Science— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: 문장이 어색하고 중복 표현(‘I had strongly, I had strongly interest’)이 있으며, 직접적인 주제 문장 후에 구체적이고 논리적인 뒷받침이 부족합니다. 더 자연스럽게 말하려면 간결한 주제문을 제시한 뒤, 언제부터 관심이 있었는지와 관련 경험(예: 학업 전공 변화)을 한두 문장으로 구체적으로 설명하세요. 연결어(for example, so, because 등)를 사용하여 흐름을 개선하세요.

Ví dụ: Yes, I do. I was interested in natural science and mechanical engineering from a young age, and I studied science through high school. For example, I focused on science courses until my third year of high school before I later considered fashion design.

Gợi ý: 표현이 단편적이고 어색한 구문이 있습니다(‘decided to be on engineer’, ‘So I really. So I started’). 시간 정보를 더 명확히 제시하고 경험을 구체적으로 연결하세요. 연결어(so, therefore, because)와 정확한 시제 사용으로 문장을 매끄럽게 만드세요.

Ví dụ: I started learning about science when I was very young, around first grade. For example, building plastic models and Lego sets sparked my interest and made me want to become an engineer, so I began focusing more on natural science at school.

Gợi ý: 내용은 구체적이지만 중복·비어있는 표현(‘in recently’, ‘how they react, how they react’)과 문장 끝 처리 미숙함이 보입니다. 간결한 주제문 뒤에 구체적 이유(예: 반응 메커니즘, 응용 분야)를 연결하고, 현재형·미래형을 정확히 사용하세요.

Ví dụ: Recently, I'm interested in the chemistry of natural dyeing processes, especially how dyes react to sunlight and other environmental factors. If I have the chance, I would like to study the reaction mechanisms and how to make dyeing more stable in different weather conditions.

Gợi ý: 발음적 망설임(‘uh, honestly’), 단어 선택 오류(‘photo polio’, ‘late to maturity process’)와 문장구조 혼란이 있습니다. 활동을 명확히 서술하고 그 활동에서 무엇을 배웠는지, 어떠한 노력을 했는지(예: 영상을 시청, 실험 반복)를 구체적으로 설명하세요.

Ví dụ: When preparing my photo portfolio, I experimented with natural dyeing techniques, but I found I needed more chemistry knowledge to make the colors stable. Therefore, I watched educational videos and read articles about dyeing processes to improve my results.

Gợi ý: 문법 오류(‘I I strongly had interested’, ‘church science’), 시제 혼동(‘if I have free time, I used to watch’)과 불명확한 표현이 있습니다. 현재의 습관을 말할 때는 현재 시제를 쓰고, 구체적인 예시(어떤 프로그램, 주제)를 덧붙여 자연스럽게 만드세요.

Ví dụ: Yes, I do. I have always been interested in science and engineering, so I often watch science documentaries in my free time. For example, I enjoy programs about space exploration and technology innovations.

Gợi ý: 질문이 특정 국가에 관한 것이라면 모른다고 솔직히 말하는 것은 괜찮지만, 답변 후 관련 보편적 관찰을 더 간결하고 정확하게 제시하세요. 시제·전치사 오류(‘visited to science archive’, ‘learn about more specifically about’)를 수정하고 연결어를 사용해 문장을 정돈하세요.

Ví dụ: I'm not sure about China, since I'm Korean, but in Korea many people visit science museums to broaden their horizons and to learn more about topics like space and technology.

× Yes, of course, when I was young, I had strongly, I had strongly interest in natural science and mechanical engineering.

✓ Yes, of course. When I was young, I was very interested in natural science and mechanical engineering.

The original uses 'had strongly interest', which is incorrect for describing a past state. Use the past simple 'was interested' with the adjective 'interested' and an adverb 'very' for emphasis. Also remove duplicated phrase 'I had strongly'. Suggestion: Use 'was interested in' for past interest and place adverb before adjective (e.g., 'very interested').

× So I really love to study in science until high school, third grade before people think to fashion design.

✓ So I really loved studying science until the third year of high school, before I decided to study fashion design.

Mixes present 'love' with past context; use past tense 'loved'. Use gerund 'studying' rather than 'to study in'. Specify 'the third year of high school' and use 'decided' instead of unclear 'people think to'. Suggestion: Match verb tense to time frame and use common collocations: 'loved studying', 'decided to study fashion design'.

× When I was young, I was fascinated by assembling with plastic model and Legos, so I decided to be on engineer.

✓ When I was young, I was fascinated by assembling plastic models and Legos, so I decided to become an engineer.

Use 'assembling plastic models' (no 'with') and plural 'models'. 'Become' is the correct verb for a career decision; 'be on engineer' is ungrammatical. 'Fascinated' is correct past participle here. Suggestion: Use 'become an engineer' and 'assemble plastic models'.

× So I really. So I started to concentrate on my studying about natural science, maybe elementary school 1st grade.

✓ So I really did. I started to concentrate on studying natural science, maybe from first grade in elementary school.

Fragment 'So I really.' is incomplete. Use 'I really did' if confirming. 'Concentrate on my studying about' is awkward; use 'concentrate on studying' and clarify time 'from first grade'. Suggestion: Avoid sentence fragments and use natural prepositions like 'from first grade'.

× Uh, in recently, I, and in recently I'm interested in chemistry behind natural dyeing process, uh, how they react, how they react to sunlight or the natural elements like the wind and the weather.

✓ Recently, I have been interested in the chemistry behind natural dyeing processes, how they react to sunlight and natural elements like wind and weather.

Use 'recently' (not 'in recently') and present perfect continuous 'have been interested' for ongoing interest. 'Natural dyeing process' should be plural if speaking generally. Remove repeated phrases and use 'and' instead of 'or' for list. 'How they react to sunlight and natural elements' is clearer. Suggestion: Use 'Recently, I have been interested in...' and pluralize general nouns when appropriate.

× So if I have chance to learn about science, I will try to learn about.

✓ So if I have the chance to learn about science, I will try to learn more about it.

Missing article 'the' before 'chance'. Sentence ends incompletely 'learn about' needs an object; add 'more about it'. Suggestion: Use 'have the chance' and complete the verb phrase with an object.

× Uh, honestly, uh, when I prepared my photo polio, I tried to use natural dyeing process, but it requires a lot of chemistry information to use it more effectively.

✓ Honestly, when I prepared my photo portfolio, I tried to use natural dyeing processes, but they require a lot of chemical knowledge to be used more effectively.

'Photo polio' seems to be 'photo portfolio'. Use plural 'processes' for general methods. 'Chemistry information' is unnatural; use 'chemical knowledge'. Use passive 'to be used' or active rephrase. Suggestion: Choose correct vocabulary ('portfolio') and collocations ('chemical knowledge').

× So I try to watch educational videos late to maturity process on my smart.

✓ So I try to watch educational videos about the maturation process on my smartphone.

'Late to maturity process' is ungrammatical; use 'about the maturation process'. 'Smart' likely means 'smartphone'. Suggestion: Use clear noun phrases and appropriate device names ('smartphone').

× Yes, absolutely. When I was young, I I strongly had interested in the church science and mechanical engineering, but I still I I'm still interested in the kinds of science.

✓ Yes, absolutely. When I was young, I was strongly interested in natural science and mechanical engineering, and I am still interested in these kinds of science.

Use 'was interested' for past; 'strongly had interested' is incorrect. 'Church science' likely intended 'natural science'. Avoid duplicate pronouns 'I still I I'm still'. Use present 'am still interested' for ongoing state and 'these kinds of science' for reference. Suggestion: Use 'was interested' for past and 'am still interested' for present; avoid repetition.

× So if I have free time, I used to watch all science films like that you.

✓ When I had free time, I used to watch all kinds of science programs like that.

Mixes present 'if I have' with past habitual 'used to'. Match tense: 'When I had free time, I used to...' Also 'science films like that you' is unclear; 'programs like that' is natural. Suggestion: Use 'used to' with past context and 'programs' for TV content.

× I'm not sure what the detail because I'm a Korean, but when it comes to Korea most people visited to science archive to broaden their horizons and also to learn about more specifically about the science or outer spaces.

✓ I'm not sure about the details because I'm Korean, but in Korea most people visit science museums to broaden their horizons and to learn more specifically about science or outer space.

Use 'about the details' and 'I'm Korean' (no article). 'Visited to' should be 'visit' (present tense for general truth) and 'science archive' likely 'science museums'. 'Learn more specifically about science or outer space' is clearer; 'outer spaces' should be 'outer space'. Suggestion: Use 'in Korea most people visit' for habitual actions and correct noun choices ('science museums', 'outer space').