唱歌— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Try to make your answer more fluent and coherent by avoiding unnecessary pauses and sentence fragments. Also, aim to connect your ideas smoothly and use more precise vocabulary to express your thoughts clearly.

示例: Yes, I absolutely enjoy singing as it is an important part of my daily routine. Singing really helps me relax after a hectic day at school, even though I find it quite challenging. Nevertheless, it remains a great hobby that I truly appreciate.

建议: Focus on delivering your answer in complete sentences and avoid unclear phrases. Clarify your points with logical linking and correct vocabulary to improve clarity and coherence.

示例: No, I have never formally learned how to sing, but I did attend a few music lessons when I was a child. I have always wanted to learn how to use my vocal cords properly because I believe that would improve my singing. At the moment, my voice sounds quite raspy, possibly due to lack of training.

建议: Try to avoid repetition and incomplete sentences. Use linking words to connect your ideas and provide more specific reasons to support your answer.

示例: I have never really thought about who I would like to sing for, but if I had to choose, it would definitely be Billie Eilish. She has been my childhood idol, and I grew up listening to her music. I believe she has one of the most angelic voices in the music industry.

建议: Your answer is quite good but could be improved by using more varied vocabulary and linking phrases to enhance coherence and express your ideas more naturally.

示例: I definitely believe that singing and music, in general, bring happiness to people because that is how I personally feel. Whenever I have a hectic day, I come home and play the piano or guitar, singing either to myself or to my pets, which helps me feel extremely relieved and joyful.

× I think it is a part. Of my routine.

✓ I think it is a part of my routine.

The sentence is incorrectly split into two fragments. Combining them into one complete sentence improves clarity and grammatical correctness.

× We're singing really helps me relax myself from a hectic.

✓ Singing really helps me relax after a hectic day.

The phrase 'We're singing' is incorrect here; 'Singing' as a gerund should be the subject. Also, 'relax myself from' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'relax after'. The sentence is also incomplete and needs to be finished properly.

× Day at school.

✓ day at school.

This is a sentence fragment and should be connected to the previous sentence to form a complete thought.

× And I find singing really hard but.

✓ And I find singing really hard, but it is a great hobby of mine.

The sentence ends abruptly and is incomplete. Adding the continuation clarifies the contrast intended by 'but'.

× Have you ever learnt how to sing?

✓ Have you ever learned how to sing?

'Learnt' is acceptable in British English, but 'learned' is more common in American English. Since the rest of the text uses American spelling, 'learned' is preferred for consistency.

× I've always wanted to learn. About how to use my vocal cords appropriately because apparently app in training my voice and that's why my voice is sounding extremely raspy right now.

✓ I've always wanted to learn how to use my vocal cords appropriately because apparently, I am training my voice and that's why my voice sounds extremely raspy right now.

The sentence is fragmented and contains errors: 'learn. About' should be 'learn how to'; 'apparently app in training' is incorrect and should be 'apparently, I am training'; 'is sounding' is better as 'sounds' for present simple tense here.

× Who do you want to sing for?

✓ Who do you want to sing for?

This sentence is correct and requires no correction.

× I've actually never thought about that question, but if you ask me who I want to sing for it but.

✓ I've actually never thought about that question, but if you ask me who I want to sing for, it would definitely be Billie Eilish.

The sentence is incomplete and contains redundant words like 'but' at the end. Completing the sentence clarifies the meaning.

× she has been my childhood. Idle an I basically grew up listening to her music and I believe that she has one of the most angelic voice in the musical. Hip in the musical industry.

✓ She has been my childhood idol, and I basically grew up listening to her music. I believe that she has one of the most angelic voices in the music industry.

'Idle' should be 'idol'; 'angelic voice' should be plural 'voices' to match 'one of the most'; 'musical. Hip in the musical' is incorrect and should be 'music industry'. Also, sentence fragments are corrected.

× Do you think singing can bring happiness to people?

✓ Do you think singing can bring happiness to people?

This sentence is correct and requires no correction.

× I definitely do think that singing and music in general brings joy to people because that is what I personally feel.

✓ I definitely think that singing and music in general bring joy to people because that is what I personally feel.

The subject 'singing and music' is plural, so the verb should be 'bring' not 'brings' to agree in number.

× Whenever I have a hectic day, I would just come home and play the piano or play the guitar, singing to myself or to my pets, and I feel extremely relieved and happy about it.

✓ Whenever I have a hectic day, I just come home and play the piano or guitar, sing to myself or my pets, and I feel extremely relieved and happy about it.

Using 'would' here is incorrect for habitual actions; 'just come' is better. Also, 'singing to myself' should be parallel with 'play the piano or guitar', so 'sing' is better. 'Play the guitar' can be shortened to 'play guitar' for naturalness.