Art— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: Be clearer and avoid repetition. Start with a direct topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details. Use correct names and avoid unclear words. Also fix grammar (e.g., “I sketch anime characters such as Goku, Tanjiro and Naruto”). Keep it within 3–4 sentences.

Ví dụ: Yes, I enjoy drawing because it helps me relax after a long day. For example, I often sketch anime characters such as Goku, Tanjiro and Naruto to practise shading and facial expressions. Drawing is one of my favourite hobbies and it improves my focus.

Gợi ý: Make the reply more concise and organized. Begin with a clear topic sentence, then give two specific reasons using linking words (for example, “because” and “also”). Avoid filler phrases and grammatical mistakes (e.g., “You learn about historical techniques and cultural history”).

Ví dụ: Yes, I enjoy visiting art galleries because they teach you about historical painting techniques and artistic styles. Also, galleries often explain the cultural and religious context behind works, which helps me understand a country’s history.

Gợi ý: Be careful with sensitive topics: phrase them respectfully and clearly. Provide a clear topic sentence and then a concise, specific example. Use linking words like “for instance” and correct grammar (e.g., “through art people can express feelings and raise awareness about social issues”). Avoid repetition and finish your thought.

Ví dụ: Yes, I want to learn more about art because it allows people to express emotions and to raise awareness about social issues. For instance, artists often create powerful paintings to highlight problems such as violence against women, hoping to encourage public discussion and change.

Gợi ý: Provide a clear past-tense account and avoid repetition and hesitations. Start with a direct topic sentence about learning as a child, then give one or two concise examples and link them (e.g., “because” or “so”). Fix grammar (e.g., “I learned to draw at school; my teacher encouraged me to express feelings through sketches”).

Ví dụ: Yes, I learned to draw when I was a child because my school teacher encouraged us to express emotions through art. For example, I used to sketch landscapes and simple portraits, which helped me practise composition and shading.

× Yeah, I like drawing as it keeps me relaxed and fresh throughout the day.

✓ Yeah, I like drawing because it keeps me relaxed and fresh throughout the day.

The original sentence used 'as' which is acceptable but can be ambiguous; replace with 'because' for clearer causal connection. No -ing form error in 'drawing' but clarity improves meaning. Use of 'keeps' is correct for singular subject 'drawing'.

× For example, I make I do the sketching of the anime characters like Gozo, Tan Zero and Naruto and marry more as it's the most favorite part of my life.

✓ For example, I sketch anime characters like Gojo, Tanjiro and Naruto, and drawing is my favorite part of life.

The original sentence contains repetition ('I make I do'), incorrect names (likely misspellings), awkward phrasing ('marry more'), and redundancy ('most favorite'). Corrections remove repetition, fix names, simplify verb phrase to 'sketch', and use 'favorite' without 'most'. This fixes sentence structure and clarity.

× Yes, I do like to visit the art gallery.

✓ Yes, I do like to visit art galleries.

Using the definite article 'the' before 'art gallery' implies a specific gallery; plural 'art galleries' is more natural when speaking generally. Alternatively 'the art gallery' could be correct if referring to a particular one.

× It's you get the knowledge about the ancient paintings and the techniques they use for the painting and you would like to know about the history of the country and of the religion from the art gallery.

✓ There you can learn about ancient paintings and the techniques used to create them, and you can learn about the country's history and its religions from the gallery.

Original uses 'It's you get' which is ungrammatical and pronoun references are unclear. Replacing with 'There you can learn' clarifies subject and corrects verb forms 'used to create them'. Use 'its religions' or 'religion' for correct possessive pronoun agreement.

× Yes, I would like to learn more about the art as through the art you can express your feelings to the other and you can convey a message to the society.

✓ Yes, I would like to learn more about art because through art you can express your feelings to others and convey a message to society.

Use 'about art' (no 'the') for general reference. 'to the other' is incorrect; use 'to others'. Remove redundant 'you can' before 'convey'. 'Because' clarifies causation. No -ing form needed here but cleaned phrasing.

× For example, when a girl get raped, many of the artists paint the paint the feeling and the pain of the girl so that society can get a message and can.

✓ For example, when a girl is raped, many artists paint her feelings and pain so that society receives the message and understands the issue.

Original has tense and passive errors ('get raped' should be 'is raped'), repetition ('paint the paint'), and an incomplete ending ('and can'). Correction uses passive 'is raped', removes repetition, uses 'her' for pronoun clarity, and completes the clause with 'understands the issue'.

× Yes, I have learnt a drawing when I was a kid as my school teacher has taught me through that I can express my feelings and emotions to other.

✓ Yes, I learned how to draw when I was a kid because my school teacher taught me that I could express my feelings and emotions to others.

Mixing present perfect ('have learnt') with past time expression ('when I was a kid') is incorrect; use simple past 'learned'. 'a drawing' is wrong; use 'how to draw'. Change 'has taught me' to simple past 'taught me' and 'can' to past 'could' for consistent past narration. 'to other' should be 'to others'.

× For example, when I was a child I can I can draw a landscape, uh, sketch.

✓ For example, when I was a child I could draw a landscape or make a sketch.

Consistency of tense: past ability should be 'could' not 'can'. Remove repetition 'I can I can' and filler 'uh'. Use 'or make a sketch' to sound natural.

× I can make sketches and paint some of the paintings so that I can express my feelings.

✓ I used to make sketches and paint so that I could express my feelings.

Maintaining past context requires past tense: 'used to' or 'I used to make' and 'could' for ability. 'Paint some of the paintings' is redundant; 'paint' suffices. This aligns tense and improves naturalness.