Bike— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: Be more concise and correct verb tenses, avoid filler words, and add one or two clear supporting details. Use past simple consistently for past events, correct verbs (couldn't), and reduce hesitations (uh, actually). Structure: topic sentence + brief detail + result. Keep within 3–4 sentences.

Ví dụ: Yes, I did. I remember crashing my bike on my very first ride to school because I was going downhill and couldn't control the brakes. As a result, I hit a wall and damaged the bike, but I wasn't badly hurt and learned to ride more carefully after that.

Gợi ý: Clarify meaning and use precise vocabulary. Avoid vague phrases and hesitations. Start with a clear topic sentence stating current popularity, then explain change with reasons and a comparison. Use linking words (however, nowadays, because) and correct terms (bicycle, e-bike, motorbike) to be specific.

Ví dụ: Bicycles were much more popular about 10 or 20 years ago, but nowadays they are less common in many cities. Instead, people often use electric bikes or motorbikes because they are faster and more convenient for commuting, especially in busy traffic.

× I used to break it on my first ride, uh, when I was going into school because, uh, I was actually going downhill and I cannot control the brake, so I just hit the wall and break it.

✓ I broke it on my first ride when I was going to school because I was going downhill and I could not control the brakes, so I hit the wall and broke it.

Mixed past/present tense and modal misuse: the student uses 'used to break', 'cannot', and 'break it' inconsistently while describing a past event. Use simple past consistently for completed past actions: 'broke' and 'could not'. Also pluralize 'brakes' because bikes typically have two or a set of brakes; 'hit the wall and broke it' keeps past-tense sequence. Suggestion: Use simple past for past stories (I broke, I was, I could not) and plural 'brakes'.

× It was definitely more popular, uh, before, like maybe 10 years or 20 years ago. However, today, uh, it is more popular with the BIC with the normal bike rather than the, uh, you know, bicycle.

✓ It was definitely more popular before, maybe 10 or 20 years ago. However, today the electric bike is more popular than the normal bicycle.

Awkward wording and lexical confusion: 'BIC' is unclear; likely meant 'e-bike' or 'electric bike'. The student mixes vague fillers and repeats 'with the'. Use correct comparative structure 'more popular than' and clear nouns. Keep past tense for 'was' and present for 'is' when contrasting past and present. Suggestion: Replace unclear terms with 'electric bike' or 'e-bike', remove filler words, and use 'more popular than' for comparisons.