the people who gave up their lives for the for the for their country.

✓ I want to sing for the people who gave up their lives for their country.

The phrase has repeated 'for the' which is a typographical error and should be corrected.

× He absolutely singing can bring happiness to people like by singing they can they can share inner feeling of their self, they can relax their minds, they can singing can boost their energy and it can have them to get out of bornish an it can help them to heal and get rid of tiredness and yeah it will have.

✓ Absolutely, singing can bring happiness to people. By singing, they can share their inner feelings, relax their minds, boost their energy, get out of boredom, and it can help them heal and get rid of tiredness.

The original sentence has multiple errors: 'He' is incorrect and should be omitted; 'they can they can' is repetitive; 'inner feeling of their self' should be 'their inner feelings'; 'can singing can boost' is incorrect; 'have them to get out of bornish' is incorrect and should be 'get out of boredom'; sentence is run-on and needs to be split for clarity.