唱歌— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Your answer is good but can be improved by correcting grammar and making sentences more natural and concise. Avoid redundancy and use linking words to connect ideas smoothly. For example, instead of 'I often perform during the morning assembly and also looking singing class', say 'I often performed during the morning assembly and took singing classes to improve my skills.'

示例: Yes, I love singing. When I was in school, I often performed during the morning assembly and took singing classes to improve my skills. However, nowadays I don't get much time to sing because of my hectic schedule.

建议: Your answer needs clearer structure and better grammar. Start with a direct response, then add specific details using linking words. Avoid filler words like 'uh'. For example, say 'Yes, I have learned some singing in school because music classes are compulsory. My music teacher taught me how to sing songs properly.'

示例: Yes, I have learned some singing in school because music classes are compulsory. My music teacher taught me how to sing songs properly.

建议: Your answer should be clearer and more natural. Use correct vocabulary and grammar. Start with a direct answer and then explain with specific reasons using linking words. For example, 'I want to sing for my loved ones because family means everything to me. Singing brings us closer and makes us feel comfortable around each other.'

示例: I want to sing for my loved ones because family means everything to me. Singing brings us closer and makes us feel comfortable around each other.

建议: Your answer needs better grammar and clearer expression. Start with a direct response, then explain with specific reasons using linking words. Avoid repetition and incorrect words. For example, 'Yes, singing brings happiness to people because it is relaxing and comforting. Whenever I sing, I feel more positive and at ease.'

示例: Yes, singing brings happiness to people because it is relaxing and comforting. Whenever I sing, I feel more positive and at ease.

× When I was in my school, I was quite interested in singing and I often perform during the morning assembly and also looking singing class to improve my skills.

✓ When I was in my school, I was quite interested in singing and I often performed during the morning assembly and also took singing classes to improve my skills.

The sentence mixes past and present tense incorrectly. 'Perform' should be in past tense 'performed' to match 'was'. 'Looking singing class' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'took singing classes' to indicate past action.

× and also looking singing class to improve my skills.

✓ and also took singing classes to improve my skills.

The phrase 'looking singing class' is incorrect. The correct preposition and verb usage is 'took singing classes' to express attending classes in the past.

× However, nowadays I'm not getting a much time to sing because of my hectic schedules.

✓ However, nowadays I don't get much time to sing because of my hectic schedule.

The phrase 'I'm not getting a much time' is incorrect. The correct present tense form is 'I don't get much time'. Also, 'schedules' should be singular 'schedule' to match the context.

× Yes, I have a learn little bit about the music.

✓ Yes, I have learned a little bit about music.

The phrase 'have a learn' is incorrect. The correct present perfect form is 'have learned'. Also, 'the music' should be 'music' as a general subject.

× Uh, in my school be 'cause we have a music class is a in class, it is standard.

✓ Uh, in my school, because we have a music class in the standard class.

The sentence has incorrect prepositions and structure. 'Be 'cause' should be 'because'. 'Is a in class' is incorrect; it should be 'in the standard class' to indicate the class level.

× And I have learned a little bit about the song, how to sing a song with my music teacher.

✓ And I have learned a little bit about songs, how to sing a song with my music teacher.

'The song' should be plural 'songs' to generalize the learning. The rest is correct in present perfect tense.

× Who do you want to sing for?

✓ Whom do you want to sing for?

The correct object pronoun after 'for' is 'whom' instead of 'who'.

× I want to see for my love 'cause I love my family and a family is everything for me.

✓ I want to sing for my loved ones because I love my family and family is everything to me.

'See for my love' is incorrect; it should be 'sing for my loved ones'. Also, 'a family is everything' should be 'family is everything' without 'a'.

× I will love to sing a song for my family and friends because the singing makes us more comfortable around us towards our love person.

✓ I would love to sing a song for my family and friends because singing makes us more comfortable around our loved ones.

'The singing' is incorrect; 'singing' without 'the' is correct. 'Towards our love person' is incorrect; 'our loved ones' is the proper phrase.

× Yes, he bring happiness to people.

✓ Yes, it brings happiness to people.

The subject 'he' is incorrect here; 'it' refers to singing. Also, 'bring' should be 'brings' to agree with third person singular subject.

× I guess because singing a song is more than qualified comfort table and relaxable things for many many of us and especially for me.

✓ I guess because singing a song is more than just comfortable and relaxing for many of us, especially for me.

'Comfort table' and 'relaxable' are incorrect forms. The correct adjectives are 'comfortable' and 'relaxing'. 'More than qualified' is unclear and replaced with 'more than just'.

× And whenever I sing a song I I find myself more positive and quite comfort table.

✓ And whenever I sing a song, I find myself more positive and quite comfortable.

'Comfort table' is incorrect; the correct adjective is 'comfortable'. Also, a comma is needed after 'song' for clarity.