Dreams— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: Be clearer and more natural. Start with a direct topic sentence, correct repetitive words and unclear phrase "at the NI", and give one or two concise supporting details using linking words. Aim for 2–4 sentences total.

Ví dụ: Yes, I can remember some of my dreams. Usually I recall them when I wake up after a deep night's sleep, especially in the morning, but I rarely remember dreams in the afternoon or evening.

Gợi ý: Avoid contradictions and double negatives. Give a clear direct answer then support it with one or two logical reasons using linking words. Keep sentences concise and correct grammar.

Ví dụ: No, I usually don't share my dreams with others because I often forget them soon after waking. Also, I'm not very interested in other people's dreams since they don't affect my life.

Gợi ý: Make your reasoning more precise and remove filler words. Start with a clear topic sentence, then explain with a specific example and linking words to show cause-effect.

Ví dụ: Yes, I think dreams can have meanings. For example, if someone spends a lot of time worrying about an upcoming exam, they might dream about taking the exam, which suggests their mind is processing that concern.

Gợi ý: Be concise and better organized. Begin with a direct statement, then list concrete goals in order using linking words. Correct awkward phrases like "this stream" and reduce repetition.

Ví dụ: Yes, I definitely want my dreams to come true. Specifically, I hope to study at a good college in Australia, return to India afterwards, and then start a company that creates jobs for at least ten people.

× Yes, sometimes I remember my dream when I wake up after having a good sleep.

✓ Yes, sometimes I remember my dreams when I wake up after having a good sleep.

The student used singular 'dream' but refers to dreams in general; use plural 'dreams' for habitual actions. Also maintain subject-verb agreement with plural noun in context.

× Mostly when I sleep at the NI in the nights.

✓ Mostly when I sleep at night.

The phrase 'at the NI' is unclear and likely a mistake. Use the standard preposition 'at night' to refer to nighttime in general. Remove unnecessary article 'the' and the incorrect 'NI'.

× I remember my dreams in the morning, not not in the afternoons or evenings.

✓ I remember my dreams in the morning, not in the afternoons or evenings.

There is a repeated word 'not not' which is a mistake. Also use plural 'afternoons' and 'evenings' to indicate general times of day. Maintain parallel structure.

× No, I don't share my dreams with others because I myself forget my dream.

✓ No, I don't share my dreams with others because I often forget my dreams myself.

Use 'often' for habitual action and keep noun number consistent: 'dreams' plural. Position 'myself' after the verb phrase for natural emphasis.

× Also I don't listen to others dreams, are not interested in their dreams because it doesn't have to do nothing with me.

✓ Also, I don't listen to others' dreams and am not interested in them because they have nothing to do with me.

Correct conjunction use: join clauses with 'and'. Use possessive form 'others'' for others' dreams. Use 'am not' for first-person and avoid double negative 'doesn't... nothing' — use 'have nothing to do with me.' Ensure subject-verb agreement 'they have'.

× So yes.

✓ So no, I don't share them.

The student answered 'So yes' which contradicts previous negative statements. Provide a response consistent with context. If keeping 'So yes' as colloquial agreement, clarify intent; here correction aligns logically: 'So no, I don't share them.'

× Yes, I think dreams have a special meaning because when a person thinks continuously about something in the day, uh, so he usually dreams about it.

✓ Yes, I think dreams have a special meaning because when a person thinks continuously about something during the day, they usually dream about it.

Use 'during the day' instead of 'in the day' for natural collocation. Avoid gender-specific pronoun 'he'; use singular 'they' for a general person. Remove filler 'so' which is unnecessary.

× Yes, I want my dreams to come true because I usually dream about studying in a good College in Australia and coming back to India, then establishing a company where I can provide employment for at least 10 people.

✓ Yes, I want my dreams to come true because I usually dream about studying at a good college in Australia, then coming back to India and establishing a company where I can provide employment for at least ten people.

Use 'study at' for institutions and lowercase 'college' unless it is a proper name. Use consistent parallel gerunds: 'studying... then coming back... establishing'. Spell out small numbers in prose: 'ten'. Use commas and conjunctions for clarity.

× So yes, this stream I want this dream to come true.

✓ So yes, in short, I want this dream to come true.

The original phrase 'this stream I want this dream to come true' is ungrammatical and unclear. Replace with a concise, grammatical phrase 'in short, I want this dream to come true' to convey the intended meaning.