Art— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: Be more concise and correct tense and word choice. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid fillers (uh) and awkward phrasing like “what uh for how I want” and “color matchings.”

Ví dụ: Yes, I love drawing because it helps me relax and express my creativity. For example, I enjoy experimenting with color combinations to create a calm, aesthetic effect in my paintings.

Gợi ý: Reduce repetition and use smoother linking words. Begin with a clear statement, then give a specific reason and an example. Replace vague phrases like “isolating the chaos” with clearer expressions such as “escaping the chaos.”

Ví dụ: Yes, I really enjoy visiting galleries because they help me escape the chaos of daily life. For instance, walking slowly through exhibitions and studying individual paintings calms me and helps me focus.

Gợi ý: Make a direct, grammatically correct statement and organize supporting details. Use linking words like “for example” and avoid unclear phrases and repetition. Specify what areas you want to learn and why.

Ví dụ: Yes, I would like to learn more about art. For example, I want to study painting techniques and contemporary art theory because they would improve my own work and deepen my appreciation of other artists' practices.

Gợi ý: Give a concise topic sentence and add one specific detail about what you learned. Correct tense usage (past simple) and remove hesitations. Use a linking word if you add an example.

Ví dụ: Yes, I learned drawing at primary school. For example, in arts and crafts lessons I practised sketching basic shapes and shading, which gave me a strong foundation.

× When I was drawing, I can feel my inner peace and I can express my creativity what uh for how I want.

✓ When I am drawing, I can feel my inner peace and I can express my creativity in the way I want.

The original mixes past continuous 'was drawing' with present tense 'can feel' and 'can express'. Use present simple/progressive for habitual or current feelings: 'When I am drawing' matches 'I can feel'. Also 'what uh for how I want' is ungrammatical; replace with 'in the way I want' for clear expression.

× And I love the color matchings in drawings like the of the aesthetic in.

✓ And I love the color combinations in drawings and the aesthetic.

'Color matchings' is not idiomatic; use 'color combinations'. The fragment 'like the of the aesthetic in' is ungrammatical; simplify to 'and the aesthetic' to convey meaning. This fixes adjective-noun usage and sentence structure.

× Every time when I'm in a gallery, I can feel peace and I can I I feel like I am isolating the chaos in my daily life.

✓ Every time I am in a gallery, I feel peaceful and I feel like I am isolating myself from the chaos of my daily life.

Remove redundant 'when' after 'every time'. 'Can feel peace' is acceptable but 'feel peaceful' is more natural. Add reflexive pronoun 'myself' with 'isolating' and correct phrase to 'isolating myself from the chaos of my daily life' for clarity; this involves present tense and pronoun use.

× So I really like to go to the gallery because that makes me feel soothing.

✓ So I really like going to galleries because that makes me feel soothed.

'Like to go' is acceptable but 'like going' is more natural for general preference (verb + -ing). 'Makes me feel soothing' is incorrect because 'soothing' describes something that calms; the person feels 'soothed' (past participle adjective). Also plural 'galleries' fits general meaning.

× Of course I would. I would say arts is a large genre you they contain performing arts, drawing or maybe some of the those active arts so as as artists.

✓ Of course I would. I would say art is a large category; it contains performing arts, drawing, and some other active art forms practiced by artists.

'I would' is vague but acceptable as polite. Major issues: 'arts is' should be 'art is' (incorrect plural/category—article/word choice), and sentence structure is fragmented. 'You they contain' is incorrect pronoun usage; replace with 'it contains'. Clarify 'some of the those active arts so as as artists' to 'some other active art forms practiced by artists.' This addresses modal use, noun choice, pronouns, and sentence structure.

× Yes, in my primary school I've got arts and crafts lesson and in that lesson I've learned drawing and sketching.

✓ Yes, in primary school I had an arts and crafts lesson, and in that lesson I learned drawing and sketching.

Use simple past 'had' and 'learned' for past events (past tense issue as well). Remove 'my' before 'primary school' or keep with context; 'in primary school' is more natural. Use article 'an' before 'arts and crafts lesson'. 'I've got' and 'I've learned' (present perfect) are inappropriate when referring to specific past schooling; use simple past. This fixes article usage and tense.

× So I I did learn some drawing when I was a kid.

✓ So I did learn some drawing when I was a kid.

Main issue is redundancy 'I I'. Keep single 'I'. 'Did learn' is acceptable for emphasis; tense matches 'when I was a kid'. This addresses sentence structure and repetition.