Dreams— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: Cải thiện ngữ pháp và cấu trúc câu để trả lời rõ ràng hơn; dùng câu chủ đề ngắn gọn rồi thêm một hoặc hai chi tiết cụ thể. Tránh lặp từ và sửa thì (ví dụ: "I have a dream" -> "I dream of becoming..."). Nên dùng tối đa 3-4 câu, kết hợp liên từ để mạch lạc.

Ví dụ: I dream of becoming a diplomat in the future. I am working towards this goal by studying international relations and practicing public speaking every day. For example, I join debate clubs and read news about global affairs to improve my knowledge.

Gợi ý: Sắp xếp lại câu để rõ ràng, sửa lỗi ngữ pháp và tránh lặp. Nói rõ ai không ủng hộ và lý do một cách ngắn gọn, sau đó nêu phản ứng của bạn. Dùng liên từ như "but" hoặc "however" để nối ý.

Ví dụ: Yes, I usually share my dream with my parents, but they are not very supportive because they think diplomacy is unusual for a woman. However, I also talk to my friends for encouragement, although they don't have professional experience in this field.

Gợi ý: Làm câu trả lời rõ ràng hơn: bắt đầu bằng câu chủ đề trực tiếp, giải thích ý nghĩa bằng ví dụ cụ thể. Tránh từ lẫn lộn và từ không cần thiết. Dùng từ vựng chính xác (goal, direction, motivation).

Ví dụ: Yes, I think dreams give us direction and motivation. For example, having a career dream helps me plan what skills to learn and what steps to take to achieve my goals.

Gợi ý: Sử dụng thì đúng và câu ngắn gọn: nêu rõ mong muốn, lý do ngắn và hành động bạn đang làm. Tránh lỗi thì và từ dư thừa. Thêm chi tiết cụ thể về việc bạn làm hàng ngày.

Ví dụ: Definitely. I have wanted this since I was a child, and it motivates me to improve every day. I take language courses and attend model UN events to gain relevant experience and move closer to my goal.

× The dreams I had is I have a dream, I wanna become a diplomat in the future and right now I keep this dream for me and I always try my best everyday, practice and improve myself to do this dream.

✓ The dream I have is that I want to become a diplomat in the future, and right now I keep this dream and always try my best every day, practicing and improving myself to achieve it.

The speaker mixed singular and plural: 'The dreams I had is I have a dream' is incorrect. Use singular 'The dream I have is' because one dream is described. 'Wanna' is informal; use 'want to'. 'Everyday' (adjective) should be 'every day' (adverbial phrase). Use gerund forms 'practicing and improving' after 'try my best' to show ongoing actions. Use 'achieve it' instead of 'do this dream'. Suggestion: Identify whether the noun is singular or plural and keep agreement, use standard forms ('want to'), and choose correct word forms ('every day', gerunds).

× Yes, are I share my dreams with my parents first, but actually they don't they don't support this dream for me because they think there are like a girl umm doing this dream.

✓ Yes, I share my dreams with my parents first, but actually they don't support this dream for me because they think girls should not do this job.

'Are I share' is ungrammatical; subject 'I' should come before the verb: 'I share'. Repetition 'they don't they don't' should be single. 'They think there are like a girl doing this dream' is unclear and uses wrong pronouns and structure; rephrase to 'they think girls should not do this job' to convey likely meaning. Suggestion: Use correct subject-verb order, avoid repetition, and use clear pronouns and consistent phrasing.

× Their uh doing sort of for me and I also share with my friends, but they don't have any experiences.

✓ They are not very supportive of me, and I also share with my friends, but they don't have any experience.

'Their uh doing sort of for me' is incorrect pronoun and structure; use 'They are not very supportive of me'. 'They don't have any experiences' should be 'any experience' (uncountable in this context). Suggestion: Use correct subject pronoun 'they' with a verb phrase, and use uncountable 'experience' when referring to general lack of experience.

× Yes, of course, uh, when we have a dreams we will have our goal or game we wanna do and this girl is or is like a umm negotiation, a navigation because we will have what we need to do to umm do this.

✓ Yes, of course. When we have a dream, we will have our goal that we want to pursue, and this could be, for example, negotiation or diplomacy because we will know what we need to do to achieve it.

Use 'a dream' not 'a dreams' (article-number mismatch). 'Goal or game' is unclear; 'goal that we want to pursue' is clearer. 'This girl is or is like' is irrelevant and ungrammatical; likely meaning is 'this could be'. 'Navigation' is wrong word; 'diplomacy' or 'negotiation' fits better. Use 'achieve it' rather than 'do this'. Suggestion: Check article + noun agreement and choose precise vocabulary.

× Definitely because I have this dreams when I hurt, when I were, when I was a child, so that I keep up this dream right now to improve myself every day to umm, achieve this dream and it's actually meaningful for me.

✓ Definitely, because I had this dream when I was a child, so I have kept this dream and I work to improve myself every day to achieve it; it is actually meaningful to me.

Use singular 'this dream' not 'this dreams'. 'When I were' is wrong; use 'when I was'. Tense consistency: 'I have this dreams when I hurt' is unclear; better 'I had this dream when I was a child'. Use present perfect 'I have kept' or simple present 'I have kept this dream' to show continuity. 'Improve myself every day to achieve it' is clearer. Suggestion: Maintain singular/plural agreement, correct past tense forms, and keep tense consistent to express ongoing commitment.