唱歌— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Your answer needs to be clearer and more natural. Avoid redundancy and grammatical errors. Start with a clear topic sentence directly answering the question, then add specific reasons with linking words. For example, explain why you love singing and how it affects you.

示例: Yes, I like singing because it allows me to express my emotions freely. Moreover, I enjoy creating new songs, which makes me feel peaceful and happy.

建议: Your answer is unclear and contains many grammatical mistakes. Please respond directly and use linking words to explain your experience with singing. Keep your sentences simple and coherent.

示例: No, I have never formally learned how to sing. However, I enjoy practicing by listening to music and trying to improve my voice gradually because I am passionate about singing.

建议: Your answer should be more structured and grammatically correct. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add specific details using linking words. Avoid repetition and incomplete sentences.

示例: I want to sing for my family because they always appreciate and encourage me. For instance, I would love to dedicate songs to my parents, siblings, and close friends.

建议: Your answer is relevant but needs better grammar and clearer linking words. Use correct verb forms and connect your ideas logically. Provide specific examples to support your opinion.

示例: Yes, I believe singing can bring happiness to people because listening to songs often improves their mood. Moreover, different people enjoy different types of music, such as hip hop or emotional songs, which makes singing enjoyable for everyone.

× Yes, I love singing becauses thinking is my passion.

✓ Yes, I love singing because singing is my passion.

The word 'becauses' is incorrect; the correct conjunction is 'because'. Also, 'thinking' seems to be a typo or incorrect word here; it should be 'singing' to make sense in context.

× I love to make new songs an by true singing I expressed my feelings an eye.

✓ I love to make new songs and by true singing I express my feelings and emotions.

The conjunction 'an' should be 'and'. Also, 'expressed' should be present tense 'express' to match the present context. 'An eye' is incorrect; likely intended 'and emotions' or similar.

× Do listen more songs and I I also write songs and singing makes me peaceful.

✓ I listen to more songs, and I also write songs. Singing makes me peaceful.

The sentence is fragmented and has repetition ('I I'). It needs to be split into clearer sentences with proper subject-verb agreement and prepositions.

× No, I never learned how to sing, actually I just tried to sing, knew music, new songs becauses I am a passionate person and I have eagerness to learn.

✓ No, I have never learned how to sing. Actually, I just try to sing and learn new music and songs because I am a passionate person and eager to learn.

The past tense 'learned' is acceptable but 'knew music' is incorrect; 'knew' is past tense of 'know' but here 'learn' or 'know' in present perfect or present tense is better. Also, 'becauses' should be 'because'. The sentence is long and needs punctuation.

× Knew things better like that only I love to sing slowly and slowly.

✓ I learn things better like that, and I love to sing slowly and steadily.

The sentence is unclear and uses 'knew' incorrectly. 'Knew' is past tense; 'learn' or 'know' is better. Also, 'and' is needed to connect ideas properly.

× By this my voice also got.

✓ By this, my voice has also improved.

The sentence is incomplete and unclear. 'Got' is vague; 'improved' is more appropriate. Also, the sentence needs a subject and verb to be complete.

× I want to sing more for my family because I think they are the only person who appreciate you, who encourage you and I will love if I will dedicate any song to my parents, my friends or my.

✓ I want to sing more for my family because I think they are the only people who appreciate and encourage you, and I would love to dedicate a song to my parents, my friends, or my...

'Person' should be plural 'people' to agree with 'they'. 'Appreciate' and 'encourage' need to agree with plural subject. 'Will love if I will dedicate' is awkward; 'would love to dedicate' is better.

× Sisters, my brother David appreciate me.

✓ My sisters and my brother David appreciate me.

The sentence is fragmented and missing conjunctions. 'Sisters' should be connected with 'my brother David' using 'and'.

× Yes I do think singing bring happiness to people because when people listened song they feel good.

✓ Yes, I do think singing brings happiness to people because when people listen to songs, they feel good.

'Bring' should be 'brings' to agree with singular subject 'singing'. 'Listened' is past tense; 'listen' present tense fits better. 'Song' should be plural 'songs' and needs preposition 'to'.

× Moreover it depends on the person's choice that what type of song to the listen.

✓ Moreover, it depends on the person's choice about what type of song to listen to.

The preposition 'to' is misplaced. Correct phrase is 'listen to'. Also, 'that what type' is awkward; 'about what type' is better.

× Some like hip hop song some like emotional songs so it very a person to person.

✓ Some like hip hop songs, some like emotional songs, so it varies from person to person.

The sentence lacks punctuation and has incorrect word order. 'Song' should be plural 'songs'. 'It very a person to person' is incorrect; correct phrase is 'it varies from person to person'.