Shopping— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: Be more concise and correct repetition/grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Correct tense and article use (e.g., “go shopping,” not “on shopping”). Avoid repeating words.

Ví dụ: Yes, I enjoy shopping. I usually go shopping with friends when I have free time, and we like to browse clothes and bookstores together, which makes the trip fun and social.

Gợi ý: Provide a clear reason and one specific example. Avoid repetition and improve sentence structure — use linking words like “because” or “so.” Mention what kinds of items you compare and how it affects your decision.

Ví dụ: Yes, I often compare prices because I want good value for money. For example, I check prices online and in-store for electronics so I can choose the best deal.

Gợi ý: Give a direct topic sentence, then support it with a brief reason and an example. Fix grammar (e.g., “it's not,” “I easily choose,” “I usually go shopping with my mom”). Use a linking word like “because.”

Ví dụ: No, it's not difficult for me to make choices because I'm easygoing and rarely get overwhelmed. For example, I often go shopping with my mom who helps me decide quickly.

Gợi ý: Avoid fillers and be more balanced. Begin with a clear position, then qualify it with a reason and a brief counterexample using linking words like “however” or “but.” Use correct phrasing (e.g., “last longer”).

Ví dụ: I think expensive products are often better because they tend to have higher quality and last longer; however, that's not always true, since some cheaper brands can offer excellent value for everyday items.

× Yes I do actually. I enjoy shopping when I I have some free time so I prefer spending my time with my friends on shopping.

✓ Yes, I do. I enjoy shopping when I have some free time, so I prefer spending my free time shopping with my friends.

Errors: repeated word 'I', awkward preposition 'on shopping', and redundant phrasing. Use simple present for habitual actions ('I enjoy', 'I have'). Use 'spending my free time shopping' or 'shopping with my friends' instead of 'on shopping'. Remove duplicate 'I'. Suggestion: read aloud and simplify to avoid repetition and incorrect prepositions.

× I like I like shop some clothes and books and other items.

✓ I like to shop for clothes, books, and other items.

Errors: repeated phrase 'I like I like', incorrect verb form 'shop' after 'like' should be infinitive 'to shop' or gerund 'shopping', and missing preposition 'for' when indicating items. Use parallel list commas. Suggestion: use 'I like to shop for...' or 'I enjoy shopping for...'.

× Yes I do. I prefer to purchase some items with good price because I'm I prefer to spend my money with purchase items. Yes.

✓ Yes, I do. I prefer to purchase items at a good price because I prefer not to spend too much money.

Errors: awkward phrase 'with good price' (use 'at a good price'), repetition 'I'm I prefer', and ungrammatical 'spend my money with purchase items'. Simplify and use correct collocations: 'purchase items at a good price' or 'buy items at a reasonable price'. Suggestion: avoid repetition and use common phrases for cost ('at a good price', 'not spend too much').

× No, it's no it's not because I'm a good easygoing person and I easily choice my purchases and I usually go shopping with my mom.

✓ No, it's not, because I'm an easygoing person and I choose my purchases easily; I usually go shopping with my mom.

Errors: redundant 'it's no it's not', incorrect article 'a good easygoing person' (use 'an easygoing person'), wrong verb 'choice' should be 'choose', and adverb placement 'easily' better after verb. Use semicolon or separate sentences for clarity. Suggestion: check subject-verb pairs and article usage before adjectives starting with vowel sounds ('an easygoing').

× Uh, yes, I do. Most of the time, uh, it's correct. And umm, some expensive products are uh, have high quality and uh, they uh, they remain for us for a long time and we can use a long time.

✓ Yes, I do. Most of the time that's correct. Some expensive products have high quality and last a long time, so we can use them for longer.

Errors: fillers and repetition 'they uh, they', incorrect verb phrase 'are have high quality' should be 'have high quality' or 'are of high quality', awkward 'remain for us for a long time' — use 'last a long time' or 'remain durable'. Also need object 'them' after 'use'. Suggestion: remove fillers, use 'have high quality' or 'are of high quality', and use 'last' or 'be durable' to express longevity; include correct pronoun objects.