唱歌— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Jawaban Anda kurang jelas dan terdapat pengulangan kata yang tidak perlu. Cobalah untuk membuat kalimat yang lebih terstruktur dan gunakan kosakata yang tepat untuk menjelaskan alasan Anda menyukai bernyanyi dengan lebih spesifik dan alami.

示例: Yes, I really enjoy singing because it helps me relax and express my emotions. I often sing at home, whether I'm in the bathroom or the living room, and it always lifts my mood.

建议: Jawaban Anda kurang jelas dan terdapat kesalahan tata bahasa serta pengulangan. Cobalah untuk menjelaskan dengan kalimat yang lebih sederhana dan terstruktur, serta gunakan kosakata yang sesuai untuk menyatakan bahwa Anda belajar bernyanyi secara alami.

示例: I have never taken formal singing lessons because I believe singing is a natural skill. I usually learn by listening to music, especially rap, and practicing on my own.

建议: Jawaban Anda sudah cukup baik namun masih ada kalimat yang kurang jelas dan pengulangan. Cobalah untuk membuat kalimat yang lebih terstruktur dan jelas, serta gunakan kata penghubung untuk menghubungkan ide Anda.

示例: I want to sing for my parents because they always support me. Singing for them motivates me to practice every day and improve my skills.

建议: Jawaban Anda mengandung pengulangan dan kurang terstruktur. Cobalah untuk menyampaikan pendapat Anda dengan kalimat yang lebih jelas dan gunakan kosakata yang tepat untuk menjelaskan bagaimana bernyanyi dapat membawa kebahagiaan.

示例: Yes, I believe singing brings happiness because it allows people to express their feelings and relax. Through singing, we can enjoy ourselves and share emotions with others.

× every day I I almost seeing

✓ every day I am almost singing

The original sentence uses 'seeing' which is incorrect in this context. The correct verb is 'singing' and the present continuous tense 'I am almost singing' fits the intended meaning of a habitual action happening regularly.

× like in the bathroom or in living or somewhere

✓ like in the bathroom or in the living room or somewhere else

The phrase 'in living' is incomplete and unclear. It should be 'in the living room' to specify the place correctly. Also, 'somewhere' is better as 'somewhere else' to indicate an unspecified location different from the previous ones.

× you know, uhm, with singing we can learn about the orb

✓ you know, uhm, with singing we can learn about the world

The word 'orb' is incorrect here; the intended meaning is likely 'world'. This is a vocabulary error rather than grammar, but correcting it improves clarity.

× I've never learned about singing 'cause I feel like singing is a autodata skills that I had before

✓ I've never learned about singing because I feel like singing is an autodidact skill that I had before

The phrase 'a autodata skills' is grammatically incorrect. 'Autodidact' is the correct adjective meaning self-taught, and 'skill' should be singular to match the article 'an'. Also, 'cause' should be 'because' for formal correctness.

× I feel must I have a good voice to seeing like some music actually into rap music genra

✓ I feel I must have a good voice to sing some music, actually in the rap music genre

The sentence has multiple errors: 'must I have' should be 'I must have'; 'to seeing' should be 'to sing'; 'genra' is a misspelling of 'genre'; and articles are missing or misplaced. Correcting these improves grammatical accuracy and clarity.

× So I think with the music I can learn it naturally, I can learn it naturally

✓ So I think with music I can learn it naturally, I can learn it naturally

The phrase 'with the music' is acceptable but 'with music' is more natural in this context. The rest of the sentence is correct in present tense.

× they're really like seeing to like me

✓ they really like listening to me

The phrase 'like seeing to like me' is incorrect. The intended meaning is likely 'they really like listening to me'. This corrects the pronoun and verb usage for clarity.

× So if I sing in, my parents always support me to do the best

✓ So if I sing, my parents always support me to do my best

The phrase 'sing in' is incorrect; it should be 'sing'. Also, 'do the best' should be 'do my best' to correctly express personal effort.

× And great performance for me

✓ and give great performances for me

The original sentence is a fragment lacking a verb. Adding 'give' and pluralizing 'performances' makes it a complete and correct sentence.

× And then something someday that you feel like you have to sing every day to increase your skill

✓ And then someday you feel like you have to sing every day to improve your skill

The original sentence is awkward and unclear. Reordering and simplifying the sentence improves clarity and grammatical correctness.

× Yeah, I I think seeing can bring happiness to people

✓ Yeah, I think singing can bring happiness to people

The word 'seeing' is incorrect; it should be 'singing'. The present tense 'can bring' is appropriate here.

× we can express our soul, express over thing what we want to do

✓ we can express our soul, express everything we want to do

The phrase 'express over thing' is incorrect. The correct phrase is 'express everything' to convey the intended meaning.

× we can enjoy that things with singing

✓ we can enjoy those things with singing

The phrase 'that things' is incorrect because 'that' is singular and 'things' is plural. The correct quantifier is 'those' for plural nouns.