Sharing— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: Be more concise and correct grammar; start with a clear topic sentence, avoid repetition and filler words, and correct verb tenses. Provide one or two specific examples of how they taught you to share. Use linking words like “for example” or “they also” to make it coherent.

Ví dụ: Yes. My parents taught me to share from a young age and still emphasize generosity today. For example, they encouraged me to lend toys to classmates and to take turns playing games, which helped me learn patience and kindness.

Gợi ý: State the main idea directly, correct sentence structure and avoid fillers. Give a brief reason and a specific example. Use linking words like “because” or “for instance” to connect idea and reason.

Ví dụ: I prefer to share food with others because it creates a warm, social atmosphere. For instance, I often bring snacks to class and share them with classmates, which helps start conversations and makes meals more enjoyable.

Gợi ý: Be direct and use correct grammar (plural forms and verb agreement). Provide a brief reason and one concrete example of a boundary. Avoid excessive hesitation sounds.

Ví dụ: Highly personal items are not suitable for sharing because they contain private information. For example, I would never let someone use my phone or read my diary, and I avoid sharing deeply personal stories with casual acquaintances.

Gợi ý: Answer directly and succinctly: say what you shared, when, and why. Eliminate fillers and repetition, and include a brief result or feeling to make it complete.

Ví dụ: Yes. Recently I shared homemade cookies with my brothers during the weekend because we were watching a movie together. It made the evening more enjoyable and made me feel happy to make them smile.

Gợi ý: Start with a clear topic sentence and remove filler words. Give a specific reason and one brief example of a past time you shared news with them to support your statement.

Ví dụ: I would share good news with my best friend because she is very supportive and always celebrates my successes. For example, when I got a promotion last year, she was the first person I called and we celebrated together.

Gợi ý: Be more specific: categorize the news you share and give examples for each category. Avoid vague phrases like “anything in this world.” Use linking words such as “for example” or “such as.”

Ví dụ: I share all kinds of news with my friends: personal updates like job offers, bad news such as relationship problems, and interesting global stories like major scientific discoveries. For example, I recently told them about a new tech breakthrough I read about online.

× Yes, my parents have always encouraged me to show me toys with my friends when I was a child, and until now they still taught me to show my generosity in everyday life.

✓ Yes, my parents always encouraged me to share my toys with my friends when I was a child, and even now they continue to teach me to show generosity in everyday life.

Issues: incorrect verb tense and aspect (mixing present perfect 'have always encouraged' with 'when I was a child'), wrong verb phrase 'show me toys' should be 'share my toys', and inconsistent verbs 'still taught me' should be 'continue to teach me'. Suggestion: Use past tense for childhood actions ('encouraged') and present simple or present continuous for current habitual actions ('continue to teach'). Use correct verb collocations ('share toys', 'show generosity').

× Like UMM, they taught me how to be kind and considerate toward others.

✓ They taught me how to be kind and considerate toward others.

The filler 'Like UMM' is unnecessary and not grammatical in this context; it interrupts the sentence flow. Suggestion: Remove filler words and keep the sentence concise.

× The thing that I love, I would love to share with each other is definitely is food.

✓ The thing I would love to share is definitely food.

Problems: awkward pronoun/reciprocal 'share with each other' incorrectly used with 'I', and duplicated 'is'. Suggestion: Use a simple clause 'The thing I would love to share' and follow with the object 'is food'.

× I feel like it is. It's feel more cozy and delicious when you share foods with your friends and even as strangers.

✓ I feel that way. It feels cozier and more delicious when you share food with friends or even strangers.

Errors: sentence fragment 'I feel like it is.' and incorrect verb form 'It's feel'. Use comparative forms 'cozier' and uncountable noun 'food' (not 'foods'). Suggestion: Combine into a full sentence, use correct subject-verb agreement ('it feels'), and correct adjective comparative and noun usage.

× It makes a meal feel more, uh, delicious and even heartwarming.

✓ It makes a meal feel more delicious and even more heartwarming.

Minor stylistic issue: add parallel 'more' before 'heartwarming' for balance. Keep as present simple to describe general truth.

× Umm, I think that, uh, highly personal items are not suitable for sharing, umm, specifically your phone and your diary because they contains private data and personal thoughts.

✓ Um, I think that highly personal items are not suitable for sharing, specifically your phone and your diary, because they contain private data and personal thoughts.

Error: verb agreement 'they contains' should be 'they contain' (plural subject). Also remove filler words and punctuate properly. Suggestion: Use plural verb with plural pronoun 'they'.

× And I wouldn't share sensitive personal stories to someone because it makes me feel kind of uncomfortable.

✓ And I wouldn't share sensitive personal stories with someone because it makes me feel kind of uncomfortable.

Incorrect preposition 'share ... to someone' should be 'share ... with someone'. Suggestion: Use 'share with' for exchanging information.

× Umm, recently I think that I'd share some food with my brothers umm, as I always do, because sharing food is one of my favorite things to do, Favorite things to share with others too.

✓ Recently I shared some food with my brothers, as I always do, because sharing food is one of my favorite things to do.

Errors: tense mismatch 'recently I think that I'd share' incorrectly mixes present conditional with past time expression; change to past 'I shared'. Capitalization error 'Favorite' mid-sentence and redundant phrase. Suggestion: Use past simple for completed recent actions and keep sentence concise.

× I feel like umm, sharing foods makes me feel so good about myself too.

✓ I feel like sharing food makes me feel so good about myself too.

Use uncountable noun 'food' instead of plural 'foods'. Suggestion: Use 'sharing food' as a general activity.

× Umm, my best friend, she is a really supportive person and I know she would, uh, be happy for me.

✓ Um, my best friend is a really supportive person and I know she would be happy for me.

Redundant subject pronoun 'she' after 'my best friend' is unnecessary. Remove it for grammaticality and smoother flow.

× So I am super comfortable to share things with my best friends and I know she would be as excited as I am, so yeah.

✓ So I am super comfortable sharing things with my best friend, and I know she would be as excited as I am.

Inconsistency: 'best friends' (plural) then 'she' (singular). Make them consistent: 'best friend' singular to match 'she'. Also use 'comfortable sharing' rather than 'comfortable to share'.

× Good news, bad news and even global news. I wanna talk to my friends.

✓ Good news, bad news, and even global news. I want to talk to my friends about them.

Use formal 'want to' instead of colloquial 'wanna' in test contexts and add object 'about them' for clarity.

× I feel like I can talk about anything in this world.

✓ I feel like I can talk about anything in the world.

Use the idiomatic phrase 'in the world' (no 'this'). Suggestion: Use common collocation.

× So I don't have a specific news that I usually share with them.

✓ So I don't have specific news that I usually share with them.

'News' is uncountable and does not take 'a'. Remove 'a'. Suggestion: Use 'specific news' or 'a specific piece of news'.

× I would share a really general kind of news.

✓ I would share very general kinds of news.

Awkward phrase 'a really general kind of news' — 'news' uncountable; better: 'very general kinds of news' or 'very general news'. Suggestion: Use 'very general news' for simplicity.