花— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Make the answer grammatically correct, more natural and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one specific reason with a brief example. Use correct verb agreement and smoother phrasing.

示例: Yes, I love flowers. They remind me of happy memories from my childhood because my grandmother always grew roses in her garden, and their scent takes me back to those afternoons.

建议: Use correct articles and verb forms, and organize the answer: topic sentence + specific supporting detail. Avoid repetition and add a short example of frequency or situation.

示例: Yes, I do. A friend of mine buys flowers almost every month because he enjoys their scent and the positive emotions they bring; for example, he often buys a bouquet for his living room to brighten the space.

建议: Give a clear, concise statement then one or two specific supporting details. Correct grammar (countable forms, word order) and avoid repeating the same idea. Mention where flowers are available and how people buy them.

示例: Not many. Flowers are only available in a few places, such as parks and a few florists. If you want to buy flowers you usually have to visit a florist shop, which are scattered across different districts.

建议: Make the reason precise and grammatically correct. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one specific detail about why (e.g., colors, calm effect) and an example of when you take photos.

示例: Yes, I do. Taking photos of flowers helps me relax and reduce stress because their colours and shapes are calming; for example, I often photograph blossoms during my morning walk.

建议: Answer directly, then give a specific context and an example. Use correct linking words (e.g., especially for, such as) and make the anecdote concise and relevant.

示例: Yes, people often send flowers, especially for occasions like funerals or celebrations. For instance, two weeks ago a friend sent many flowers to my mother while she was in hospital to show support.

× Yes I do because flowers has that emotion and triggering old experience or or old days.

✓ Yes, I do, because flowers have that emotional quality and trigger old memories or remind me of past days.

Subject-verb agreement: 'flowers' is plural so use 'have' not 'has' (Grammar Problem Type ID 27). Incorrect verb forms: 'triggering' should be 'trigger' to match present simple and parallel structure (Grammar Problem Type ID 6 and 8). 'that emotion' is unclear; 'that emotional quality' is more natural. Use 'memories' instead of 'experience' to match the plural sense and 'remind me of past days' for clarity.

× Yes I do. I know one of my friend who likes to buy so many flowers and I think he usually buy flowers every single month and the reason for that is that he likes the the smell, the emotion that trigger him.

✓ Yes, I do. I know one of my friends who likes to buy many flowers, and I think he usually buys flowers every month because he likes the smell and the emotions they trigger in him.

Count noun and possessive: 'one of my friend' should be 'one of my friends' (Grammar Problem Type ID 1). Subject-verb agreement: with singular subject 'he' use 'buys' not 'buy' (ID 27/2). 'so many' is conversational but 'many' is smoother here. 'the the' duplicated article removed. 'the emotion that trigger him' needs plural agreement and clearer phrasing: 'the emotions they trigger in him' (pronoun and agreement fixes, ID 12 and 27).

× No, there aren't. You can find only in few places. You can find some flowers, but if you want to buy some flowers then you need to go to a shop flower. A shop flower can be found in many districts. You can buy from there.

✓ No, there aren't many. You can find them only in a few places. You can see some flowers, but if you want to buy flowers you need to go to a flower shop. Flower shops can be found in many districts, and you can buy from there.

There be: 'No, there aren't' is unclear; 'No, there aren't many' clarifies the meaning (ID 3). Preposition and determiners: 'You can find only in few places' needs 'them' and 'a few places' (ID 11 and 22). Word order and noun phrase: 'shop flower' is incorrect; correct form is 'flower shop' (ID 26/18). Use plural agreement: 'Flower shops can be found' for general statement. Add conjunctions for fluency.

× Yes, I do because it makes me relieve and reduce the stress. And as you know, Flowers has that combination of mixed colors, especially the white, the red and blue.

✓ Yes, I do because it helps me relax and reduces my stress. And as you know, flowers have a combination of mixed colors, especially white, red and blue.

Verb choice and form: 'makes me relieve' is incorrect; use 'helps me relax' or 'relieves my stress' (ID 8/6). Subject-verb agreement: 'Flowers has' should be 'flowers have' (ID 27). Article and adjective use: 'the white, the red and blue' should be 'white, red and blue' without 'the' before each color (ID 17/18).

× Yes they do, especially if there are some occasions whether it is sad or sometimes a happy one. Like for example two weeks ago one of my friends brought so many flowers to my mom because she was in hospital.

✓ Yes, they do, especially on certain occasions, whether sad or happy. For example, two weeks ago one of my friends brought many flowers to my mom because she was in the hospital.

Preposition and collocation: 'on certain occasions' is the correct phrase, not 'if there are some occasions' (ID 11/16). Unnecessary modal: 'whether it is sad or sometimes a happy one' is wordy; use 'whether sad or happy' (ID 16). Quantifier: 'so many flowers' is conversational; 'many flowers' is more natural (ID 14). Article: 'in hospital' in some dialects is fine but 'in the hospital' is standard in many varieties of English (ID 17). Tense and word choice maintained (past tense 'brought' is correct).