唱歌— Part 1 评分报告

建议: 답변이 명확하지 않고 문법적 오류가 많아 의사 전달이 어렵습니다. 간결하고 자연스러운 문장으로 자신의 생각을 명확히 표현하는 연습이 필요합니다.

示例: No, I don't really like singing because I have never learned how to sing properly, so I don't feel confident about it.

建议: 의미 전달이 불명확하고 문장 구조가 어색합니다. 문장을 간결하게 구성하고, 연결어를 사용하여 논리적으로 답변을 확장하는 연습이 필요합니다.

示例: I haven't learned singing formally, but if I had the chance, I would love to attend a music academy to learn from professional trainers.

建议: 문장 표현이 부자연스럽고 일부 단어 선택이 적절하지 않습니다. 주제 문장과 이유를 명확히 하고, 자연스러운 연결어를 사용해 보세요.

示例: Actually, I don't sing for others; I prefer to sing for myself because it helps me reduce stress and feel more relaxed.

建议: 답변이 다소 중복되고 문법 오류가 있습니다. 구체적인 이유와 예시를 들어 명확하고 자연스럽게 표현하는 연습이 필요합니다.

示例: Yes, I believe singing can bring happiness because beautiful rhythms and melodies can touch our emotions, helping us reduce stress and feel happier.

× I'm not over singer an honestly I've never learned how to sing beeper.

✓ I'm not an avid singer and honestly I've never learned how to sing properly.

The original sentence misuses 'singer' as a verb and 'beeper' instead of 'properly'. The phrase 'over singer' is incorrect; it should be 'an avid singer' to express enthusiasm. 'Beeper' is a typo or incorrect word; 'properly' is the correct adverb here.

× Have you ever learnt how to sing?

✓ Have you ever learned how to sing?

'Learnt' is a British English past tense and past participle form of 'learn', while 'learned' is the American English form. Both are correct, but consistency is important. Since the rest of the text uses American English spelling (e.g., 'honestly'), 'learned' is preferred.

× Well I'ma let it heard about it but if I have a chance I'd love to go to an academic where I can learn from expert to workbook or trainers.

✓ Well, I've heard about it, and if I have a chance, I'd love to go to an academy where I can learn from experts or trainers.

The original sentence has multiple errors: 'I'ma let it heard' is incorrect; it should be 'I've heard'. 'An academic' is incorrect; 'an academy' is the correct noun for an educational institution. 'Expert to workbook or trainers' is unclear; it should be 'experts or trainers'. The sentence also lacks proper conjunctions and punctuation.

× Well, actually I'm not pretty much teacher, but I guess.

✓ Well, actually I'm not much of a teacher, but I guess.

The phrase 'not pretty much teacher' is incorrect. The correct expression is 'not much of a teacher' to indicate limited teaching ability or experience. 'Pretty much' is an adverbial phrase meaning 'almost' and does not fit here.

× I really want to sing for myself, not for others.

✓ I really want to sing for myself, not for others.

This sentence is grammatically correct and requires no correction.

× This is simply because you know it has me to reduce my stress and feel more relaxed.

✓ This is simply because, you know, it helps me reduce my stress and feel more relaxed.

The phrase 'it has me to reduce' is incorrect. The correct expression is 'it helps me reduce' to indicate assistance. Also, commas are added for clarity around 'you know'.

× when I listen to the music especially beautiful rhythms, melodies and ladies can really touch our emotions.

✓ When I listen to music, especially beautiful rhythms, melodies, and lyrics, they can really touch our emotions.

'The music' should be 'music' without 'the' for general reference. 'Ladies' is incorrect in this context; the intended word is likely 'lyrics'. Also, the sentence lacked a subject for the second clause; 'they' refers to rhythms, melodies, and lyrics.

× That's why all listening or singing it have us to reduce stress and makes it people feel more happier.

✓ That's why listening to or singing music helps us reduce stress and makes people feel happier.

The phrase 'all listening or singing it have us to reduce stress' is incorrect. Correct form is 'listening to or singing music helps us reduce stress'. 'Makes it people feel more happier' is incorrect; it should be 'makes people feel happier'. 'More happier' is redundant; 'happier' alone suffices.