Birthday— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: Be more direct and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, reduce fillers (uh, umm), and add one or two specific details about how you celebrate. Use linking words for coherence (for example, 'so' or 'usually').

Ví dụ: I usually keep my birthday low-key. Because my mother wants me to invite friends, I often prepare a small cake and have a few guests over, so we can chat and watch a movie together.

Gợi ý: Give a clear topic sentence and expand with specific details and one linking phrase. Replace fillers and correct collocations (say 'trampoline park' and 'cinema').

Ví dụ: When I was young I had big birthday parties. For example, I once invited about 20 friends and we celebrated at a cinema and at a trampoline park, which were my favorite times because everyone was energetic and we played games afterwards.

Gợi ý: Answer directly then explain reasons with clearer grammar and fewer repetitions. Use linking words ('however', 'because') correctly and avoid vague phrases like 'different possibilities.' Provide one specific example of how you treat that day.

Ví dụ: I don't think it's especially important to celebrate my birthday. However, because my mother prefers celebrations, she usually organizes a small gathering; I still treat it as an ordinary day and prefer to relax at home or meet one or two close friends.

Gợi ý: Be honest but concise. Start with a clear topic sentence ('I'm not an expert in Chinese traditions') then offer a plausible, specific example (Confucius) and explain why that person's birthday might be important. Avoid incorrect names and vague phrases.

Ví dụ: I'm not an expert in Chinese history, but I think people may celebrate the birthdays of influential figures such as Confucius. For instance, Confucius is an important philosopher, so his birthday could be honoured because of his cultural and educational impact.

× my mom is always demanding me for, uh, inviting my friends

✓ my mom is always demanding that I invite my friends

The verb 'demand' requires a clause with 'that' plus a subject and base verb (demand that I invite), or 'demand someone do' in formal use. 'Demanding me for inviting' is incorrect. Use 'demanding that I invite my friends' or 'asking me to invite my friends'. Suggestion: Use 'demand that I do' or 'ask me to do' patterns.

× that's all I do is preparing cake and eat it

✓ all I do is prepare cake and eat it

After the cleft 'all I do is', the bare infinitive (base form) is used: 'all I do is prepare'. Using 'preparing' is incorrect. Keep parallel structure with 'eat' which is base form; use 'prepare' for consistency. Suggestion: Use base verb after 'all I do is'.

× There were big parties.

✓ There were big parties

Sentence is acceptable but redundant with plural 'parties' and 'there were' is correct. No change needed; keep as is. However if intended to refer to 'a big party' when young, use 'There were big parties' is fine. (No grammatical correction required)

× we had parties at cinema, at trampoline Park

✓ we had parties at the cinema and at the trampoline park

Use definite article 'the' with 'cinema' and 'trampoline park' when referring to specific places. Use 'and' to connect items; capitalize 'Park' incorrectly. Also include 'the' before both nouns. Suggestion: Use 'at the cinema' and 'at the trampoline park'.

× I suppose that there was, umm, there were my favorite times

✓ I suppose those were my favorite times

The original mixes 'there was' and 'there were' awkwardly. Use 'those were my favorite times' to refer back to the events. 'I suppose that' can be shortened to 'I suppose'; 'those' correctly points to plural 'times'. Suggestion: Use a clear subject ('those') rather than existential 'there'.

× my mom thinks in the opposite way

✓ my mom thinks the opposite

Native phrasing is 'thinks the opposite' or 'thinks differently'; 'in the opposite way' is wordy and less natural. Also 'in the opposite way' is not ungrammatical but less idiomatic. Suggestion: Use 'thinks the opposite' or 'thinks differently'.

× she wants for me the best

✓ she wants the best for me

Word order is incorrect: 'wants the best for me' is the normal phrasing. 'Wants for me the best' is ungrammatical. Suggestion: Place the object phrase after the verb: 'wants the best for me'.

× she provides me with a different possibilities

✓ she provides me with different possibilities

The noun 'possibilities' is plural, so 'a' should be removed. 'Different' already modifies the plural noun. Suggestion: Use 'different possibilities' or 'a different possibility' if singular intended.

× it should be spent as the other ones

✓ it should be spent like the other days

'As the other ones' is awkward; use 'like the other days' or 'like other days' to compare days. Also 'ones' is vague; specify 'days'. 'Spent like the other days' is natural. Suggestion: Use 'like the other days'.

× I'm not fond of history of China

✓ I'm not fond of the history of China

Use the definite article 'the' with 'history of China' to refer to that specific history. 'Fond of' requires a noun phrase: 'the history of China'. Suggestion: Use 'the history of China'.

× this dates back to ancient times for someone like Kunfuzzi and others who made a huge impact on the development

✓ these dates back to ancient times, for someone like Confucius and others who made a huge impact on development

First, 'this/these' number should match 'dates'; refer to 'these' or 'this' depending on context. The name 'Confucius' was misspelled as 'Kunfuzzi'. Also 'the development' is vague; omit 'the' before 'development' or specify what development. 'Dates back to ancient times' is correct phrase. Suggestion: Use 'these dates back' only if plural referent, otherwise 'this dates back'. Correct proper names and article use.