Science— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: Your answer is clear and relevant but a bit long and slightly redundant. Start with a concise topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details. Avoid repeating phrases like "I love." Use a linking word to connect the ideas.

Ví dụ: Yes, I do. I particularly enjoy chemistry and physics because they help me understand everyday phenomena; for example, I use basic physics principles when fixing household items and chemistry when cooking.

Gợi ý: Good personal detail, but the sentence is wordy and has some grammar issues. Begin with a direct time reference, then give one specific example. Use past tense consistently and avoid filler words like "especially I think."

Ví dụ: I started learning about science when I was about six. In kindergarten my teacher showed simple experiments, like mixing vinegar and baking soda, which sparked my interest.

Gợi ý: Content is relevant but expression is unclear and repetitive. Avoid words like "unfortunately" unless you explain why. Be precise about what you find difficult and use correct terminology (e.g., "organic chemistry" and "how reactions change atoms or molecules"). Keep to two or three sentences maximum.

Ví dụ: I am most interested in chemistry, particularly organic chemistry. Although I find reaction mechanisms challenging, I enjoy learning how molecules transform in everyday processes like digestion and cooking.

Gợi ý: Good concrete example, but grammar and repetition weaken the answer. Use past tense consistently and remove repeated phrases. Add one specific detail about what you did or learned to strengthen the response.

Ví dụ: I participated in a school competition to build a small solar charger from recycled materials. We learned to assemble solar cells and discovered ways to reduce electronic waste by reusing components.

Gợi ý: The answer is confusing and contains contradictions and unclear phrasing. Decide on a clear stance (like or dislike), explain briefly why, and give a brief exception. Use correct vocabulary: 'science programs' rather than 'sciences, movies or dramas.'

Ví dụ: Not really. I find many science programs quite technical and difficult to follow, although I sometimes watch documentaries that explain concepts clearly with visuals.

Gợi ý: Your idea is socially aware, but the answer is unfocused and repetitive. Start with a clear direct response about visitation patterns, then support it with a brief reason or observation. Avoid referencing races in a vague way; say "people of different backgrounds" and give a specific reason why museums attract visitors.

Ví dụ: Yes, many people visit science museums. Visitors come from different backgrounds because exhibits are hands-on and educational, which appeals to families and students alike.

× Yes, I love learning about science, especially about the chemistry and physics of my surroundings, and I love to apply the knowledge in my daily life.

✓ Yes, I love learning about science, especially chemistry and physics in my surroundings, and I love to apply that knowledge in my daily life.

The definite article 'the' before 'chemistry and physics' is unnecessary when referring to subjects in general. 'About the chemistry and physics of my surroundings' is wordy; use 'chemistry and physics in my surroundings'. Also replace 'the knowledge' with 'that knowledge' for clarity and natural phrasing. Grammar problem type ID: 17

× Luckily I was exposed to the subject ever since I was a child, especially I think it was when I was 6 because I went to kindergarten and the teacher there taught me on how science works.

✓ Luckily I have been exposed to the subject since I was a child; I think it started when I was six because I went to kindergarten and the teacher there taught me how science works.

Use present perfect 'have been exposed' with 'since' to show an action beginning in the past and continuing to the present. 'Ever since' is redundant with 'luckily' and awkward; 'since' is sufficient. Say 'six' instead of numeric '6' in formal sentence. Do not say 'taught me on how'; the correct phrase is 'taught me how'. Grammar problem type ID: 6

× Unfortunately, it is chemistry, even though I find it hard to learn, especially about the organic and how they convert from one guess from one atom to another atom, but it was interesting.

✓ Unfortunately, it is chemistry, even though I find it hard to learn, especially organic chemistry and how atoms rearrange, but I find it interesting.

'The organic' is not a correct noun phrase; use 'organic chemistry'. 'How they convert from one guess from one atom to another atom' is ungrammatical and unclear; clarify as 'how atoms rearrange' or 'how molecules change'. Keep tense consistent: present 'I find it interesting' rather than 'it was interesting'. Grammar problem type ID: 12

× It is interesting to know that those things exist in our life even though we cannot see it.

✓ It is interesting to know that those things exist in our lives even though we cannot see them.

Pronoun agreement: 'those things' is plural, so use plural pronoun 'them' not 'it'. Also use 'our lives' (plural) to match common collocation when referring to multiple people. Grammar problem type ID: 12

× I once joined a competition on how to create a solar energy from recycled items, which was fascinating because I get to know more about how we can reduce the wastage of we can reduce the waste.

✓ I once joined a competition about how to create solar energy from recycled items, which was fascinating because I learned more about how we can reduce waste.

Use 'about' rather than 'on' for the topic of a competition. 'Create a solar energy' should be 'create solar energy' (no article). Remove redundant phrase 'the wastage of we can reduce the waste' and replace with 'reduce waste'. Use past tense 'learned' to match 'I once joined'. Grammar problem type ID: 11

× Honestly I hate watching sciences, movies or dramas or films because I find it hard to understand why the flow of the story is like that are like that, but I've watched them sometimes if I wanted to.

✓ Honestly, I hate watching science programs, movies, or dramas because I find it hard to understand the flow of the story, but I watch them sometimes if I want to.

'Sciences' is incorrect here; use 'science programs' or 'science shows'. Remove duplicated 'or films' and redundant phrase 'is like that are like that'. Use simple present 'I watch' and 'if I want to' for habitual or conditional actions. Add commas for clarity. Grammar problem type ID: 13

× MMM For now, I think that not only Chinese people enjoy themselves in a Science Museum but also other races such as Indians and Malay.

✓ For now, I think that not only do Chinese people enjoy themselves in science museums, but people of other ethnicities, such as Indians and Malays, do as well.

Use correct correlative structure 'not only... but also' and invert the auxiliary verb 'do' after 'not only' for standard word order. 'Science Museum' should be plural 'science museums' unless referring to a specific museum. 'Malay' should be 'Malays' or 'Malay people' to refer to the ethnic group. 'Other races' is better phrased as 'other ethnicities' or 'other groups'. Grammar problem type ID: 26

× They also find science fascinating and interesting to link.

✓ They also find science fascinating and interesting to engage with.

The phrase 'interesting to link' is awkward and ungrammatical. A more natural verb with 'interesting' is 'engage with' or 'relate to'. Choose 'engage with' to mean people enjoy interacting with science. Grammar problem type ID: 13

× Instead of focusing on one race, we have to look at another race also.

✓ Instead of focusing on one group, we should also consider others.

'A n other race also' is repetitive and slightly awkward. Use 'group' or 'ethnic group' and restructure to 'we should also consider others' for conciseness and natural speech. Maintain inclusive language. Grammar problem type ID: 26