Part 1
Giám khảo
Do you like shopping?
Thí sinh
Yeah, I like shopping. I today I bought AT Shirt because it is very cheaper. It's on the sale. I bought AT Shirt. Hmm.
Giám khảo
Do you compare prices when you shop? Why?
Thí sinh
Yeah, I compared prices a lot because I am not, I mean, I don't like to spend too much money. When I want something, some products, I I wait a little and like one week ago, I go again and watch the price.
Giám khảo
Is it difficult for you to make choices when you shop?
Thí sinh
Yeah, I always, uh, struggle with myself whether I buy this cloth or not uh, because, uh, maybe, uh, it might be more cheaper in the future, but uh, so I, I travel a lot, a lot.
Giám khảo
Do you think expensive products are always better than cheaper ones?
Thí sinh
I don't think so for, for example, uh, brand, like for example, uh, Chanel or Louis Vuitton or something. It has a too expensive, but it for, uh, uniqueness is enough in clothes.
Do you like shopping?
Điểm: 52.0Gợi ý: 回答は直接的だが、文法と語順の誤り、冗長さ、語彙の選択ミスが目立ちます。具体的には「I today I bought AT Shirt because it is very cheaper」や不要な繰り返し(I bought AT Shirt)を修正する必要があります。改良点としては:1) 主題文を明確にして不要な繰り返しを避ける、2) 正しい比較級(cheaperではなくvery cheapやmuch cheaperの使い分け)や冠詞の使用(a/an/the)を確認する、3) つなぎ言葉を適度に使って理由や状況を簡潔に述べる、4) 1〜3文でまとめる練習をすることを勧めます。例文の模範を声に出して3回繰り返し、自然な語順と発音を身につけてください。
Ví dụ: Yes, I do. In fact, I bought a shirt today because it was on sale and much cheaper than usual. I like finding good bargains when I shop.
Do you compare prices when you shop? Why?
Điểm: 60.0Gợi ý: 主旨は伝わるが時制の一貫性、冗長表現、流暢さに改善の余地があります。具体的には「I compared prices a lot」は現在習慣なら現在形(I compare)を使う、繰り返し(I I)や曖昧な語(some products)を避け、理由を論理的に結びつける接続語(so, therefore, then)を使うと良いです。改善方法:1) 現在の習慣は現在形で話す練習、2) 具体的な例や頻度(e.g. usually, often)を入れて詳細化、3) 一文目で主張、二文目で理由と具体例、合計2–3文にまとめる練習。
Ví dụ: Yes, I usually compare prices because I don't like to spend too much. For example, if I want something expensive, I often wait a week or check other stores online to find a better deal.
Is it difficult for you to make choices when you shop?
Điểm: 48.0Gợi ý: 回答は正直で話の核はあるが、言い淀み(uh)が多く流暢さを損ね、語彙(clothは不可算扱い、clothesやan itemなどが適切)や文法(more cheaperは誤り)が混ざっています。また最後の“I travel a lot, a lot”は文脈に合わず不要です。改善点:1) つなぎ言葉を減らして短く明確に答える、2) 適切な語彙(clothes, an item, it might become cheaper)を使う、3) 理由を一貫して述べる(例:I wait for sales because prices may drop)練習。
Ví dụ: Yes, I often find it hard to decide. I worry that an item might become cheaper later, so I usually wait for a sale before buying.
Do you think expensive products are always better than cheaper ones?
Điểm: 55.0Gợi ý: 意見は明確だが表現が不自然で言い淀みが多く、文法と語順に問題があります。例えば「It has a too expensive, but it for, uh, uniqueness is enough in clothes」は意味が取りにくいです。改善方法:1) まず結論を短く述べ(No, I don't think so.)、次に理由や具体例を一文で付け加える、2) ブランドを例に出す場合は文を簡潔にして、なぜ高価でも選ぶ人がいるか(quality, status, design)を明確にする、3) 不要な補助語や繰り返しを避ける練習。
Ví dụ: No, I don't think expensive products are always better. For example, designer brands like Chanel may be expensive mainly because of their prestige and unique design, not necessarily because they are much higher in quality than cheaper alternatives.
× I today I bought AT Shirt because it is very cheaper.
✓ Today I bought an AT shirt because it was much cheaper.
原文では記事と語順の誤り、比較級の使い方が問題です。'I today I bought'は語順が不自然で、主語の重複を避けるため'Today I bought'にします。可算名詞'shirt'には不定冠詞'an'が必要です(Article errors)。'very cheaper'は誤用で、比較級には'much cheaper'や'slightly cheaper'など副詞を用います。過去の出来事を述べているので動詞は過去形'bought'および'was'を用います。改善方法: 時制と語順を確認し、可算名詞には適切な冠詞を付け、比較級には'much/slightly/considerably'などの修飾語を使う。
× It's on the sale.
✓ It was on sale.
'on the sale'は不自然であり、英語では' on sale'(売り出し中)が一般的です。また文脈は過去の買い物なので動詞を過去形'was'にします(Article errors)。改善方法: 定型表現'be on sale'を覚え、適切な時制に合わせて動詞を変える。
× Yeah, I compared prices a lot because I am not, I mean, I don't like to spend too much money.
✓ Yeah, I compare prices a lot because I'm not, I mean, I don't like to spend too much money.
話全体は習慣を述べているので現在形を使うべきです。'I compared prices a lot'は過去形になっているため、不一致が生じます(Present tense issue)。改善方法: 習慣や一般事実は現在形で表現する。現在の習慣を示す副詞句(a lot)に注意する。
× When I want something, some products, I I wait a little and like one week ago, I go again and watch the price.
✓ When I want something, like a product, I wait a little, and if the price seems high I go back after about a week and check the price again.
時制と語順の問題があります。現在の習慣を述べているので現在形を用いるべきです。'one week ago'は過去を示す表現であり不適切なので'after about a week'に変えます。また'repeat actions'は'go back'や'check the price again'のように自然な語を使います(Present tense issue)。改善方法: 時制を一貫させ、過去を示す語句を習慣表現に混ぜない。行動の順序を明確な表現で示す。
× Yeah, I always, uh, struggle with myself whether I buy this cloth or not uh, because, uh, maybe, uh, it might be more cheaper in the future, but uh, so I, I travel a lot, a lot.
✓ Yeah, I always struggle with myself about whether I should buy this piece of clothing or not, because maybe it might be cheaper in the future, and so I travel a lot.
複数の点が問題です。'struggle with myself whether I buy'は不自然で、'about whether I should buy'が適切です。'this cloth'は不自然で可算表現として'a piece of clothing'が適切です。'more cheaper'は二重比較で誤りなので'simply cheaper'または'might be cheaper'にします。最後の'but uh, so I, I travel a lot'は接続詞の誤用と冗長さがあるため'and so I travel a lot'に修正します(Present tense issue, Incorrect use of adjectives or adverbs, Article errors, Incorrect conjunction use)。改善方法: 'whether'の後に適切な助動詞を使い、可算名詞の表現を見直し、比較級を正しく使い、接続詞を統一する。
× I don't think so for, for example, uh, brand, like for example, uh, Chanel or Louis Vuitton or something.
✓ I don't think so. For example, brands like Chanel or Louis Vuitton...
語順と可算複数の扱いが不自然です。'for, for example, uh, brand'は冗長で'brands like Chanel or Louis Vuitton'のように複数形で表現するのが自然です。また文を2つに分けると明確になります(Present tense issue, Singular and plural issue)。改善方法: 'for example'は文頭や文中で1回用い、'brand'は複数形'brands'を使う。
× It has a too expensive, but it for, uh, uniqueness is enough in clothes.
✓ They are too expensive, but for uniqueness in clothing they are worthwhile.
'It has a too expensive'は文法的に誤りで、'They are too expensive'や'something is too expensive'が正しい。'it for uniqueness is enough in clothes'も不自然で意味を明確にするため'result: for uniqueness in clothing they are worthwhile'と表現します。数の一致のため'should use they for brands'を使います(Incorrect use of adjectives or adverbs, Singular and plural issue)。改善方法: 形容詞'too + 形容詞'の順序や主語と代名詞の一致に注意し、'in clothing'など自然な表現を使う。