唱歌— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Try to make your answer more natural and grammatically correct. Use linking words to connect ideas and avoid redundancy. For example, start with a clear topic sentence, then explain why you like singing with specific reasons, using words like 'because' or 'as'.

示例: Yes, I really enjoy singing because it helps me relax and relieves my stress and anxiety. Whenever I have free time, I make sure to sing as it brings me joy and refreshes my mind.

建议: Your answer needs clearer structure and better grammar. Start with a direct response, then explain how you improved your singing with specific details. Use linking words like 'but' or 'however' to connect ideas logically.

示例: No, I have never formally learned how to sing. However, I developed my singing skills over time by listening to music carefully and trying to imitate the tone and pitch. This practice helped me improve gradually.

建议: Make your answer more concise and clear. Use linking words like 'because' to explain your reasons. Avoid redundancy and grammatical errors to make your response more natural.

示例: I want to sing for my family because they work hard to support my education and living expenses. Singing for them is my way of showing gratitude for their sacrifices and encouragement.

建议: Improve clarity and grammar in your answer. Use linking words such as 'for example' to give specific instances. Also, avoid redundancy and ensure your sentences are complete and coherent.

示例: Definitely, singing can bring happiness to people. For example, in India, people often hire singers or DJs for special occasions like birthday parties and weddings, which helps everyone enjoy and express their feelings through singing and dancing.

× Of course I like singing becauses it provide me and movement in my free time and provide me relaxation from stress and anxiety.

✓ Of course I like singing because it provides me movement in my free time and provides me relaxation from stress and anxiety.

The verb 'provide' should be in the third person singular form 'provides' to agree with the singular subject 'it'. Also, 'becauses' is incorrect; the correct word is 'because'.

× And when I free I don't miss a chance to sing.

✓ And when I am free, I don't miss a chance to sing.

The sentence is missing the verb 'am' to correctly form the present tense 'I am free'. Without it, the sentence is incomplete and grammatically incorrect.

× No, I did not learn how to sing music.

✓ No, I have not learned how to sing music.

Since the question is about experience up to now, the present perfect tense 'have not learned' is more appropriate than simple past 'did not learn'.

× It's dip developed as long as I listening to music and it come my inner voice that I want to sing and with the passage of time I improve in my singing and when I'm listening to music I listen their tone and their frequency and using a soothing voice.

✓ It has developed as long as I have been listening to music and my inner voice comes that I want to sing. With the passage of time, I have improved in my singing, and when I'm listening to music, I listen to their tone and frequency and use a soothing voice.

Several verb forms are incorrect: 'dip developed' should be 'has developed' (present perfect), 'I listening' should be 'I have been listening' (present perfect continuous), 'it come' should be 'it comes' (third person singular present), 'I improve' should be 'I have improved' (present perfect), and 'using' should be 'use' to match the subject and tense. Also, prepositions like 'listen their tone' should be 'listen to their tone'.

× when I'm listening to music I listen their tone and their frequency and using a soothing voice.

✓ When I'm listening to music, I listen to their tone and their frequency and use a soothing voice.

The verb 'listen' requires the preposition 'to' when followed by an object. Also, 'using' should be 'use' to maintain parallel structure with 'listen'.

× I want to flatter some words for their hard work for helping me to achieve my future goals and do not let me to face any financial issue our difficulty.

✓ I want to say some flattering words for their hard work in helping me achieve my future goals and not let me face any financial issues or difficulties.

'Flatter some words' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'say some flattering words'. Also, 'do not let me to face' should be 'not let me face' without 'to'. 'Our difficulty' is incorrect; it should be 'or difficulties'. The sentence also needs better structure for clarity.

× I want to flatter some words for their hard work for helping me to achieve my future goals and do not let me to face any financial issue our difficulty.

✓ I want to say some flattering words for their hard work in helping me achieve my future goals and not let me face any financial issues or difficulties.

The preposition 'for' is incorrectly used; 'in helping me' is correct. Also, 'to face' should be without 'to' after 'let me'. 'Our' is a wrong word here; it should be 'or'.

× Definitely singing can bring happiness in people life as in my country India people usually appoint a singer are some DJ on the special occasion like birthday party and marriage so they get up.

✓ Definitely, singing can bring happiness to people's lives as in my country India, people usually appoint a singer or some DJ on special occasions like birthday parties and marriages so they can enjoy.

The preposition 'in' should be 'to' in 'bring happiness to people's lives'. 'People life' should be plural possessive 'people's lives'. 'Are' is incorrect; it should be 'or'. 'Birthday party and marriage' should be plural 'birthday parties and marriages'. 'So they get up' is unclear and corrected to 'so they can enjoy'.

× Definitely singing can bring happiness in people life as in my country India people usually appoint a singer are some DJ on the special occasion like birthday party and marriage so they get up. Johns to enjoy and express their feelings by singing, by and by dancing.

✓ Definitely, singing can bring happiness to people's lives. In my country India, people usually appoint a singer or some DJ on special occasions like birthday parties and marriages so they can enjoy and express their feelings by singing and dancing.

The original sentence is run-on and unclear. It needs to be split into clearer sentences. 'Are' should be 'or'. 'Get up. Johns' is incorrect and unclear; corrected to 'can enjoy'. 'By and by dancing' is incorrect; corrected to 'and dancing'.