Bike— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: Be more concise and natural. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid repetition ("as a fact" repeated), and add one specific supporting detail using a linking word. Keep it within 3–4 sentences.

Ví dụ: Yes, I did. It was my favourite bike because it was bright yellow, and I loved that colour as a child. For example, I used to ride it to the park every weekend with my friends.

Gợi ý: Remove hesitations and filler words, then give a clear topic sentence followed by a specific reason and a linking phrase. Use more precise vocabulary (e.g., "designated cycling paths") and limit to 2–3 sentences.

Ví dụ: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country because many parks have designated cycling paths. For instance, these paths allow cyclists to ride safely and comfortably away from pedestrians.

× Yes, actually. I had a bike when I was a child and to be honest it was my favorite bike because it was yellow and as a fact, as fact, yellow is my favorite color. So yes.

✓ Yes, actually. I had a bike when I was a child, and to be honest it was my favorite because it was yellow; in fact, yellow is my favorite color.

The original sentence has redundancy ('as a fact, as fact') and awkward phrasing. Also 'favorite bike' can be shortened to 'favorite' to avoid repetition. Use 'in fact' instead of 'as a fact' for natural phrasing. Punctuation was adjusted to separate clauses clearly. Keep past tense for having the bike and present tense for stating a general preference ('yellow is my favorite color'). Suggested improvement: remove repeated words, use 'in fact' for emphasis, and simplify repeated nouns.

× Yes, I think bikes are really popular in my country uh, here we have a lot of parks for uh, walking and also in these parks we have like a road where bikes can ride fluently.

✓ Yes, I think bikes are really popular in my country. We have a lot of parks for walking, and these parks often have paths where bikes can ride smoothly.

Problems: unnecessary filler words ('uh', 'like'), incorrect preposition 'for walking' is acceptable but phrasing improved; 'a road where bikes can ride fluently' is unnatural—use 'paths' and adverb 'smoothly' instead of 'fluently'. Also split into two sentences for clarity. 'Road' implies vehicular road rather than park path. Suggested improvement: remove fillers, choose appropriate nouns ('paths'), and use natural adverbs ('smoothly') to describe riding.