Sharing— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: Improve grammatical accuracy and clarity. Begin with a clear topic sentence, avoid filler words (uh), use past tense consistently, and give a coherent specific example. Use one or two linking words to connect idea and example.

Ví dụ: Yes. My parents taught me to share from a young age. For example, when we had a house helper, my father encouraged me to share my toys and snacks with her daughter, saying “sharing is caring,” which helped me make friends and play together.

Gợi ý: Be more concise and consistent with tense; use linking words for clarity. Start with a general statement, then give two specific categories with brief supporting detail. Avoid repetition and fix verb agreement.

Ví dụ: It depends on the situation. When I was a child I usually shared toys and snacks with friends, whereas at school I often shared notebooks, pens and textbooks so we could study together.

Gợi ý: Clarify your opinion and give a specific reason why some items should not be shared. Use correct vocabulary and simple sentence structure. Avoid unclear phrases and ensure your example supports the main point.

Ví dụ: I think personal items like clothes are not suitable for sharing because sizes and hygiene vary. For example, I once lent a dress to a friend and afterwards it no longer fit me well and looked worn, so I prefer not to share my favourite clothes.

Gợi ý: Organize your answer: state the situation, explain reason briefly, and give one clear detail about how you feel. Fix tense and vocabulary (e.g., ‘board inside it’ and ‘native’ unclear). Avoid repetition and use linking words.

Ví dụ: Recently I have been sharing my single room with two roommates because the house is crowded and there is not enough space. Although it's a bit cramped, we communicate well and keep the room tidy, so I feel comfortable living together.

Gợi ý: Make a concise topic sentence and give two clear reasons why you would tell your husband first. Correct grammar (possessive, verb forms) and remove unclear phrases like “clear my eyes.” Use linking words to connect reasons.

Ví dụ: I would share good news with my husband first because he is very supportive and cares about me. For example, he always celebrates my achievements and helps me stay calm, so I would tell him immediately.

Gợi ý: Start with a clear general statement, then give two specific types of news with concise reasons. Fix vocabulary errors (e.g., 'high bend' unclear) and use correct tense. Use linking words like 'for example' and 'also'.

Ví dụ: It depends, but I usually share both happy and sad news with friends. For example, I tell them when I get high grades so they can celebrate with me, and I also tell them when I'm stressed or upset so they can offer advice and support.

× Yes, my parents teach me to share everything when I was a child, for instance, in our home, these, uh, our servant, uh, daughter.

✓ Yes, my parents taught me to share everything when I was a child; for instance, at home our servant's daughter...

The sentence uses present tense 'teach' but refers to a past time 'when I was a child', so past tense 'taught' is required. Use 'at home' instead of 'in our home' for natural phrasing and possessive for 'servant's daughter'. Combine clauses clearly with punctuation. Suggestion: use past tense verbs consistently when describing past events.

× So my, about, uh, for me at all and uh, she's trying that I need that toe.

✓ For me, she always tried to make sure I had what I needed.

Original is ungrammatical and incoherent. Rewritten to express intended meaning: use past tense 'tried' for past events and clear clause order 'she tried to make sure I had what I needed'. Avoid filler words and broken fragments. Keep subject-verb-object order.

× So my father said that, uh, sharing is caring and you share with them and you both will play with that toll.

✓ My father said, 'Sharing is caring; share with others and you will both play with the toy.'

Reporting speech about a past statement should use past reporting verb 'said' and keep quoted proverb 'sharing is caring'. Use 'toy' not 'toll'. Use 'share with others' and future 'will' is acceptable within the quoted advice; keep punctuation clear. Ensure correct nouns and spelling.

× Uh, actually it depend on the situations.

✓ Uh, actually it depends on the situation.

Subject-verb agreement: singular subject 'it' requires 'depends'. Use singular 'situation' for general statements or plural consistently; 'depends on the situation' is more natural. Avoid filler 'uh'.

× For instance, when I was a child, so I share my toys and moreover, uh, snacks with the friends.

✓ For instance, when I was a child, I shared my toys and snacks with my friends.

Describing past habits requires past tense 'shared' not present 'share'. Remove unnecessary 'so' and use 'my friends' instead of 'the friends'. Keep verb tense consistent.

× And when I was, uh, a younger, so I share my notebook with my friends, pens and books.

✓ When I was younger, I shared my notebook, pens, and books with my friends.

Incorrect article 'a younger' should be 'younger' without 'a'. Use past tense 'shared'. Use commas to list items and place 'with my friends' at end for clarity.

× I prefer clothes that are not suitable for sharing.

✓ I prefer clothes that are not suitable for sharing.

Sentence is grammatically acceptable but may be unclear; no article change needed. If meaning is 'I prefer not to share clothes', clearer: 'I prefer not to share my clothes.' However original fits grammar list; kept as is.

× For instance when I was a child so I give my pretty clothes to my friend and and when she bought so it unlikely it is like she use it very and the thing were I don't like it.

✓ For instance, when I was a child I gave my pretty clothes to a friend, and when she wore them they were not used the way I liked.

Use past tense 'gave' for past events. Remove redundant 'so' and correct awkward phrasing. 'She bought' seems wrong—likely 'she wore them'. Use 'they were not used the way I liked' to express dislike. Ensure pronouns agree with plural 'clothes' (use 'them').

× Just recently I share my room with my roommates because my board inside it, there are not enough space in the room.

✓ Just recently I shared my room with my roommates because my boarder moved in and there was not enough space in the room.

Use past tense 'shared' for a recent past action. Clarify 'board' to 'boarder' or 'roommate moved in'. Use 'there was not enough space' (singular 'space' takes 'was') or 'there were not enough spaces' if plural. Maintain tense consistency.

× So you I have a single room. So you share your room with the roommate.

✓ I had a single room, so I shared it with my roommates.

Original mixes 'you' and 'I' incorrectly. Maintain first person perspective consistent with speaker. Combine sentences to show cause and effect: 'I had... so I shared...'.

× So I have two roommates and I share room with them and what do I like? They are very native about the room.

✓ I have two roommates and I share a room with them. They are very particular about the room.

Add article 'a' before 'room'. Replace 'native' (incorrect word) with 'particular' or 'strict' to convey intended meaning. Use consistent tense and clear phrasing.

× The first person I would like to share good news with my husband because he's very protective and he care about me so much and I want to clear my eyes so I will definitely tell to him because he care about and more worried he appreciate my.

✓ The first person I would like to share good news with is my husband because he's very protective and cares about me, so I will definitely tell him; he cares and appreciates me.

Original lacks 'is' after 'with' and has subject-verb agreement errors ('he care' should be 'he cares'). Remove awkward phrases 'clear my eyes' and 'tell to him' (use 'tell him'). Clarify final clause: 'he cares and appreciates me'. Use punctuation to separate ideas.

× Actually it depends on the situations and sometimes we share happy news.

✓ Actually, it depends on the situation, and sometimes we share happy news.

Use singular 'situation' or plural consistently; 'depends' needs 's'. Add comma for clarity. Tense is present simple which is appropriate here.

× For instance when I get a high bend so I tell them that I got a high bends and moreover sometimes sad new, for example when I forget my everything and I was sad and I should share them.

✓ For instance, when I get a high grade I tell them that I got a high grade. Sometimes I also share sad news; for example, when I forgot everything and was sad, I would tell them.

Many errors: 'bend' likely 'grade'; maintain consistent tense—if describing past event use past 'got' or present 'get' consistently. Use singular 'grade' or 'grades' correctly. 'Forget my everything' should be 'forgot everything'. Use 'share sad news' and proper commas. Ensure verbs agree and tense is consistent.