唱歌— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Your answer is a bit unclear and contains repetition. Try to make your sentences clear and avoid repeating phrases. Also, use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly. For example, you can say, "Yes, I like singing because it helps me feel less stressed and keeps me organized."

示例: Yes, I like singing because it helps me feel less stressed and keeps me organized. Moreover, singing allows me to express my emotions and relax after a busy day.

建议: Your answer has grammatical errors and unclear phrases. Use past tense consistently and clarify your points. Also, avoid unnecessary details that confuse the listener. For example, you can say, "Yes, I learned to sing when I was in school. I participated in singing competitions and practiced regularly."

示例: Yes, I learned to sing when I was in school. I participated in several singing competitions and practiced regularly to improve my skills.

建议: Your answer has repetition and unclear expressions. Use correct vocabulary and structure your answer clearly. For example, say, "I want to sing for my family because they always support me. Singing for them makes me feel relaxed and happy."

示例: I want to sing for my family because they always support me. Singing for them gives me a good feeling and helps me relax.

建议: Your answer has repetition and unclear phrases. Try to express your ideas clearly and avoid irrelevant details. For example, you can say, "Yes, singing can bring happiness because it makes people feel relaxed and peaceful."

示例: Yes, singing can bring happiness because it helps people feel relaxed and peaceful. Many people enjoy singing to improve their mood and reduce stress.

× Yes, I like singing because it feels me less stressed and and it helps to it helps to keep organized.

✓ Yes, I like singing because it makes me feel less stressed and it helps me to stay organized.

The phrase 'feels me less stressed' is incorrect because 'feel' as a verb here needs an object and a complement; the correct form is 'makes me feel less stressed'. Also, 'helps to it helps to keep organized' is redundant and incorrect; it should be 'helps me to stay organized'. The verb 'feel' is not used with 'me' as the subject but as the object with 'make' or 'help'.

× Yes, I learned the singing then I was in a school.

✓ Yes, I learned singing when I was in school.

The phrase 'then I was in a school' is incorrect; the correct expression is 'when I was in school'. Also, 'the singing' is incorrect; 'singing' as a general activity does not need 'the'. The past tense 'learned' is correct here.

× I get involved in a singing competition and I practice regularly.

✓ I got involved in a singing competition and I practiced regularly.

The sentence is describing past events, so the verbs should be in the past tense: 'get' should be 'got' and 'practice' should be 'practiced' to maintain tense consistency.

× At that time I will learn the Cindy.

✓ At that time, I was learning the song 'Cindy'.

The phrase 'I will learn' is incorrect for past context; it should be past continuous 'I was learning'. Also, 'the Cindy' is unclear; assuming 'Cindy' is a song, it should be 'the song Cindy'. The sentence structure is corrected for clarity and tense.

× I want to sing for my family because they always sported for me and the and it feels like it feels like very good impression on them and I feel relax by singing online.

✓ I want to sing for my family because they always supported me, and it feels like I make a very good impression on them, and I feel relaxed when singing online.

'Sported' is a wrong word; the correct word is 'supported'. The phrase 'it feels like it feels like very good impression on them' is repetitive and incorrect; it should be 'it feels like I make a very good impression on them'. 'I feel relax' should be 'I feel relaxed'. Also, 'by singing online' is better expressed as 'when singing online'.

× Yes, singing can bring happiness to people because it it feels relaxed and peaceful when when we sing, some people hang in the Shoran cars to feel relax.

✓ Yes, singing can bring happiness to people because it feels relaxing and peaceful when we sing. Some people hang out in the Shoran cars to feel relaxed.

'Feels relaxed' should be 'feels relaxing' to describe the effect of singing. The phrase 'hang in the Shoran cars' is unclear; assuming 'hang out' is intended. 'Feel relax' should be 'feel relaxed'. Also, the sentence was run-on and is corrected into two sentences for clarity.