Art— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: Your answer is natural and informative, but it is slightly repetitive and a bit long. Make your main point directly in one sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details. Avoid repeating the same idea (love for drawing) and correct small grammar issues (e.g., drop extra words like "ever since I was").

Ví dụ: Yes, I love drawing. I have enjoyed it since childhood and later pursued a bachelor’s degree in Fine Arts with a focus on advertising, which helped me refine techniques I originally developed while drawing as a kid.

Gợi ý: Good, clear response with reasons. Reduce repetition ("observe and look", "different... different") and use one linking phrase to connect ideas. Keep it to two to three sentences and add a specific example of what you learn at galleries.

Ví dụ: Yes, I enjoy visiting galleries because they are immersive. For example, I often study brushwork and composition in contemporary paintings, which helps me incorporate new techniques into my own drawings.

Gợi ý: Your enthusiasm is clear, but phrasing is wordy and repetitive ("something" used many times). Make a concise topic sentence, then give a specific area you want to learn and a reason why. Use linking words like "because" or "for example."

Ví dụ: Definitely — I want to learn more about digital illustration because art keeps evolving and new tools and styles emerge. For example, I’d like to study digital brush techniques to combine traditional drawing with digital media.

Gợi ý: Answer is relevant and personal but has minor grammar and clarity issues ("appreciate the more that I do it" and "especially that I work in a art community"). Make the structure: direct answer + brief supporting detail + one example of how you practice now. Keep it concise.

Ví dụ: Yes, I learned to draw as a child and have kept it as a hobby ever since. Now I practice both for fun and professionally by contributing illustrations to projects in my local art community.

× It's one of the things that I have come to enjoy ever since I was a child.

✓ It's one of the things that I have come to enjoy ever since I was a child.

No correction needed. The sentence is grammatically correct and uses present perfect 'have come' appropriately to describe a continuing state from childhood to present.

× Through the years, I did continue my love for art by studying a bachelor's degree in Fine Arts, specifically in advertising, which I think is heavily influenced by my love for drawing ever since I was.

✓ Through the years, I continued my love for art by studying for a bachelor's degree in Fine Arts, specifically in advertising, which I think has been heavily influenced by my love for drawing since I was a child.

Errors: unnecessary use of auxiliary 'did' with 'continue' in past simple (Past tense issue -> ID 5), incorrect phrase 'studying a bachelor's degree' (Verb + preposition needed), awkward tense and missing object 'since I was' (sentence incomplete). Corrections: use simple past 'continued' rather than 'did continue'; use 'studying for a bachelor's degree' or 'pursuing a bachelor's degree'; change 'is heavily influenced ... ever since I was' to present perfect 'has been heavily influenced ... since I was a child' to show influence from past to present. Suggestion: simplify past narration with simple past and use 'since I was a child' to complete the clause.

× As someone who deeply enjoys the arts, I do love going to the gallery.

✓ As someone who deeply enjoys the arts, I do love going to galleries.

Error: use of definite article 'the' before 'gallery' suggests a specific gallery but context implies galleries in general (Article errors -> ID 22). Correction: plural 'galleries' or 'going to the gallery' if referring to a specific one. Suggestion: use plural to indicate general habit.

× I think it's such an immersive space where you can observe and look at the different techniques and art styles of different artists, which I think allows you to expand your styles as well.

✓ I think it's such an immersive space where you can observe the techniques and art styles of various artists, which allows you to expand your own style as well.

Issues: repetition 'observe and look at' is redundant (Sentence structure errors -> ID 26), repeated 'different' is stylistically weak, mismatch 'expand your styles' should be singular 'your own style' (Incorrect use of adjectives or adverbs -> ID 13 or Singular/plural -> ID1). Corrections: remove redundancy, use 'various' and 'your own style' to be clear. Suggestion: avoid repetition and ensure subject possessive matches singular 'style'.

× Absolutely. I genuinely believe there's a lot more to learn, especially when it comes to art.

✓ Absolutely. I genuinely believe there's a lot more to learn, especially when it comes to art.

No correction needed. Sentence is grammatically correct.

× It is something that I observe is constantly growing and transforming into different styles as the years go by.

✓ It is something that I have observed: art is constantly growing and transforming into different styles as the years go by.

Problem: awkward structure 'I observe is constantly...' combines clauses incorrectly (Present tense/ sentence structure -> ID 6 and 26). Correction: separate the observation from the statement using 'I have observed' or rephrase to 'I observe that art is constantly...'. Suggestion: use a clearer clause like 'I have observed that art is constantly...' to express ongoing observation.

× This is something that I love to observe as a personal artist and is something that I want to expound my knowledge on.

✓ This is something that I love to observe as a personal artist and it is something that I want to expand my knowledge of.

Errors: 'expound my knowledge on' is incorrect collocation (Incorrect use of prepositions -> ID 11 and Verb choice). Use 'expand my knowledge of' or 'expand my knowledge in' instead. Also sentence missing subject in second clause; add 'it' for clarity. Suggestion: use 'expand my knowledge of/in' and avoid 'expound' which means explain in detail.

× As a matter of fact, I did.

✓ As a matter of fact, I did.

No correction needed. Short answer 'I did' correctly uses past tense.

× Drawing is one of the hobbies that I've kept since childhood, and I've grown to appreciate the more that I do it as the years go by.

✓ Drawing is one of the hobbies that I've kept since childhood, and I've grown to appreciate it more as the years go by.

Errors: awkward placement 'appreciate the more that I do it' (Sentence structure -> ID 26) and unnecessary 'the' (Article errors -> ID 22). Correction: use 'appreciate it more' and keep verb tense consistent. Suggestion: place 'more' after the verb and remove extra words.

× This is something that I casually do, whether it's for fun or for work, especially that I work in a art community.

✓ This is something that I casually do, whether it's for fun or for work, especially because I work in an art community.

Errors: 'especially that I work' is incorrect conjunction/phrase (Incorrect conjunction use -> ID 16) and article error 'a art' should be 'an art' (Article errors -> ID 22). Corrections: use 'especially because' to explain reason and 'an art community'. Suggestion: use 'because' or 'as' to introduce reasons and use 'an' before vowel sound.