唱歌— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Your answer is generally clear but contains some grammatical errors and redundancy. Try to combine sentences to make your response more natural and concise. Also, avoid repeating words like 'seeing' instead of 'singing'. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

示例: Yes, I enjoy singing because it helps me express myself and relax during my free time. However, I usually avoid singing in front of unfamiliar people since I'm not very confident about my skills.

建议: Your answer lacks clarity and contains many hesitations and grammatical mistakes. Try to structure your response with a clear topic sentence and supporting details, using correct grammar and avoiding filler words. Use linking words to improve coherence.

示例: No, I haven't taken any formal singing lessons. Instead, I usually learn by imitating my favourite singers and practising their songs. Therefore, I wouldn't consider myself a professional singer.

建议: Your answer is relevant but could be more concise and better organised. Avoid repeating words and use linking phrases to connect your ideas. Also, be more specific about your feelings and intentions when singing for others.

示例: Personally, I see singing as a way to relax and express my emotions. While I don't usually sing for others, I would like to dedicate songs to my parents to show my gratitude and to my friends to express my affection.

建议: Your answer has good ideas but is affected by pronunciation and grammar errors, which reduce clarity. Try to use precise vocabulary and avoid filler phrases. Use linking words to organise your answer logically and provide specific examples.

示例: Absolutely. Singing can have a magical effect by making people feel happy. For example, at birthday parties, people often sing birthday songs to their friends and family, which creates a festive atmosphere and brings joy to everyone.

× Well, I actually like singing. Because I think it is a good way to express myself and relax when I am doing my leisure time.

✓ Well, I actually like singing because I think it is a good way to express myself and relax during my leisure time.

The original sentence is a sentence fragment because 'Because I think...' cannot stand alone. Combining the two parts into one sentence corrects the structure and improves flow.

× However, even though I like seeing, I don't see too much.

✓ However, even though I like singing, I don't sing too much.

The word 'seeing' is incorrect here; the intended verb is 'singing'. Also, 'see' should be 'sing' to match the context of the question about singing.

× When I am with some people that I'm not familiar with because I am always not so confident about my singing skills.

✓ When I am with some people that I'm not familiar with, I am not very confident about my singing skills.

The original sentence is a fragment and lacks a main clause. Rephrasing it into a complete sentence clarifies the meaning.

× I haven't indeed learned or say taken some specialized courses for singing.

✓ I haven't indeed learned or taken any specialized courses for singing.

The phrase 'or say taken' is awkward and incorrect. Removing 'say' and using 'taken' correctly as past participle after 'have' improves grammar.

× Basically, I just, you know, imitate, imitated.

✓ Basically, I just, you know, imitate.

The sentence mixes present and past tense unnecessarily. Since the context is habitual action, present tense 'imitate' is appropriate.

× What's the singers, you know, send this on how they sent it.

✓ What the singers do, you know, is sing songs the way they sing them.

The original sentence is unclear and contains incorrect pronouns and verbs. Rephrasing clarifies the intended meaning.

× So that's usually my way of learning singing. So I'm not a professional singer, absolute.

✓ So that's usually my way of learning to sing. So I'm not a professional singer, absolutely.

'Learning singing' is incorrect; 'learning to sing' is correct. Also, 'absolute' should be 'absolutely' as an adverb modifying the sentence.

× Well. Personally, I would say singing would be a way for me to relax and express my personal emotion, emotion.

✓ Well, personally, I would say singing is a way for me to relax and express my personal emotions.

The sentence has a repeated word 'emotion' and awkward punctuation. Correcting punctuation and removing repetition improves clarity.

× So I wouldn't say I want to sing for anyone else, but generally I would like to express my gratitude to my parents and my love for my friends.

✓ So I wouldn't say I want to sing for anyone else, but generally, I would like to express my gratitude to my parents and my love for my friends.

Adding a comma after 'generally' improves sentence flow and clarity.

× Absolutely, yes. I think seeing can have this magical effect on helping people become happens, become happy.

✓ Absolutely, yes. I think singing can have this magical effect of helping people become happy.

'Seeing' should be 'singing'. 'Become happens' is incorrect; 'become happy' is correct. Also, 'effect on helping' should be 'effect of helping'.

× For instance, during the birthday parties, people usually seem birthday stones to their friends, to their family members to create a sense of ceremony, which is, you know, a great way to make the atmosphere feeling more pleasant.

✓ For instance, during birthday parties, people usually sing birthday songs to their friends and family members to create a sense of ceremony, which is, you know, a great way to make the atmosphere feel more pleasant.

'Seem birthday stones' is incorrect; it should be 'sing birthday songs'. Also, 'the birthday parties' should be 'birthday parties' without 'the'. 'Make the atmosphere feeling' should be 'make the atmosphere feel'.