Watch— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: Be more concise, correct minor grammar and unclear phrase, and add a clear topic sentence. Use linking words to connect reasons. Avoid redundancy and keep within 3–4 sentences.

Ví dụ: I don't usually wear a watch because it irritates my skin and causes an allergic reaction. Therefore, I prefer to check the time on my phone, which is more comfortable and convenient. Occasionally I wear a smartwatch for exercise, but generally I avoid wrist accessories.

Gợi ý: Improve grammar and clarity, combine short sentences into a clear structured response: topic sentence + specific detail + feeling. Use correct tense and precise vocabulary.

Ví dụ: Yes, I received a watch as a gift from my father when I graduated from high school. It marked an important milestone, so I wore it every day and felt proud and more responsible. Even now I keep it for sentimental reasons.

Gợi ý: Good structure and content. Make linking words smoother and add a concise opening sentence. Provide slightly more precise vocabulary (e.g., 'status symbol' instead of 'show off').

Ví dụ: People wear expensive watches for different reasons. Older generations often appreciate the craftsmanship and tradition behind luxury timepieces, while many younger people buy them as a status symbol to express wealth or taste. Additionally, some collectors value watches as long-term investments.

Gợi ý: Clear and relevant answer. To improve, start with a direct topic sentence, use one linking phrase, and add a brief specific example to support your view. Keep it within three sentences for conciseness.

Ví dụ: I don't think wearing a watch is essential today because smartphones and smartwatches make checking the time easy and convenient. For example, I use my phone throughout the day instead of a wristwatch. However, some people still wear traditional watches as a fashion accessory or to project a professional image.

× It's kinda locks me.

✓ It kind of locks up on me.

The original uses 'kinda' (informal) and incorrect verb form 'locks me.' 'Kind of' is clearer and the present participle/phrase 'locks up on me' correctly describes something causing a temporary restriction. Use 'kind of' in place of 'kinda' in formal speech and the phrasal verb 'locks up on me' or 'gets stuck on me' fits context. Note: This falls under present participle/verb form issues because the verb phrase was incorrectly formed.

× When I graduated from high school, my dad came near watch and it was very special to me because it's marked an important milestone.

✓ When I graduated from high school, my dad gave me a watch and it was very special to me because it marked an important milestone.

The student used 'came near watch' which is incorrect and used 'it's marked' (present) with a past event. Replace with 'gave me a watch' to correctly express receiving a gift and use past simple 'marked' to match the past-time reference. This is an article/word-choice and tense alignment error; correcting to 'a watch' and past tense resolves the issues.

× I love wearing it every day because it made me feel proud and more responsible.

✓ I loved wearing it every day because it made me feel proud and more responsible.

The sentence mixes present 'I love' with past 'made me feel' about the same past period. To maintain consistent past narration about the time after graduation, both verbs should be past: 'I loved wearing it... it made me feel...' Alternatively, if referring to a continuing present feeling, change both to present. Here past is more consistent with the previous sentence.

× I don't usually wear much because it tends to irritate my skin and gives me an allergic reaction and I don't love that feeling.

✓ I don't usually wear much because it tends to irritate my skin and give me an allergic reaction, and I don't like that feeling.

The original has mixed verb agreement: 'it tends to irritate... and gives' should parallel 'give' after 'tends to'. Also 'don't love that feeling' is informal; 'don't like that feeling' is more natural. Adding a comma before the conjunction improves clarity. This is a conjunction and verb parallelism issue.

× I don't think wearing a watch is important nowadays because technology has advanced so much.

✓ I don't think wearing a watch is important nowadays because technology has advanced so much.

No change needed: sentence is grammatical. Included to show no singular/plural error present.

× Most people simply check the time on their smartphones or smartwatches, which is more convenient.

✓ Most people simply check the time on their smartphones or smartwatches, which are more convenient.

The relative clause 'which is more convenient' refers back to two items (smartphones or smartwatches). The verb should agree in number with the plural antecedent: 'are more convenient.' This is a sentence-structure/subject agreement issue.