Watch— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: Be more concise and grammatically correct. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Correct tense and subject-verb agreement and avoid redundancy (e.g., "now I'm not wearing one" → "I don't wear one now").

Ví dụ: No, I don't wear a watch now. I used to wear one as a student because I needed to check the time during exams, but nowadays I just check the time on my mobile phone.

Gợi ý: Be direct and correct grammar. Use one clear topic sentence and then give specific details. Fix awkward phrasing and repetition, and use linking words to connect ideas (e.g., "but" or "because").

Ví dụ: No, I haven't received a watch as a gift. The only watch I've owned I bought myself at a department store because I needed it to tell the time during exams at school.

Gợi ý: Good content and relevant vocabulary. Improve cohesion by correcting small grammar issues and varying vocabulary. Use a linking phrase and give one brief example to make it more specific.

Ví dụ: I think many people wear expensive watches to display their social or financial status. In addition, some wear them to make a good impression at work or social events—for example, executives may choose a luxury brand to project professionalism.

Gợi ý: Answer directly and avoid repeating phrases ("In my view, I think"). State your position clearly, then give a concise reason and a personal example using a linking word like "however" or "for example."

Ví dụ: I don't think it's essential to wear a watch because it depends on individual needs. Wearing a watch can help improve punctuality; however, I personally rely on my phone to check the time, so a watch isn't necessary for me.

× No, I used to when I was a student who need to check the time during exams, but now I'm not wearing one because I can use mobile phone to check the time whenever I want.

✓ No, I used to when I was a student who needed to check the time during exams, but now I do not wear one because I can use my mobile phone to check the time whenever I want.

The sentence mixes present and past incorrectly. 'Need' should be past 'needed' to agree with 'was a student'. 'I'm not wearing one' is awkward for a habitual present; use 'I do not wear one'. Also 'mobile phone' should be 'my mobile phone' for clarity. Suggest using consistent tense and appropriate present simple for habits. Grammar problem type ID: 5

× No I don't think so. The former watch I have I have had was chosen by my own in a DE department store because I want I needed it to for the exams in school.

✓ No, I don't think so. The previous watch I had was chosen by me in a DE department store because I needed it for exams at school.

'Have had' is redundant; simple past 'had' is correct. 'Chosen by my own' is incorrect—use 'chosen by me'. 'I want I needed' mixes tenses; keep past 'needed'. 'to for' has an extra preposition; 'for exams' is correct. Also use 'previous' or 'former' and 'at school' for idiomatic phrasing. Grammar problem type ID: 9

× I think many people wear luxury watches to display their social and financial status, while the other choose them to show off wealth or to make good impression at work or social events.

✓ I think many people wear luxury watches to display their social and financial status, while others choose them to show off their wealth or to make a good impression at work or at social events.

'The other' is incorrect; use 'others' for people. 'Show off wealth' needs a possessive 'their wealth'. 'Make good impression' needs an article: 'a good impression'. Add 'at' before 'social events' for parallelism. These changes fix pronoun and article usage. Grammar problem type ID: 12

× In my view, I think wearing a watch can improve one's punctuality, but that really depends on everyone's daily routines and needs. For me, I can just check on my phone too.

✓ In my view, wearing a watch can improve one's punctuality, but that really depends on everyone's daily routine and needs. For me, I can just check my phone too.

'Daily routines' is acceptable but 'daily routine' is more natural with 'everyone's'. 'Check on my phone' is unidiomatic; say 'check my phone'. Also 'I think' is redundant after 'In my view'. These adjustments improve naturalness and article/word choice. Grammar problem type ID: 22