Gifts— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: Cải thiện độ tự nhiên và mạch lạc: tránh tiếng ệ (uh) và lặp từ. Trả lời nên bắt đầu bằng câu chủ đề trực tiếp (ví dụ: “Not really, I find it difficult to choose gifts.”), sau đó nêu 1–2 chi tiết cụ thể bằng cách dùng liên từ để liên kết (because, so, therefore). Giữ độ dài 1–3 câu, tránh lặp ý (consider… and size; picking… doesn't match).

Ví dụ: Not really. I find choosing gifts difficult because I try to match the recipient’s hobbies and clothing size, so it often takes me a long time and sometimes I still pick something that doesn't suit their interests.

Gợi ý: Trả lời ngắn gọn, cụ thể hơn và tránh đưa vào nhận xét của giám khảo hoặc chấm điểm. Bắt đầu bằng câu chủ đề: nêu những dịp bạn thường tặng quà (e.g., birthdays, graduations), rồi đưa ví dụ ngắn (e.g., I recently gave a bouquet to a friend who graduated). Thêm một lý do ngắn để tạo kết thúc mạch lạc (e.g., to show respect).

Ví dụ: I usually give gifts on birthdays, anniversaries and graduations. For example, I recently gave a bouquet to a friend who graduated to show my respect and affection.

Gợi ý: Sửa ngữ pháp và cấu trúc câu: dùng thì và dạng đúng của động từ (chọn -> choosing/chose), tránh lặp từ và chỉnh lại danh từ bị sai (boutique → bouquet). Nên bắt đầu bằng 1 câu chủ đề: state the main point, rồi dùng liên từ (for example, also) để nối chi tiết cụ thể (e.g., hobbies, clothing size). Tránh câu dài lủng củng.

Ví dụ: I usually consider the recipient’s hobbies and, if needed, their clothing size. For example, for a friend who loves flowers I gave a bouquet for her graduation to show my respect and affection.

Gợi ý: Chỉnh ngữ pháp và mạch câu: tránh lặp tính từ (special, special), sửa thì (have made → made) và vị trí đại từ (I she → She). Nên cấu trúc: câu chủ đề + chi tiết + kết quả/ảnh hưởng. Dùng linking words như because, so để kết nối ý và giữ 2–3 câu ngắn gọn.

Ví dụ: Yes. I made a picture for my best friend’s birthday because I wanted to give her something personal. She loved it and said it was one of the most thoughtful presents she had ever received, so I felt really happy.

Gợi ý: Sửa cấu trúc và ngữ pháp cơ bản: dùng câu chủ đề rõ ràng (In my opinion, expensive gifts don't necessarily express feelings better). Loại bỏ từ thừa và lặp, chỉnh danh từ không phù hợp (Styrofoam present → a small handmade gift) và thì động từ. Sắp xếp lại ý: đưa lập luận (shows care and time), ví dụ cụ thể, rồi kết luận. Giữ 2–3 câu ngắn gọn, tránh tiếng ệ.

Ví dụ: In my opinion, expensive gifts don't necessarily show feelings better. A small handmade gift or a handwritten letter often means more because it shows the giver spent time and care on it; for example, when my best friend made things for me I was over the moon and cherished them.

× Well, when I choosing a gift, I usually consider the recipient's hobby or interest.

✓ Well, when I choose a gift, I usually consider the recipient's hobby or interest.

The verb 'choose' should be in base form after 'when I' because this is a simple present clause describing a habitual action. Using the -ing form 'choosing' here is incorrect. Suggestion: use 'I choose' for regular habits or 'I'm choosing' only if describing an action in progress.

× Interest such as like clothes or about their size about their clothing there.

✓ Interests such as clothing or their clothing size.

The original phrase repeats and misuses prepositions and fillers ('such as like', 'about', 'there'). Simplify by using 'interests such as clothing' and 'their clothing size' to clearly link interest and size. Suggestion: remove redundant words and place modifiers next to the nouns they describe.

× For example, a friend who loves flowers received a boutique for her graduation to show my respect and affection.

✓ For example, a friend who loves flowers received a bouquet for her graduation to show my respect and affection.

The word 'boutique' is incorrect here; the intended noun is 'bouquet' (a bunch of flowers). Also, no article change needed beyond correcting the noun. Suggestion: use the correct vocabulary 'bouquet' when referring to flowers.

× Recently I have made an A picture drawn by me for my best friend's birthday because I wanted to give her something special, special and personal.

✓ Recently I made a picture I drew for my best friend's birthday because I wanted to give her something special and personal.

Use simple past 'made' with a finished time reference 'recently' is acceptable, but 'have made' plus awkward noun phrase is unnatural. Also 'a picture drawn by me' is wordy; use 'a picture I drew'. Remove duplicate 'special'. Suggestion: use concise relative clauses and consistent past tense for completed actions.

× I she loved it and said it was one of the most thoughtful present she ever received.

✓ She loved it and said it was one of the most thoughtful presents she had ever received.

Remove the stray 'I' at the start. Use plural 'presents' or keep singular with 'one of the most thoughtful presents'. For past reference before another past moment, use past perfect 'had ever received'. Suggestion: check subject placement and tense sequence.

× So I'm very excited to listen her.

✓ So I was very excited to hear about it from her.

'Excited to listen her' is ungrammatical; 'listen' requires a preposition and object to refer to hearing someone (listen to her). But the intended meaning is 'hear about it from her', and because the event is in the past, use past tense 'was'. Suggestion: choose appropriate verb phrases ('hear about' or 'listen to') and match tense to context.

× Offer my point of view, I don't think expensive gifts are expressed better are my feelings because sometimes a simple Styrofoam present alike handwritten letter or or handmade picture could bring uh, many meaningful ideas because it shows other person cared and spent time on it, for example, like my best friends.

✓ From my point of view, I don't think expensive gifts express my feelings better because sometimes a simple present like a handwritten letter or a handmade picture can be much more meaningful since it shows the other person cared and spent time on it, for example my best friend.

Multiple problems: 'Offer my point of view' should be 'From my point of view'. Verb phrase ordering was wrong ('gifts are expressed better are my feelings') — use active structure 'express my feelings better'. 'Styrofoam present alike' is incorrect; use 'a simple present like'. Remove duplicate 'or or' and filler words. Use 'can be' for possibility and 'since' or 'because' for reason. Suggestion: simplify clauses, use correct linking phrases, and choose natural collocations.

× Always try many try to do many things for me.

✓ She always tries to do many things for me.

Missing subject 'She' and incorrect verb form 'try' for third person singular; use 'tries'. Also reorder to natural English 'She always tries to do many things for me.' Suggestion: include the subject and apply third-person singular verb agreement.

× So I when I received any handmade gifts from her like a clothes or something like that, I would was over the moon and umm cherished them.

✓ So when I received any handmade gifts from her, like clothes or something like that, I was over the moon and cherished them.

Remove extraneous 'I' after 'So'. Use simple past 'was' (not 'would was') because describing past feelings. 'A clothes' is ungrammatical; use 'clothes' without article. Keep parallel past verbs 'was' and 'cherished'. Suggestion: avoid mixing conditional 'would' with past tense; ensure noun-article agreement and verb tense consistency.