Part 1
Giám khảo
Can you remember the dreams you had?
Thí sinh
No, not really. Honestly, I never remember the dream that I have I have ever had.
Giám khảo
Do you share your dreams with others? (or are you interested in others' dreams?)
Thí sinh
Yes, of course, if I have some string stream, uh, maybe I will share share the them with my friends.
Giám khảo
Do you think dreams have special meanings?
Thí sinh
No, not really. I don't think dreams have some severe meaning. I think that dreams are the refraction of the things what happened in the day.
Giám khảo
Do you want to make your dreams come true?
Thí sinh
Yes, of course, if I have some excellent, uh, dream, uh, uh, I got a lot of money. So in that opinion, I really want to, I really want to make my dream come true.
Can you remember the dreams you had?
Điểm: 60.0Gợi ý: 回答要更直接并修复语法和重复的问题。可以用一到两句说明通常不记得梦,并简短说明原因或例子以丰富内容。注意避免重复词汇和结巴。
Ví dụ: Not really. I rarely remember my dreams — maybe once every few months — because I usually wake up quickly and forget them.
Do you share your dreams with others? (or are you interested in others' dreams?)
Điểm: 55.0Gợi ý: 回答要清晰表达愿意分享的条件,并用适当词汇替换口误(如“strange dream”)。可加一句说明会在什么情况下分享以及对别人梦的兴趣。
Ví dụ: Yes, I do. If I have a strange or vivid dream, I usually tell my friends because it’s fun to compare interpretations.
Do you think dreams have special meanings?
Điểm: 65.0Gợi ý: 语法需改进并使用更自然的表达,例如用“reflection”代替“refraction”。可以给出简短理由或例子支持观点,并用连接词使句子更流畅。
Ví dụ: Not really. I think dreams are more like reflections of things that happened during the day, so they usually don’t have a deep meaning.
Do you want to make your dreams come true?
Điểm: 58.0Gợi ý: 回答要具体并避免重复和结巴。明确说明你指的“dream”是目标而非梦境,并举例说明如何实现或为什么希望实现。用一到两句清楚表达愿望和理由。
Ví dụ: Yes, I do. If my dream is to become wealthy or successful, I would work hard and save money to make it happen.
× No, not really. Honestly, I never remember the dream that I have I have ever had.
✓ No, not really. Honestly, I never remember the dreams I've ever had.
原句有冗余和结构混乱:"the dream that I have I have ever had" 重复且时态不当。应使用现在完成时的缩写形式 "I've ever had" 表示到现在为止曾经做过的事;并把单数 "the dream" 改为复数 "the dreams" 更符合语境(通常指多次做的梦)。建议合并为一句或分成两句以保持清晰。
× Yes, of course, if I have some string stream, uh, maybe I will share share the them with my friends.
✓ Yes, of course. If I have some strong dreams, maybe I will share them with my friends.
原句有几处问题:1) "some string stream" 似为口误,应为 "some strong dreams" 或更自然的 "some vivid dreams";2) 多余重复单词 "share share";3) "the them" 中含多余定冠词。根据语境用复数 "dreams",去掉重复并移除多余冠词。建议说话时注意发音和避免重复词。
× No, not really. I don't think dreams have some severe meaning. I think that dreams are the refraction of the things what happened in the day.
✓ No, not really. I don't think dreams have any deep meaning. I think that dreams are a reflection of things that happened during the day.
原句问题:1) "some severe meaning" 用词不当,"severe" 不适合修饰 "meaning",应使用 "deep" 或 "significant";2) "the refraction of the things what happened" 中 "refraction" 用错(光的折射),应为 "reflection"(反映);3) 从句中 "the things what happened" 语法错误,应改为 "things that happened";4) "in the day" 更自然为 "during the day"。建议学习常见搭配(collocations),如 "deep meaning", "reflection of"。
× Yes, of course, if I have some excellent, uh, dream, uh, uh, I got a lot of money. So in that opinion, I really want to, I really want to make my dream come true.
✓ Yes, of course. If I have an excellent dream, for example, that I got a lot of money, then I really want to make my dream come true.
原句时态和连贯性问题:"if I have some excellent ... I got a lot of money" 中条件句和结果句时态不一致。条件从句用现在或虚拟语气时,后句应用将来时或情态动词(e.g. "I would get" 或 "I got" 需用虚拟结构)。此处更自然的表达是举例说明("for example, that I got a lot of money")并用完整句子连接。另有冠词和词序问题:"some excellent dream" 应为 "an excellent dream"。建议理清条件句时态规则并练习连接词使用。