唱歌— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Perbaiki struktur kalimat agar lebih jelas dan alami. Hindari pengulangan kata dan gunakan kalimat yang lengkap. Misalnya, jelaskan alasan tidak suka bernyanyi dengan kalimat yang runtut dan gunakan kata penghubung untuk menghindari jawaban yang terputus-putus.

示例: I don't like singing because my voice is not very good. However, I sometimes sing in my spare time to reduce boredom.

建议: Gunakan kalimat yang lebih terstruktur dan hindari kesalahan tata bahasa. Jelaskan dengan jelas bahwa Anda belum pernah belajar bernyanyi secara formal dan berikan alasan singkat.

示例: No, I have never taken private singing lessons. I only sing for my own happiness and not in a serious way.

建议: Perbaiki penggunaan kata dan struktur kalimat agar lebih alami dan jelas. Gunakan kata penghubung untuk menghubungkan ide dan jelaskan alasan mengapa Anda ingin bernyanyi untuk orang-orang tersebut.

示例: I want to sing for the people I love, such as my friends, family, and maybe my future partner. I believe singing is a great way to express my feelings to them.

建议: Perjelas jawaban dengan kalimat yang lengkap dan gunakan kata penghubung untuk membuat jawaban lebih koheren. Jelaskan bagaimana lagu dan lirik dapat mempengaruhi kebahagiaan seseorang.

示例: Yes, I think singing can bring happiness to people because beautiful words and melodies can touch their hearts. It also depends on the song you choose.

× I don't like singing, but.

✓ I don't like singing.

The sentence ends abruptly with 'but' which is a conjunction and requires a following clause. To correct, remove 'but' to complete the sentence properly.

× My voice is not is not that good, so I just like singing as my.

✓ My voice is not that good, so I just like singing as one of my hobbies.

The phrase 'is not is not' is a repetition error. Also, the sentence ends abruptly with 'as my' which is incomplete. Adding 'one of my hobbies' completes the thought.

× Things that I do in my spare time too.

✓ It is something that I do in my spare time too.

This is a sentence fragment lacking a subject and verb. Adding 'It is something' makes it a complete sentence.

× Reduce my.

✓ It helps reduce my boredom.

The phrase 'Reduce my.' is incomplete and unclear. Completing the sentence clarifies the meaning.

× No, I never took a private lessons to singings are anything related to sing so.

✓ No, I have never taken private lessons for singing or anything related to singing.

The past tense 'took' is less appropriate here; present perfect 'have never taken' fits better for experience. Also, 'singings are anything related to sing' is incorrect and corrected to 'singing or anything related to singing'.

× I just sing a.

✓ I just sing.

The phrase 'I just sing a.' is incomplete and ends abruptly. Removing 'a' completes the sentence.

× For my happiness only, not in a serious way.

✓ I sing for my happiness only, not in a serious way.

This is a sentence fragment missing a subject and verb. Adding 'I sing' completes the sentence.

× I want to sing. 4. The people that I love, my friends, my family, or maybe my future partner.

✓ I want to sing for the people that I love: my friends, my family, or maybe my future partner.

The sentence is broken into fragments and '4' is a typo for 'for'. Combining into one sentence and correcting '4' to 'for' improves clarity.

× I think it is the best way to sing is to give the effectiveness to the people that you love.

✓ I think the best way to sing is to give happiness to the people that you love.

The original sentence is awkward and unclear. Rephrasing improves clarity and meaning.

× Yes, uh, I think singing come bring happiness to people as.

✓ Yes, uh, I think singing can bring happiness to people.

The verb 'come' is incorrect here; 'can' is the correct modal verb. Also, 'bring' is correct after 'can'.

× We heard the words that really beautiful's and the.

✓ We hear words that are really beautiful, and the

The sentence is incomplete and contains incorrect possessive 'beautiful's'. Correcting to 'words that are really beautiful' and completing the sentence is necessary.

× And uh. Voice. Uhm.

✓ and the voice.

Fragmented words need to be combined into a proper phrase.

× I think it's depends of the song that you choose.

✓ I think it depends on the song that you choose.

Incorrect preposition 'of' should be 'on', and 'it's depends' should be 'it depends'.