Sharing— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: 문장이 반복되고 음성적 충돌(어색한 유음, 중복 단어)이 있습니다. 질문에 직접 답한 뒤 구체적 예시와 간단한 이유를 덧붙이세요. 예: 한두 번의 중복 단어와 불필요한 'uh'를 줄이고, 'parents' 는 복수로 표현하세요. 또한 문장은 2~3개로 제한하고 연결어로 흐름을 매끄럽게 만드세요.

Ví dụ: Yes, my parents taught me to share when I was a child. For example, I often shared toys and snacks with my younger brother because my parents encouraged us to take turns and be considerate.

Gợi ý: 시제와 문장 구조가 혼동되어 있고 이유 표현이 어색합니다. 현재 습관을 말할 때는 현재 시제를 사용하세요. 또한 이유는 간결하게 'because'로 연결하고 구체적 상황을 추가하면 좋습니다.

Ví dụ: I usually share my snacks with friends. I do this because eating together feels more enjoyable, and sharing makes social time more pleasant.

Gợi ý: 의견은 명확하나 반복과 문법 오류가 있습니다. 'money is a personal thing'처럼 단수를 사용하고 불필요한 단어를 제거하세요. 이유를 하나 더 덧붙이면 답변이 설득력있어집니다.

Ví dụ: I don't think money is suitable for sharing because it's a personal matter. Also, sharing money can lead to misunderstandings, so people usually avoid it.

Gợi ý: 문장이 중복되고 시제가 혼용되어 있습니다. 최근의 행동을 말할 땐 간단한 현재완료나 과거 시제를 사용하세요. 또한 누가 누구에게 빌려줬는지 주어와 목적어를 명확히 하세요.

Ví dụ: Recently I shared my pencil with a friend while we were studying together. For instance, yesterday I lent her my pencil and eraser during our study session.

Gợi ý: 의도는 분명하지만 문장 구조와 관사 사용에 오류가 있습니다. 'good news'는 불가산이라 'a'를 빼고, 'talk to her'처럼 전치사를 사용하세요. 또한 간단한 이유를 추가하면 좋습니다.

Ví dụ: I would share good news with my mom first. She is very supportive, so I always want to tell her about important events before anyone else.

Gợi ý: 표현이 불명확하고 반복이 많습니다. 'share news about exams and my college major'처럼 구체적으로 말하고, 'opinions'나 'concerns' 같은 단어로 이유를 명확히 하세요. 문장은 2~3개로 간결하게 구성하세요.

Ví dụ: I usually share news about exams and my college major with friends. I often discuss our thoughts and concerns about courses and future plans, so we support each other.

× Yes, my parent, uh, taught me how to share with others.

✓ Yes, my parents taught me how to share with others.

'Parent' should be plural 'parents' because the question asks about both parents; subject and noun number must agree. Use plural form when referring to more than one person. Suggestion: Use 'parents' when referring to both mother and father.

× Uh, I have little brother brother, so I I try to share with him.

✓ I have a little brother, so I try to share with him.

Missing article 'a' and duplicate word 'brother'. English requires an indefinite article before a singular countable noun. Remove repeated word and extra filler. Suggestion: Use 'a little brother' for one younger sibling and avoid repetition.

× Umm I usually shared my snacks because of when I eat, when I ate together or it feel more happier or then when I ate alone.

✓ I usually share my snacks because when we eat together it feels happier than when I eat alone.

Mix of past and present tenses and wrong adjective/adverb forms. 'Usually' requires present simple 'share'. Use 'we eat together' and 'it feels happier' (or better: 'it is more enjoyable') and compare with 'when I eat alone'. Suggestion: Keep consistent present tense for habitual actions and use correct comparative forms.

× Uh, I think we oh, we shouldn't share money because all money is so personal things.

✓ I think we shouldn't share money because money is a very personal thing.

Wrong pluralization and article usage: 'all money is so personal things' is ungrammatical. 'Money' is an uncountable noun, so use singular 'thing' or 'is very personal'. Suggestion: Treat 'money' as uncountable and use 'is' plus singular complement.

× So it's not good example to example of sharing.

✓ So it's not a good example of sharing.

Redundant words and missing article: 'not good example to example' is incorrect. Use 'a good example of' to show an instance. Suggestion: Use 'a good example of' and avoid repeating words.

× Recently I shared my pencil with my friends when I when I study with my friends.

✓ Recently I shared my pencil with my friends when I was studying with them.

Tense mismatch: 'recently' suggests past simple 'shared' and the subordinate clause should use past continuous 'was studying'. Also avoid repetition 'with my friends'. Suggestion: Use past continuous for ongoing past actions and avoid repeating phrases.

× Yesterday I borrowed her a pencil and eraser.

✓ Yesterday I borrowed a pencil and an eraser from her.

Incorrect word order and missing preposition: English uses 'borrow ... from someone' and articles for singular countable nouns. 'Borrowed her a pencil' incorrectly suggests giving. Suggestion: Use 'borrowed a ... from her' and include appropriate articles.

× It's my mom or I want to share a good news when it comes, I want to talk her first.

✓ It would be my mom; when I have good news, I want to tell her first.

Problems: 'a good news'—'news' is uncountable so no 'a'; 'talk her' should be 'tell her'. Also tense/conditional phrasing improved with 'would be' or 'it is my mom'. Suggestion: Use 'news' without an article and the verb 'tell' for sharing information.

× I share with my friends about the test and major my college college major.

✓ I share with my friends about tests and my college major.

Redundancy and word order: 'major my college college major' is repetitive; use plural 'tests' if general, and 'my college major' for clarity. Suggestion: Remove repetition and order modifiers correctly: 'my college major'.

× I have many thoughts this about this day so I talk about my friends.

✓ I've been thinking about many things these days, so I talk with my friends about them.

Awkward phrasing and wrong time expression: 'many thoughts this about this day' is ungrammatical. Use 'these days' for current period, and 'talk with my friends about them' clarifies the object. Suggestion: Use natural time expressions like 'these days' and refer back to 'things' with 'them'.