唱歌— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Your answer is somewhat unclear and contains grammatical errors. Try to make your response more natural and concise by directly answering the question, using correct grammar, and avoiding redundancy. For example, start with a clear topic sentence and then add a supporting detail with a linking word.

示例: Yes, I really enjoy singing because it helps me relax. However, recently I haven't had much time to sing or listen to music due to my busy schedule.

建议: Your answer is confusing and contains many grammatical mistakes. Try to clearly state whether you have learned singing formally or informally, and explain briefly how you learned, using linking words to connect your ideas.

示例: I haven't taken formal singing lessons, but I learned to sing by practicing on my own. I used to listen to many songs and try to sing along, which helped me improve gradually.

建议: Your answer is understandable but could be more fluent and organized. Use linking words to connect your ideas and avoid repetition. Also, try to use more precise vocabulary to express your feelings.

示例: I like to sing for myself because music refreshes me and helps me relax. It also makes me feel emotional and relieves my stress.

建议: Your answer is repetitive and lacks fluency. Try to combine your ideas into coherent sentences using linking words. Also, avoid incomplete sentences and improve your vocabulary to express your opinion clearly.

示例: Yes, I believe singing can bring happiness because it positively affects people's minds. It can change your mood, help you relax, and reduce stress.

× Yes, I used to sing a song a lot and definitely I like singing, but as days goes by other it was so easy for me to sing a song.

✓ Yes, I used to sing a song a lot and definitely I like singing, but as days go by, it is not so easy for me to sing a song anymore.

The phrase 'as days goes by' has a subject-verb agreement error; 'days' is plural, so the verb should be 'go' not 'goes'. Also, the sentence structure is unclear and contains extra words like 'other' and 'it was' which do not fit the present tense context. The corrected sentence uses present tense to describe an ongoing situation and removes unnecessary words for clarity.

× Basically, I haven't learned how to sing a song.

✓ Basically, I haven't learned how to sing.

The phrase 'how to sing a song' is redundant because 'sing' already implies performing a song. Also, 'haven't learned' is correct present perfect tense to indicate an experience up to now, so no tense change is needed. The correction removes redundancy for clarity.

× But are used only send a lot of song and I start singing by myself.

✓ But I used to only listen to a lot of songs and I started singing by myself.

The original sentence has incorrect word usage and structure: 'are used only send' is incorrect and confusing. The intended meaning seems to be that the student used to listen to many songs and then started singing independently. The correction uses proper past tense verbs 'used to' and 'started' and corrects 'send' to 'listen to' to convey the intended meaning clearly.

× Singing song, but it wasn't professional at all.

✓ I sang songs, but it wasn't professional at all.

The original sentence fragment 'Singing song' lacks a subject and verb, making it incomplete. The correction adds the subject 'I' and the past tense verb 'sang' to form a complete sentence. Also, 'songs' is plural to match the context.

× It was my my will.

✓ It was my own will.

The phrase 'my my will' is a repetition and unclear. The correction replaces it with 'my own will' to express personal intention clearly and correctly.

× I want to sing a song for myself because I love the music for my refreshment and it relaxes me and it makes me emotional.

✓ I want to sing a song for myself because I love music for my refreshment; it relaxes me and makes me emotional.

The phrase 'love the music' is corrected to 'love music' because 'music' in general does not need the definite article here. Also, the sentence is improved by replacing 'and it makes me emotional' with a smoother conjunction and punctuation for clarity.

× And I feel stress free so all I can say that. I sing a song.

✓ I feel stress-free, so all I can say is that I sing songs.

The original sentences are fragmented and lack proper connectors. The correction combines the ideas into a coherent sentence with correct punctuation and verb agreement. 'Stress free' is hyphenated as an adjective, and 'sing a song' is pluralized to 'sing songs' for natural expression.

× Singing has got it. Lot of impact on people's mind.

✓ Singing has a lot of impact on people's minds.

The phrase 'has got it' is unnecessary and incorrect here. 'Lot' should be preceded by 'a' to form 'a lot'. Also, 'mind' should be plural 'minds' to refer to multiple people. The correction fixes these issues for grammatical accuracy.

× Because it can change your mood. And it relaxes you and it makes. It makes you emotion, emotional and stress free.

✓ It can change your mood, relax you, and make you emotional and stress-free.

The original sentences are fragmented and repetitive. The correction combines them into a single, fluent sentence with parallel verb forms. 'Emotion' is corrected to 'emotional', and 'stress free' is hyphenated as 'stress-free'.